视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clearer and more grammatically correct. Start with a direct topic sentence that answers the question, then give one or two brief, specific reasons using linking words. Avoid irrelevant or unclear words (e.g. ‘you’, ‘lack’, ‘singing’) and keep to under five sentences. Use vocabulary relevant to photography and outdoor scenes.

範例: No, I don't really enjoy taking pictures of views. I prefer to relax and appreciate the scene in person, because taking photos can distract me from the experience. For example, when I visit a park I usually sit and enjoy the atmosphere instead of spending time taking lots of photos.

建議: Correct word choice and grammar, and use linking words for coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then add two specific reasons with correct vocabulary (e.g. ‘peaceful’, ‘fresh air’, ‘open fields’, ‘farmland’). Avoid incorrect adjectives like ‘painful’ and unclear phrases like ‘cow casting’.

範例: I prefer rural areas because they feel more natural and peaceful than cities. For example, I enjoy walking through open fields and farmland and watching cows grazing. The fresh air and quiet atmosphere help me relax.

建議: Give a concise direct answer and support it with clear, relevant reasons. Use linking words (e.g. ‘because’, ‘for example’) and correct noun forms (‘countries’, ‘views’). Avoid hesitations and incomplete sentences; be specific about what you enjoy seeing in other countries.

範例: I prefer views in other countries because they offer new sights and experiences I haven't seen before. For example, Vietnam has many scenic landscapes and cultural places I would like to visit, whereas in Thailand I am already familiar with most of the views.

× I don't really enjoy taking picture of you.

✓ I don't really enjoy taking pictures of you.

The noun 'picture' should be plural after 'taking' when referring to photos in general. Use 'pictures' to match count; also keep 'taking' which correctly uses the -ing form after 'enjoy'. Suggestion: Use 'taking pictures' when referring to multiple photos or the activity in general.

× I preferly lack and being patient with and outdoor.

✓ I tend to lack patience with outdoor activities.

'Preferly' is not a correct adverb; 'tend to' expresses inclination. 'Lack' needs an object ('patience'), and 'being patient with and outdoor' is ungrammatical. Reword to 'lack patience with outdoor activities.' Suggestion: Use 'I tend to lack patience with outdoor activities' for clarity.

× So I usually just enjoy the singing rather than trying to photograph it.

✓ So I usually just enjoy the singing rather than trying to photograph it.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable but may need clearer reference: 'the singing' is fine if context is a performance. No change required aside from ensuring the noun refers clearly. Suggestion: If meaning is general music, say 'enjoy music'.

× For example, whenever we see the park I sit and I saw that the atmosphere instead of taking lots of picture.

✓ For example, whenever we visit a park I sit and enjoy the atmosphere instead of taking lots of pictures.

Problems: 'see the park' should be 'visit a park'; 'I sit and I saw' mixes tenses—use 'sit and enjoy' (present habitual). 'Atmosphere' needs a verb 'enjoy' and 'picture' should be plural. Reorder for clarity. Suggestion: Use present simple for habits: 'whenever we visit a park I sit and enjoy the atmosphere instead of taking lots of pictures.'

× I prefer rural area because they feel more natural and painful than city.

✓ I prefer rural areas because they feel more natural and peaceful than the city.

'Rural area' should be plural 'rural areas' to match 'they'. 'Painful' is wrong word; intended 'peaceful'. Also add 'the' before 'city' or use 'cities'. Suggestion: 'I prefer rural areas because they feel more natural and peaceful than cities.'

× I enjoy seeing open field and farmland, and I often like watching cow casting as I walk.

✓ I enjoy seeing open fields and farmland, and I often like watching cows grazing as I walk.

'Open field' should be plural 'open fields' or 'an open field'. 'Cow casting' is incorrect; correct verb is 'grazing'. Use plural 'cows' to match general observation. Suggestion: 'open fields' and 'cows grazing'.

× the Fed air and peaceful atmosphere help me.

✓ The fresh air and peaceful atmosphere help me relax.

'the Fed air' is garbled; likely 'fresh air'. Capitalize sentence start. 'Help me' is vague—add 'relax' to complete idea. Maintain present simple for habitual effect. Suggestion: 'The fresh air and peaceful atmosphere help me relax.'

× I prefer other country because such as Vietnam have many people and many view that I can to go and I don't have experience of this, but in my country, uh, Thailand, I know about this that.

✓ I prefer other countries because, for example, Vietnam has many sights I can visit and I don't have experience of them; in my country, Thailand, I already know them.

Multiple errors: 'other country' should be plural 'other countries'. Use 'for example' to introduce 'Vietnam'. 'Vietnam have' needs singular 'has'. 'Many view' should be 'many sights' or 'many places to see'. 'I can to go' should be 'I can visit'. 'I don't have experience of this' becomes 'I don't have experience of them'. The final clause is clarified to 'I already know them' referring to sights in Thailand. Suggestion: Use plural forms and correct verb agreement: 'other countries', 'Vietnam has', 'many sights I can visit'.