视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and organize your answer with a clear topic sentence, one or two specific supporting details, and a brief reason. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct basic grammar (e.g., plural forms, verb agreement). Avoid repetition like repeating “different” too often and replace vague phrases with specific descriptions (e.g., textures, lighting, composition).

範例: I enjoy taking photos of different views because each angle highlights unique shapes and lighting. For example, a top-down shot can reveal geometric patterns, while a low-angle shot emphasizes height and depth. These contrasts in color, shadow, and composition make photography interesting to me.

建議: Start with a clear direct answer (e.g., ‘I like both, but I prefer rural views’). Provide one comparison and a specific reason using linking words (e.g., ‘however’, ‘because’). Reduce fillers (‘uh’) and be precise with vocabulary (e.g., ‘lush greenery’, ‘ponds’, ‘architecture’).

範例: I like both urban and rural views, but I prefer rural scenery because of the lush greenery and calm ponds. In contrast, urban areas offer interesting architecture and lively streets, yet rural views help me relax and notice natural details like tree textures and reflections on water.

建議: Answer directly and give a concise, specific reason. Avoid repeating previous points; instead add a new detail such as cultural familiarity, memories, or seasons. Use natural phrasing (e.g., ‘refreshing’ not ‘refresher’) and link clauses with words like ‘because’ or ‘so’.

範例: I prefer views in my own country because I know the seasons and places well, and the widespread greenery feels very refreshing. For instance, seeing terraced fields in spring makes me feel nostalgic and relaxed, which I don't always get when visiting foreign landscapes.

× I do love to take picture in different views because it's different view, it express the different shape or the colors or the shadows all and they're different.

✓ I do love to take pictures of different views because each view expresses different shapes, colors, and shadows.

Errors: incorrect noun number (picture -> pictures), incorrect preposition (in -> of), missing third-person singular -s on verb (express -> expresses), awkward phrases (the shadows all). Suggestion: Use plural 'pictures' with 'take pictures of', add -s for third-person singular verbs when the subject is singular (each view expresses), and list items clearly ('shapes, colors, and shadows').

× If we pause or take picture in different view, maybe from the top view is different and the down to top view is different.

✓ If we pause or take pictures from different angles, the top view and the bottom view will look different.

Errors: plural noun needed (picture -> pictures), incorrect preposition (in -> from), awkward phrase 'down to top view'. Suggestion: Use 'from different angles' and match plurality; use future/modal or simple present to state general truth; use clear terms like 'top view' and 'bottom view'.

× Actually both views are good, uh, to see like uh, in case of rural areas, it should be a full nature like all greenery.

✓ Actually both views are good to see; in the case of rural areas, there is a lot of nature and greenery.

Errors: incorrect phrase 'should be a full nature' and article use; 'a full nature' is ungrammatical. Suggestion: Use 'there is' or 'there are' for existence and 'a lot of nature/greenery' to describe rural areas; remove filler words for clarity.

× We can see all in greenish colour like the leaves, trees and the ponds.

✓ We can see everything in greenish colors, such as leaves, trees, and ponds.

Errors: 'all in greenish colour' is awkward; 'colour' singular vs plural 'colors' depending on variety; 'the ponds' unnecessary article. Suggestion: Use 'everything' or 'all' with plural 'colors' and list nouns without definite article unless specific.

× And it's like uh, when we are seeing uh, rural, rural areas.

✓ And when we see rural areas, they look very natural and peaceful.

Errors: repetition 'rural, rural areas' and filler 'it's like uh' make sentence incoherent. Suggestion: Remove fillers and repetition; form a complete clause with subject and verb and a clear complement.

× Definitely, I prefer to see my own country view because as I mentioned, the greenery, it's actually from the top we can see it's completely green, greenish.

✓ Definitely, I prefer to see views of my own country because, as I mentioned, the greenery is visible from above; it looks completely green.

Errors: 'my own country view' requires 'views of my own country'; comma splice and awkward phrasing 'it's actually from the top we can see it's completely green, greenish.' Suggestion: Use 'views of' for possession, restructure sentence to avoid run-on clauses, and choose one adjective ('green' or 'greenish').

× When I'm looking to it, my mind will get refresher and it's awesome.

✓ When I look at it, my mind feels refreshed and it is awesome.

Errors: incorrect verb pattern 'looking to it' should be 'look at it'; 'get refresher' is incorrect collocation. Suggestion: Use phrasal verb 'look at', and use adjective 'refreshed' or phrase 'feel refreshed'.