视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: ปรับความถูกต้องและความชัดเจนของคำพูด: พยายามใช้ประโยคสั้นๆ ชัดเจน และตรงประเด็น แก้คำผิด (videos → views) และหลีกเลี่ยงการพูดซ้ำ ควรเริ่มด้วยประโยคหัวข้อที่ตอบคำถามโดยตรง แล้วตามด้วยเหตุผลสั้นๆ ใช้คำเชื่อมเมื่อจำเป็น เช่น because หรือ so เพื่อให้คิดเป็นระบบมากขึ้น

範例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because I find landscapes very calming. However, if a scene feels especially beautiful and rare, I prefer to watch it with my eyes rather than take a photo because I want to remember the moment naturally.

建議: ปรับความลื่นไหลและคำเชื่อม: ตอบตรงแล้วให้รายละเอียดเฉพาะเจาะจงมากขึ้น ลดการอ้ำอึ้งและคำซ้ำ ใช้ลำดับเหตุผลด้วยคำเชื่อมเช่น because, and, so และใส่คำศัพท์ที่ถูกต้อง (topic → atmosphere/traffic) เพื่อความชัดเจน

範例: I prefer rural views because I enjoy open skies, green fields, and mountains. The countryside feels peaceful and the air is cleaner, whereas urban areas often have many tall buildings, noise, and traffic that make me uncomfortable.

建議: ปรับไวยากรณ์และความชัดเจนของข้อมูล: แก้ tense และโครงสร้าง (have never go → have never been abroad), ลดการพูดซ้ำ ให้รายละเอียดเฉพาะเจาะจงจากสิ่งที่เห็น เช่นชื่อสถานที่หรือลักษณะ ใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อเชื่อมเหตุผลและตัวอย่าง

範例: I have never been abroad, so I can't say for sure, but I have seen beautiful scenery in other countries on social media. For example, photos of Sweden often show clear rivers and rugged mountains, which look very attractive to me.

× I love to look at different videos.

✓ I love to look at different views.

The student used 'videos' instead of 'views', which is a word choice error; also it does not fit the question about taking pictures of views. Use the noun 'views' to match meaning. Suggestion: choose vocabulary that matches context (view vs video).

× I think that's pretty but sometime if if it's too pretty and it's not happen often, I usually look at with my eyes because I think that's if I take the photo that e-mail is not beautiful animals.

✓ I think they're pretty, but sometimes if a view is too beautiful and it doesn't happen often, I usually look at it with my eyes because I think if I take a photo it won't be as beautiful.

Multiple issues: 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' (adverb form), repeated 'if if' is a duplication, 'it's not happen often' is incorrect tense and structure — use 'it doesn't happen often', 'look at with my eyes' needs an object: 'look at it with my eyes', 'that e-mail is not beautiful animals' is unintelligible and likely a word choice and sentence structure error; corrected to 'it won't be as beautiful'. Suggestions: simplify sentences, ensure adverbs use correct form, avoid repetition, include direct object for verbs like 'look at', and use negative present simple for habitual statements ('doesn't happen').

× If I look it's twice all the.

✓ If I look, it feels like I see it twice.

Original is ungrammatical and missing clear verb structure. 'It's twice all the' is not a correct English phrase. Correct by expressing intended meaning: 'it feels like I see it twice'. Suggestion: state the sensation or effect clearly (subject + verb + object/complement).

× I prefer view in rural areas because I like the sky, the grass, mountain and tree.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because I like the sky, the grass, the mountains and the trees.

'view' should be plural 'views' to match general preference (singular vs plural). Missing articles before 'mountain' and 'tree' — use definite articles for general natural features in a list: 'the mountains and the trees'. Suggestion: when listing multiple types of scenery, use plurals and be consistent with articles.

× I I actually I don't like the uh, building in the urban area.

✓ I actually don't like the buildings in urban areas.

Remove repeated 'I' and filler 'uh'. 'building' should be plural 'buildings' when speaking generally; 'in the urban area' is better as 'in urban areas' (general statement). Suggestion: avoid filler repetition and use plural nouns for general preferences.

× Like I don't like the topic that air in the urban area is made me feel uncomfortable.

✓ For example, I don't like the fact that the air in urban areas makes me feel uncomfortable.

Original mixes words incorrectly: 'topic that air' should be 'the fact that the air', 'is made me feel' is incorrect passive/tense construction — use active 'makes me feel'. Use 'urban areas' plural for generality. Suggestion: use fixed phrases like 'the fact that' and correct subject-verb order ('air makes me feel').

× I actually have never go out of the country before so I actually I don't know what the view of other country was,

✓ I have actually never gone out of the country before, so I don't know what the views in other countries are like,

Use present perfect 'have never gone' (past participle 'gone' required). Remove repeated 'I actually'. 'the view of other country was' has wrong tense and article; use plural 'views in other countries' and present 'are like' for general description. Suggestion: use present perfect for life experiences and pluralize 'countries' when speaking generally.

× but I have seen in social media like Will in Sweden that look like a mountain and river does look so beautiful.

✓ but I have seen on social media pictures from Sweden that show mountains and rivers and look very beautiful.

Use preposition 'on social media' not 'in social media'. 'like Will in Sweden' is unclear — interpreted as 'from Sweden' or 'pictures of Sweden'. 'that look like a mountain and river does look so beautiful' has subject-verb agreement and word order errors; corrected to 'pictures from Sweden that show mountains and rivers and look very beautiful'. Suggestion: use 'pictures from [country]' and ensure subject-verb agreement ('pictures ... look').