视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence saying you enjoy taking pictures, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid hesitation sounds (uh, umm) and redundant phrases. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and use more natural vocabulary (e.g., "landscapes" or "scenes").

範例: Yes, I do. I've loved photography since I was a child and hope to become a professional someday. I enjoy capturing unique landscapes and everyday scenes because they preserve memories and reveal details you might miss at first glance.

建議: Answer directly and expand with one clear reason plus a specific example. Reduce fillers like "actually" and "uh." Use precise adjectives (e.g., "tranquil," "unspoiled") and include a short example to make the response more vivid.

範例: I prefer rural views because they feel calmer and less crowded than cities. For example, photos of rolling fields or a quiet lake remind me of clear air and bright sunlight, which helps me relax when I'm stressed.

建議: Clarify and correct phrases: avoid repetition and incorrect collocations (e.g., "a panoramic views," "connected to the wheels"). Give one clear reason and a short example. Use accurate expressions like "panoramic views" or "feel a strong connection to my homeland."

範例: I prefer views in my own country because I feel a strong connection to its landscapes. For instance, the wide plains and mountain ranges here remind me of my childhood and make photos feel more meaningful to me.

× Yes, really, I remember when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I remember when I was a child.

The original sentence includes 'really' which is conversational filler and not grammatically wrong, but removing it makes the sentence more natural. The verb 'remember' is present and correctly refers to a past time clause 'when I was a child', so no tense change is needed. Suggestion: avoid unnecessary fillers for clarity.

× I'd like to become a great photographer when I get older.

✓ I'd like to become a great photographer when I grow older.

'I'd like' (I would like) is correct for expressing desire. 'When I get older' is understandable but 'when I grow older' is a more natural collocation. Both are grammatically acceptable; this correction improves idiomatic usage.

× I'm fond of uh, photography and like to call it umm, pictures of nice and unique views.

✓ I'm fond of photography and like to take pictures of beautiful, unique views.

Original uses 'call it pictures of...' which is incorrect: one 'takes' pictures, not 'calls' photography that. 'Nice and unique' order is acceptable but 'beautiful, unique' is more natural. Remove fillers 'uh, umm'. Suggestion: use the verb 'take' with 'pictures' and choose natural adjective order.

× Actually, I prefer views in rural areas because I think they are purer and more peaceful.

✓ Actually, I prefer views in rural areas because I think they are purer and more peaceful.

Sentence is grammatically correct. 'Purer' and 'more peaceful' are valid comparative forms. No change needed.

× And so even by looking at the pictures of rural areas, uh, I feel the fresh air and sunshine.

✓ Even when I look at pictures of rural areas, I feel the fresh air and sunshine.

Changed 'by looking at the pictures' to the more natural 'when I look at pictures'. Removed filler 'uh'. Present simple 'I feel' is correct to describe a general reaction. Suggestion: use concise temporal clauses for clarity.

× I prefer views in my country.

✓ I prefer views in my country.

This sentence is correct and matches the present simple tense for preferences. No change needed.

× I I live in a vast country with a panoramic views.

✓ I live in a vast country with panoramic views.

There is a duplicated 'I I' — remove the extra 'I'. 'A panoramic views' mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'views'; remove the article 'a' to match plural noun 'views' or change to singular 'a panoramic view'. Suggestion: ensure articles agree with singular/plural nouns and eliminate repetitions.

× I think I'm connected to the wheels in my country more than other countries.

✓ I think I'm more connected to the culture of my country than to other countries.

The phrase 'connected to the wheels in my country' is unclear and likely a wrong word choice. 'Connected to the culture' or 'to my country' conveys intended meaning. Also compare 'than other countries' requires parallel structure 'than to other countries'. Suggestion: use appropriate noun (culture, people, traditions) and keep parallel prepositional structure.