视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is natural and relevant, with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. To improve, make it slightly more concise, avoid filler phrases (“like”), and add one specific example to make the content more vivid. Also vary vocabulary (e.g., use “preserve” or “record” instead of repeat “store in my memory”).

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different scenes. I recently bought a digital camera to preserve special moments, such as the sunset I photographed at the coast last month, so I can revisit those memories later and remember how peaceful I felt.

建議: Your answer clearly states a preference and offers reasons, but it is slightly long and repetitive. Improve coherence by using linking words (e.g., “because,” “for example,” “as a result”) and provide a concrete example or brief comparison to an urban view. Reduce redundancy (avoid repeating ‘views’ and similar phrases).

範例: I prefer rural views because they feel more peaceful and untouched. For example, hiking in the countryside I can see fields and hills without noise or traffic, whereas city views often include crowded streets and tall buildings.

建議: The response answers directly and gives reasons, but contains informal phrasing and vague words (“great and advanced the scenic views”) and a question fragment. Improve by rephrasing formally, giving a specific example of a foreign view, and linking ideas smoothly. Replace vague adjectives with precise descriptions (e.g., “dramatic mountain landscapes” or “snow‑covered scenery”).

範例: I prefer scenic views abroad because they offer landscapes I rarely see at home. For instance, visiting Switzerland I admired the snow‑capped Alps and icy valleys, which felt completely different from the warm, snowless landscapes in my country.

× I in fact bought myself a digital camera so that I can capture the moment that I'm looking at because I want to store it in my memory and I want to look back at it one day and tell myself like, wow, I really was there and I enjoyed it.

✓ I in fact bought a digital camera so that I can capture the moments I'm looking at because I want to store them in my memory and look back one day and tell myself, 'Wow, I really was there and I enjoyed it.'

The original uses 'bought myself' which is unnecessary reflexive use; 'bought a camera' is correct. Also there are issues with singular/plural and pronoun reference: 'the moment that I'm looking at' is awkward and should be plural 'moments I'm looking at' to match general activity. 'Store it in my memory' and 'look back at it' use 'it' ambiguously; change to 'store them' and 'look back one day' or 'look back at them' for clear plural reference. Suggestions: avoid unnecessary reflexive pronouns like 'myself' unless emphasizing action done to oneself; ensure noun number matches context and pronouns clearly refer to those nouns.

× I prefer views from the rural areas one because I feel like they're so isolated and preserved without any disturbances and everything is just natural and you actually get a glimpse of the views of nature itself as a whole, which is very rare to find these days.

✓ I prefer views from rural areas because I feel they are isolated and preserved without disturbances; everything is natural and you actually get a glimpse of nature as a whole, which is rare these days.

Problems addressed: 'the rural areas one' is ungrammatical and unnecessary; 'the rural areas' should be 'rural areas' or 'the countryside'. 'They're' is acceptable but tighten phrasing: 'they are isolated and preserved without disturbances'. 'The views of nature itself as a whole' is wordy and has plural/singular redundancy; 'a glimpse of nature as a whole' is clearer. Suggestion: remove unnecessary articles and redundant nouns, match plural/singular appropriately, and simplify phrasing for clarity.

× To be honest, I prefer the views from other countries. Why so? It's because I've already seen most of the views in my country, but when I see the views from other country, I realise how great and advanced the scenic views are. And because my country does not have snow, when I go to countries that have snow, it's amazing.

✓ To be honest, I prefer views from other countries. It's because I've already seen most of the views in my country, but when I see views from other countries, I realize how varied and impressive the scenery can be. Also, because my country does not have snow, visiting countries with snow is amazing.

Errors fixed: 'the views from other country' is incorrect singular and missing article; it should be 'views from other countries'. Replaced 'realise how great and advanced the scenic views are' with 'realize how varied and impressive the scenery can be' to avoid awkward adjective use and repetition. 'And because my country does not have snow, when I go to countries that have snow, it's amazing' is wordy and repetitive; simplified to 'visiting countries with snow is amazing.' Suggestions: ensure pronouns and demonstratives match number (country vs countries), avoid repeating 'views' too often by using synonyms like 'scenery', and simplify sentence structure for natural speech.