视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is generally natural and relevant, but it has some grammar errors, slight repetition and could be more concise. Try to use a clear topic sentence, correct article and plural forms, and reduce redundancy. Also add one specific example to make it more vivid. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing different views because it lets me capture beautiful scenery and preserve memories. For example, I often photograph coastal sunsets to remember the colors and atmosphere, and then I share the best shots with friends.

建議: The main idea is clear, but the answer has grammar mistakes, awkward phrasing and some unclear expressions (e.g. "so so high", "feel more attractive to"). Make a direct topic sentence, fix verb and adjective usage, and give one concrete reason or example. Use a linking word to contrast urban and rural views.

範例: I prefer rural views to urban ones because I live in a city and I often see tall buildings, so I appreciate the peace and open space of the countryside. For instance, I enjoy walking by rice fields where the wide horizons and fresh air feel relaxing.

建議: Your response addresses the question but is incomplete and contains errors (word choice: "sceneries" -> "scenery", "rulers" unclear). Finish the sentence, avoid filler phrases like "I mean," and provide a brief reason or example. Use precise vocabulary and one linking phrase to expand the point.

範例: I prefer the views in my own country because Korea offers a variety of scenery, from busy urban skylines in Seoul and Busan to tranquil rural mountains and coasts. For example, I enjoy hiking in the countryside to see traditional villages and ocean cliffs nearby.

× I enjoy taking pictures of different views because I believe that taking picture is useful way to capture wonderful scenery so we can focus on beautiful landscapes.

✓ I enjoy taking pictures of different views because I believe that taking pictures is a useful way to capture wonderful scenery so we can focus on beautiful landscapes.

The sentence omits the plural marker and the article 'a'. 'taking picture' should be 'taking pictures' (plural) to match general activity, and 'useful way' needs the indefinite article 'a' before 'useful way'. Add both to make the noun phrases grammatically correct and natural.

× To be honest, I prefer views in rural areas because now I am living in urban area which is so so high.

✓ To be honest, I prefer views in rural areas because now I am living in an urban area which is very tall.

'urban area' requires the indefinite article 'an' because it is singular and countable. 'so so high' is informal and awkward; use 'very tall' or better, rephrase to describe buildings as 'tall'. Also 'urban area...which is very tall' is slightly odd because areas aren't tall; consider 'where the buildings are very tall.'

× Skyscrapers and skylines are easily seen to me, so I usually feel more attractive to rural areas.

✓ Skyscrapers and skylines are easy for me to see, so I am usually more attracted to rural areas.

'easily seen to me' is incorrect word order and voice; use 'easy for me to see'. 'feel more attractive to rural areas' incorrectly uses 'feel' and 'attractive'; the correct expression is 'be attracted to' meaning to prefer something. Use 'more attracted to rural areas.' Also adjust tense to present simple 'am'.

× In fact, I love my own country's sceneries because Korea has both views, including rural sceneries and urban landscapes.

✓ In fact, I love my own country's scenery because Korea has both kinds of views, including rural scenery and urban landscapes.

'sceneries' is usually uncountable and should be 'scenery'. 'both views' is vague; 'both kinds of views' clarifies. Use singular 'rural scenery' rather than plural 'rural sceneries.' These changes make collocations natural.

× Moreover, there are so many attractive rulers like.

✓ Moreover, there are so many attractive rural areas to visit.

The sentence is incomplete and uses the wrong word 'rulers' instead of 'rural' or 'rural areas.' 'like' at the end leaves the sentence fragmentary. Provide a complete noun phrase 'attractive rural areas to visit' to finish the thought and correct the vocabulary error.