视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural and correct pronouns/grammar, give a clear topic sentence, add one specific detail and use a linking word. Keep within 3–4 sentences. For example, start with a direct statement (Yes/No), then briefly explain why, and finish with a specific example.

範例: Not really — I don’t take photos often, but I do like photographing sunrises and sunsets because they’re mesmerizing and uplifting. For instance, on morning walks I sometimes stop to capture the pink sky over the river, which brightens my day.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence, correct small grammar errors, use a linking phrase to add one specific reason and one brief personal example. Limit to 3–4 sentences and avoid repetition of words like "just".

範例: It depends on my mood, but most of the time I prefer rural views because they feel peaceful and calming. For example, when I visit the province I enjoy the quiet rice fields and fresh air, which always makes me feel nostalgic.

建議: Begin with a clear preference statement, improve accuracy in phrasing (e.g., "seen" not "heard"), and provide one concise reason plus a brief specific example of a place or feature you’d like to see. Keep it to 2–3 sentences to be natural and effective.

範例: I prefer views in other countries because I’ve visited most of the main sights in the Philippines and I love discovering new places. For example, I’d like to see the dramatic coastlines of Greece or the modern skyline of Tokyo to compare with what I know at home.

× Actually not really, but when they do go on walks I think pictures of sunrise and the sunset because they are really mesmerizing to look at and it just reminds me to have a good day and enjoy it.

✓ Actually, not really, but when I do go on walks I take pictures of the sunrise and the sunset because they are really mesmerizing to look at and they just remind me to have a good day and enjoy it.

The student used 'they' to refer to themselves which is incorrect pronoun reference and also used verb forms that do not agree with the subject. Change 'they do go' to 'I do go' to match the speaker. Use 'take pictures' (present simple habitual action) instead of 'think pictures'. Use 'the sunrise and the sunset' with definite article. 'It just reminds me' should be 'they just remind me' to agree in number with 'sunrise and sunset'. Also add commas for clarity.

× It depends on my mood but most of the times I would prefer views on rural areas because it just looks so peaceful and calming and I usually miss the days when we would go to the province.

✓ It depends on my mood, but most of the time I prefer views in rural areas because they just look so peaceful and calming, and I usually miss the days when we would go to the province.

Use 'most of the time' (not 'most of the times') and the preposition 'in' with 'rural areas' rather than 'on'. 'I would prefer' is changed to 'I prefer' for simple habitual preference. 'It just looks' should be 'they just look' to agree with plural 'views'. Added commas for clarity.

× I would prefer views on other countries because I've pretty much seen all the things that I need to hear in the Philippines, and growing up I've always loved to travel.

✓ I would prefer views in other countries because I've pretty much seen all the things I need to see in the Philippines, and growing up I've always loved to travel.

Use 'in other countries' rather than 'on'. Also 'need to hear' is incorrect here; use 'need to see' when referring to sights and views. Minor wording adjustments improve clarity.

× So I feel like I would appreciate looking at views on other countries more, like their beaches or their skyscrapers.

✓ So I feel like I would appreciate looking at views in other countries more, like their beaches or their skyscrapers.

Use 'in other countries' rather than 'on other countries'. The preposition 'in' is correct for locations and countries.