视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, reduce hesitation and grammar errors, and give one specific example with a linking word. Use simpler, correct phrases (e.g., “when I travel” not “when I'm travel”) and avoid awkward expressions like “soak up with sceneries.”

範例: I don't take many photos because I rarely have free time and I'm usually busy with work. However, when I travel I sometimes photograph landscapes or city skylines. For example, on a trip to Kyoto I took several photos of the temple gardens, but mostly I prefer to enjoy the view without taking pictures.

建議: Provide a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons using linking words. Remove fillers and repetitions and use precise vocabulary (e.g., "clean air," "open spaces," "varied scenery"). Keep to two or three supporting details.

範例: I prefer rural views because the air is cleaner and there is more open space. For instance, countryside walks often have fields, forests and quiet rivers, which feel more relaxing than busy city streets.

建議: Start with a direct topic sentence, correct small grammatical errors, and give a concise, specific example with a linking word. Avoid repeating words and refine phrasing (e.g., “walking along the coastal cliffs” not “along with coastal cliffs”).

範例: I prefer views in my own country because I'm familiar with the landscapes and local culture, so they feel more comfortable and peaceful. For example, I often walk along the coastal cliffs near my hometown, where the sea views and local traditions make the area feel very welcoming.

× Occasionally I take photos when I'm travel, especially landscapes or cities heights, but generally I prefer to soak up with sceneries in the moment rather than photographing it.

✓ Occasionally I take photos when I'm traveling, especially landscapes or city heights, but generally I prefer to soak up the scenery in the moment rather than photograph it.

Error type 8: 'travel' after 'I'm' requires present continuous 'traveling'. 'cities heights' is ungrammatical; use 'city heights' or 'city skylines'. 'soak up with sceneries' is incorrect: 'soak up' does not take 'with' and 'scenery' is usually uncountable here. Use 'soak up the scenery'. 'photographing it' is acceptable but parallel structure prefers base verb 'photograph it' after 'rather than'. Improvements: use correct -ing form for continuous tense, remove incorrect preposition, use singular/uncountable 'scenery', and maintain parallel verb forms.

× Occasionally I take photos when I'm travel, especially landscapes or cities heights, but generally I prefer to soak up with sceneries in the moment rather than photographing it.

✓ Occasionally I take photos when I'm traveling, especially landscapes or city heights, but generally I prefer to soak up the scenery in the moment rather than photograph it.

Error type 12: The pronoun 'it' at the end is unclear because the preceding noun 'sceneries' is plural/uncountable; replacing with 'scenery' and removing 'it' avoids unclear reference. Suggest using clear noun phrases and consistent number.

× Occasionally I take photos when I'm travel, especially landscapes or cities heights, but generally I prefer to soak up with sceneries in the moment rather than photographing it.

✓ Occasionally I take photos when I'm traveling, especially landscapes or city heights, but generally I prefer to soak up the scenery in the moment rather than photograph it.

Error type 1: 'sceneries' is not commonly used; 'scenery' is the correct uncountable noun. 'cities heights' mixes plural forms awkwardly; 'city heights' or 'city skylines' is better. Use correct singular/uncountable forms for natural English.

× I'm not a big fan of taking pictures because I rarely have much free time. I'm usually busy with my work.

✓ I'm not a big fan of taking pictures because I rarely have much free time. I'm usually busy with my work.

Error type 6: These sentences are grammatically correct in present tense. No change needed. Maintain present simple/continuous to describe habits and states.

× I prefer to soak up with sceneries in the moment rather than photographing it.

✓ I prefer to soak up the scenery in the moment rather than photograph it.

Error type 11: 'soak up with sceneries' wrongly uses 'with'; 'soak up' should be followed directly by the object (the scenery). Also 'in the moment' is fine; remove incorrect preposition and use correct object form.

× Well, I prefer rural areas because that, that part is, uh, very good and the environment was good, clean and different types of views like, uh, green trees all over there and.

✓ Well, I prefer rural areas because that part is very nice: the environment is clean, and there are different types of views, like green trees all around.

Error type 26: Original sentence is disfluent and mixed tense. Remove filler words, use consistent present tense ('is' not 'was'), and restructure to complete clauses. Use 'there are' to introduce plural 'different types of views' and 'all around' for natural phrasing.

× Well, I prefer rural areas because that, that part is, uh, very good and the environment was good, clean and different types of views like, uh, green trees all over there and.

✓ Well, I prefer rural areas because that part is very nice: the environment is clean, and there are different types of views, like green trees all around.

Error type 3: To describe existence of multiple views, use 'there are' rather than leaving it implicit. Also use present 'is' for current preference. This corrects the sentence to a complete, grammatical form.

× I prefer in my own country because I'm familiar with the landscapes and local culture, which makes makes them more comfortable and peaceful to me.

✓ I prefer my own country because I'm familiar with the landscapes and local culture, which makes me feel more comfortable and peaceful.

Error type 6: Use 'prefer' without 'in' when stating preference for a place. The clause 'which makes makes them more comfortable' has repetition and incorrect object: correct is 'makes me feel more comfortable'. Maintain present tense and correct pronoun object.

× I prefer in my own country because I'm familiar with the landscapes and local culture, which makes makes them more comfortable and peaceful to me.

✓ I prefer my own country because I'm familiar with the landscapes and local culture, which makes me feel more comfortable and peaceful.

Error type 12: 'them' incorrectly refers to 'landscapes and local culture'; the intended subject affected is the speaker. Use 'me' and add 'feel' to express the speaker's state. Also remove duplicated 'makes'.

× For example, I enjoy walking along with coastal cliffs near my hometown.

✓ For example, I enjoy walking along the coastal cliffs near my hometown.

Error type 26: 'walking along with coastal cliffs' is ungrammatical; use 'walking along the coastal cliffs' or 'walking along the coast'. Remove unnecessary 'with' and use definite article 'the' for specific cliffs near hometown.

× The scenery and the local tradition there feel more welcoming than views I have.

✓ The scenery and local traditions there feel more welcoming than the views I have here.

Error type 13: 'local tradition' should be plural 'local traditions' to match 'scenery and'. Also compare 'feel more welcoming than views I have' is vague; add 'here' and 'the' to clarify comparison. Use plural agreement and adjust articles.