视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and avoid filler words (e.g., "like"). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail or example using a linking word. Aim for 2–3 sentences and vary vocabulary (e.g., 'photographs' or 'scenery').

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking photographs of different views because they help me preserve memories. For example, I often photograph coastal sunsets to remember family holidays and to admire the changing light over the sea.

建議: Provide a clear topic sentence and remove repetitive phrases. Use linking words (e.g., 'because' or 'so') and include one specific detail or comparison to support your preference. Replace fillers ('like') with precise words.

範例: I prefer rural views because they are quieter and more natural. For instance, I enjoy looking at mountains and rice fields, which feel peaceful compared with noisy city streets.

建議: Avoid hesitations ('Umm') and organize your answer: give a direct preference, then briefly explain with specific reasons or examples. Use correct grammar (e.g., 'has a lot of natural scenery/resources') and linking words ('because', 'for example').

範例: I prefer the views in my own country because the Philippines has abundant natural scenery. For example, I like our beaches and forests more than the urban skylines I saw in Singapore and Bangkok.

× I like to take photos and pictures of different views because I like to keep it as a memory and it's also a good way of like admiring the natural scenery in our surroundings.

✓ I like to take photos of different views because I like to keep them as memories and it's also a good way of admiring the natural scenery around us.

The phrase 'keep it as a memory' mixes singular pronoun with plural noun 'photos' and uses 'it' awkwardly; change to 'keep them as memories'. The filler 'like' is unnecessary before 'admiring' and should be removed. Use 'around us' rather than 'in our surroundings' for natural phrasing. Also use plural 'memories' to agree with plural 'photos'. Suggested improvement: remove fillers such as 'like', match pronouns to their antecedents, and use natural prepositional phrases.

× I prefer the views of our rural areas because it's more on natural environment like mountains, trees, fields like it's more on natural environment where I can like admire the natural scenery that we have.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because they are more natural, with mountains, trees and fields where I can admire the scenery.

Problems: 'the views of our rural areas' is acceptable but 'views in rural areas' is more natural; 'it's more on natural environment' is incorrect preposition and structure—use 'they are more natural' to agree with plural 'views'; repeated 'like it's more on natural environment' is redundant and contains filler 'like'; 'where I can like admire' should be 'where I can admire'. Suggested improvement: avoid repeating phrases, remove fillers, ensure plural subjects agree with verbs and choose correct prepositions.

× Umm, for now I've been only to Singapore and Thailand, and Singapore is more on a city country, and also I've been to Bangkok, which is a city also.

✓ So far I have been only to Singapore and Thailand. Singapore is more of a city-country, and I have also been to Bangkok, which is a city.

Use 'So far I have been to' or 'I have only been to' for experiences up to now (present perfect). 'I've been only to' has incorrect word order; move 'only' after 'have'. 'More on a city country' uses incorrect preposition and phrase—use 'more of a city-country' or 'more of a city state' depending on meaning. Also split into clearer sentences and place 'also' before 'been' or after subject for natural word order. Suggested improvement: place adverbs like 'only' and 'also' correctly with present perfect, and use correct noun phrases.

× So for now, I think I prefer the view of my country, which is the Philippines. It's really have a lot of natural resources that we can admire.

✓ So for now, I think I prefer the views of my country, the Philippines. It really has a lot of natural resources that we can admire.

Problems: 'the view of my country' is OK but 'views' matches earlier plural context; 'which is the Philippines' is wordy—use apposition 'the Philippines'. 'It's really have' mixes subject-verb forms; 'it' requires 'has' not 'have'. Change to 'It really has a lot of natural resources'. Suggested improvement: ensure subject-verb agreement ('it has'), use concise apposition, and match singular/plural nouns consistently.