视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid uncommon or misused words (e.g., "gravitated", "photogenic" used incorrectly, "flabbergasted"), and correct small grammar issues. Use 2–3 supporting details with linking words and one short example. Aim for varied but appropriate vocabulary (e.g., "enthusiastic", "keen photographer").

範例: I enjoy taking pictures of different views because I'm a keen photographer and love capturing scenes. For example, when I travel I always carry my camera, so I can photograph landscapes and street scenes. This helps me remember places and improve my photography skills.

建議: Answer directly and correct grammar and repetition. Use linking words (for example, "because" and "also") and give a specific reason or brief example. Replace awkward phrases like "I'm gravitated to" with "I'm drawn to." Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

範例: I prefer views in rural areas because they feel more natural and peaceful. Also, the air is cleaner and there are fewer crowds, so I can relax and take better landscape photos.

建議: Be concise and avoid repeating the same ideas. Start with a clear position (e.g., I enjoy views both at home and abroad), then give one specific reason for each. Correct grammar and word choice (use "traveler" or "avid traveler" instead of "hodophile", and avoid saying "photogenic person").

範例: I enjoy views both in my country and abroad because each place offers different scenes and cultures. For instance, I like photographing local architecture at home but I also travel to capture unique landscapes and cultural festivals in other countries.

× I always carry a camera with myself wherever I go.

✓ I always carry a camera with me wherever I go.

Use 'with me' not 'with myself'. 'Myself' is a reflexive pronoun and is only used when the subject and object refer to the same person for emphasis or reflexive action. Here 'me' is the correct object pronoun.

× As I'm at hodophile, I travel a lot.

✓ As I'm a hodophile, I travel a lot.

The sentence uses 'at hodophile' incorrectly. 'Hodophile' is a noun meaning someone who loves to travel, so it needs an article: 'a hodophile'. Using 'at' before a noun is incorrect here.

× it gives me feel of real nature and and away from the hustle bustle of the cities.

✓ it gives me a feeling of real nature and takes me away from the hustle and bustle of the cities.

Several preposition and noun usage issues: 'gives me feel' should be 'gives me a feeling' or 'makes me feel'; 'of real nature' is better as 'of real nature' or 'of the real nature' depending on context but 'a feeling of real nature' is natural; 'away from' needs a verb 'takes me away from'; also 'hustle bustle' needs 'and' between words and an article 'the' before cities. Correcting to 'takes me away from the hustle and bustle of the cities' fixes preposition and article usage.

× Moreover, the rural areas are more pollution free than the urban areas so I'm gravitated to.

✓ Moreover, rural areas are less polluted than urban areas, so I am drawn to them.

'Pollution free' is awkward; use 'less polluted'. Articles before 'rural areas' and 'urban areas' are optional; removing 'the' makes it general. 'I'm gravitated to' is incorrect—'gravitated' is not used reflexively with 'to'; use 'drawn to' or 'attracted to'. Also include the object 'them' after 'drawn to'.

× Well it will be biased to say that I only prefer views in my country as I'm a hodophile.

✓ Well, it would be biased to say that I only prefer views in my country because I'm a hodophile.

Use conditional 'would' rather than 'will' for hypothetical opinion. Also 'as' can be used but 'because' is clearer here. A comma after 'Well' improves flow. Pronoun usage is fine otherwise.

× I love views in every country as I travel the whole world I always carry camera with me and I'm also photogenic person and I love visiting different cultures and get to know different kind of people.

✓ I love views in every country. I travel the world, always carry a camera with me, and I am a photogenic person. I also enjoy visiting different cultures and getting to know different kinds of people.

The original is a run-on sentence lacking proper punctuation and has several grammar issues: add articles ('a camera', 'a photogenic person'), use parallel structure with commas and conjunctions, and change 'get to know' to 'getting to know' to match gerund form after 'enjoy'. Use plural 'kinds' after 'different'.

× Moreover, I'm a photogenic person and I feel flabbergasted when I take pictures.

✓ Moreover, I'm a photogenic person and I feel thrilled when I take pictures.

'Feel flabbergasted' is unusual because 'flabbergasted' means extremely surprised, which is unlikely when taking pictures; 'thrilled' fits better. Grammatically, 'feel' followed by adjective is fine; this suggestion focuses on word choice to convey the intended emotion.

× Well, I prefer views in rural areas because it gives me feel of real nature and and away from the hustle bustle of the cities.

✓ Well, I prefer views in rural areas because they give me a feeling of real nature and take me away from the hustle and bustle of the cities.

Subject 'views' is plural, so verbs must be plural: use 'they give' and 'take' rather than 'it gives' and missing verb. This corrects subject-verb agreement and pronoun reference.

× Moreover, the rural areas are more pollution free than the urban areas so I'm gravitated to.

✓ Moreover, rural areas are less polluted than urban areas, so I am drawn to them.

Repeated entry to emphasize preposition and phrase correction: use 'less polluted' and 'drawn to them' rather than 'pollution free' and 'gravitated to'.