视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct minor grammar errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one brief supporting detail. Avoid filler words like "umm" and redundant phrases ("because of this reason"). Also use the article with "huge fan" and choose correct verb forms.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I’m a huge fan of nature, so I often photograph landscapes when I visit parks or countryside areas.

建議: Clarify unclear expressions and reduce repetition. Replace vague or incorrect phrases like "column wipe" with a clear description (e.g. "a sense of peace"). Keep the answer to 2–3 sentences: a topic sentence plus one specific supporting detail, using a linking word such as "because" or "especially".

範例: I prefer rural areas because they are peaceful and visually striking. For example, I love photographing mountains and coasts, since changing light and colors make each shot unique.

建議: Improve fluency, grammar and clarity. Give a direct topic sentence, then one clear reason using linking words (e.g. "however" or "because"). Avoid self-correction mid-sentence and redundant phrases. Be specific about why you prefer photographing abroad (new scenes, different cultures, unique architecture).

範例: I’d prefer to take pictures in other countries because I’ve already photographed many places at home. Traveling abroad offers new scenes and cultures, which inspires me to capture different styles of architecture and landscapes.

× Umm yes, because I'm huge fan of nature.

✓ Umm yes, because I'm a huge fan of nature.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before the noun phrase 'huge fan'. In English, singular countable nouns require an article or determiner. Add 'a' to make the sentence grammatically correct.

× So because of this reason I really love to take pictures whenever I go.

✓ So for this reason I really love to take pictures whenever I go.

Redundant phrasing 'because of this reason' is awkward. Use 'for this reason' or 'because of this' to be concise and natural. The structure should be simplified to avoid repetition.

× Definitely. I prefer rural areas because you know, the atmosphere up there just gives you column wipe and you know, whenever I go there, I always take photos.

✓ Definitely. I prefer rural areas because, you know, the atmosphere up there just clears your mind and, whenever I go there, I always take photos.

The phrase 'gives you column wipe' is incorrect and non-idiomatic. Replace with a natural adverbial phrase like 'clears your mind'. Also add commas around 'you know' and before 'whenever' for clarity.

× Especially I enjoy photographing mountains and coastal views because the light and color change a lot there, which makes each photo feel unique.

✓ Especially, I enjoy photographing mountains and coastal views because the light and color change a lot there, which makes each photo feel unique.

Sentence is mostly correct but needs a comma after 'Especially' for natural rhythm. Present participle 'photographing' is used correctly; only punctuation adjustment is suggested.

× Honestly, I'm not kind of person who travel a lot because I'm I don't know about kind of a lot of country, about a lot of country.

✓ Honestly, I'm not the kind of person who travels a lot because I haven't been to many countries.

Problems: missing definite article 'the' before 'kind of person' and incorrect verb form 'travel' (should be 'travels' to agree with 'who'). The phrase 'I don't know about kind of a lot of country' is ungrammatical; replace with 'I haven't been to many countries' to convey meaning clearly.

× But but if I had to choose, I prefer to take more pictures from the other country because I definitely have enough pictures on my own country.

✓ But if I had to choose, I would prefer to take more pictures in other countries because I already have enough pictures of my own country.

Remove repeated 'but'. Use conditional 'would prefer' after 'if I had to choose'. Use preposition 'in' with 'countries' and pluralize. Use 'of' with 'pictures of my own country' and change 'own country' to 'my own country'. Also 'already' is more natural than 'definitely' in this context.

× So this reason I wanted to take other countries as well of pictures.

✓ So for this reason I wanted to take pictures in other countries as well.

Word order and prepositions are incorrect. Use 'for this reason' and 'take pictures in other countries' with correct plural and placement of 'as well' at the end for natural English.