视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid fillers (umm, ah) and correct verb forms and word order.

範例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views, especially in my rural village. For example, I often take pictures of old houses and the green valleys to show visitors the traditional landscape, and I also photograph the local waterfall to capture natural beauty and seasonal changes.

建議: Give a direct topic sentence and follow with clear reasons using linking words. Fix grammar (singular/plural agreement) and complete thoughts. Provide a concise example to support your preference.

範例: I prefer rural views to urban ones because they feel unique and memorable. For instance, a photo of a secluded waterfall can surprise city dwellers who rarely see such scenery, while urban architecture is familiar and less surprising.

建議: Answer directly then expand with specific, relevant details. Replace fillers and vague phrases with precise reasons and one short example. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

範例: I prefer views from other countries because the architecture and urban planning are often different and unfamiliar to me. For example, I like photographing foreign markets and modern buildings to share with friends at home so they can see different cultures and city layouts.

× Yes, I love taking pictures of different views, especially my rural community.

✓ Yes, I love taking pictures of different views, especially of my rural community.

The original sentence is understandable but missing the preposition 'of' before 'my rural community' to show what the views belong to. This is a preposition/verb + -ing structure issue: 'taking pictures of' should be followed by the object with 'of'. Suggestion: include 'of' to make the noun phrase complete.

× I all I want always want to showcase how the old houses, the valleys we have and often time I visit the waterfall and take via various pictures to showcase people what's my village umm really looks like and even the farm lands, the green grasses and.

✓ I always want to showcase our old houses, the valleys we have, and often I visit the waterfall and take various pictures to show people what my village really looks like, including the farmland and green grass.

This sentence has multiple structure problems: repetition ('I all I want always want'), incorrect word order, unnecessary words ('via'), and incomplete or awkward phrases. Corrections: remove repeated fragments, use parallel noun phrases ('old houses, the valleys'), correct adverb placement ('often I visit'), use 'take various pictures to show' rather than 'to showcase people what's', and use singular 'farmland' and 'green grass' for natural collocation. These changes fix sentence structure and clarity.

× To be honest, I prefer views in the rural areas because it creates memories and also allow people to see what they are not used to, unlike the urban areas where people see those structures everyday.

✓ To be honest, I prefer views in rural areas because they create memories and also allow people to see things they are not used to, unlike urban areas where people see those structures every day.

Errors: misuse of definite article 'the' before 'rural areas' and 'urban areas' (article error), subject-verb agreement ('it creates' should match plural subject 'views' -> 'they create'), missing plural agreement in 'allow' with subject, and 'everyday' (adjective) vs 'every day' (adverb). Also 'what they are not used to' is better as 'things they are not used to'. Fixes: remove 'the' where generic plural is meant; match verbs to plural 'views'; use 'every day'.

× Just like you have a waterfall in the raw areas people don't usually visit so when they look at those images they are they.

✓ For example, when there is a waterfall in rural areas people don't usually visit, so when they look at those images they are surprised.

Problems: 'raw areas' is incorrect word choice for 'rural areas'; awkward clause order and missing punctuation cause confusion; ending 'they are they' is incomplete. Correction: use 'for example' to introduce explanation, use 'when there is a waterfall in rural areas people don't usually visit' and complete the thought with a full adjective like 'surprised' or 'interested'. This fixes word choice and sentence completeness.

× I prefer views from other countries because these are areas I'm not familiar with, especially the architectural designs, umm, their roads, their modern facilities, which are not in my own country.

✓ I prefer views from other countries because those are places I'm not familiar with, especially their architectural designs, roads, and modern facilities that we don't have in my country.

Issues: using 'areas' is acceptable but 'places' is more natural; avoid repetitive 'their' before each noun by grouping; 'which are not in my own country' is less natural than 'that we don't have in my country'. Also using 'the' before 'architectural designs' is unnecessary. These changes improve naturalness and preposition/relative clause usage.

× This is just to, you know, showcase people when I go back home and let them know how beautiful these areas are, especially their markets.

✓ This is just to show people, when I go back home, how beautiful these places are, especially their markets.

Problems: 'showcase people' is incorrect collocation; the phrase 'showcase people when I go back home and let them know' is clumsy. Correction: use 'show people' and restructure clause order with commas for clarity: 'to show people, when I go back home, how beautiful these places are.' This improves verb choice and sentence flow.