视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more grammatical, concise and use linking words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using connectors (for example, because/so). Avoid errors like 'to taking' and vague phrases like 'many more things'.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views, especially mountains and beaches, because they capture natural light and color. For example, I often photograph mountain sunsets to remember the atmosphere and share the images with friends.

建議: Provide a clear topic sentence and give specific reasons with correct grammar and linking words. Replace fillers (uh) and unclear phrases ('close to HR') with concrete details. Use one or two supporting reasons, e.g., tranquility and wildlife, and a short example.

範例: I prefer rural views because they are quieter and full of wildlife, which makes them relaxing. For instance, I like watching birds and farm animals while walking in the countryside.

建議: Be specific and correct grammar. Start with a direct statement, then explain why using linking words (because/so) and add a brief personal plan or example. Correct word forms ('other country' -> 'other countries' or 'another country').

範例: I prefer views in other countries, especially a place called Fisherland, because it has beautiful mountains and coastal scenery. I hope to visit there next year to relax and take photographs of the landscapes.

× Yes, I would like to taking picture of different views such as sceneries of mountains, beaches and future developments like buildings and many more things used to record them and see in future.

✓ Yes, I would like to take pictures of different views such as the scenery of mountains, beaches and new developments like buildings, and many other things to record and see in the future.

The phrase 'would like' is followed by the base form of the verb (infinitive without to), so use 'take' instead of 'taking'. 'Picture' should be plural ('pictures') when referring to multiple views. 'Sceneries' is uncommon; use 'the scenery' or 'scenic views'. 'Future developments' is clearer as 'new developments' or 'future developments', and add articles where needed. Use 'to record and see in the future' to express purpose. Suggestion: after 'would like' always use base verb, and ensure noun number matches countable items.

× I would prefer to view in rural area because it is close to HR have have many things like uh animals and many more.

✓ I would prefer to visit rural areas because they are close to nature and have many things like animals and more.

The verb 'view' is not the best collocation here; 'visit' or 'see' fits better. Use the plural 'rural areas' to match general preference. 'Close to HR' appears to be an error—likely 'close to nature' is intended. Remove repeated 'have'. Use 'they are' to agree with plural noun and 'have' for possession. Suggestion: choose correct preposition or verb ('visit rural areas'), use plural when speaking generally, and avoid repetitions.

× I prefer to view other country which is Fisherland.

✓ I prefer to visit another country, which is Fisherland.

When referring to a non-specific other country, use 'another country' or 'other countries' and the verb 'visit' is more natural than 'view'. Add a comma before the non-restrictive clause 'which is Fisherland'. Suggestion: use 'visit another country' and include proper punctuation for the clause.

× It has more beautiful places such as mountains and sceneries.

✓ It has many beautiful places such as mountains and scenic areas.

Use 'many' rather than 'more' when not comparing two items. 'Sceneries' is uncommon; 'scenic areas' or 'scenery' is preferred. Suggestion: use appropriate quantifier and natural noun choices ('many beautiful places', 'scenic areas').

× I would like to go in that place in future to relax my mind.

✓ I would like to go to that place in the future to relax my mind.

Use the preposition 'to' with the verb 'go' ('go to that place'), and include the article 'the' in 'in the future'. 'Go in that place' is incorrect. Also keep 'would like to' followed by base verb 'go'. Suggestion: use 'go to' for movement toward places and use 'in the future' or 'in future' with 'the' for natural English.