视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Focus on natural grammar, correct vocabulary, and concise expression. Begin with a clear topic sentence, avoid incorrect phrases (e.g. “take” → “taking”; “wheels off” is incorrect), and replace vague or misused words with accurate ones. Limit hesitation and filler words, and keep answer to 2–3 well-formed sentences using linking words if adding details.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. I especially like capturing majestic buildings, parks, and lakes, and sometimes I photograph people if they agree. For example, when I visit a park I try to capture both the landscape and interesting portraits.

建議: Start with a clear, natural topic sentence and avoid repetition. Use correct constructions (e.g. “It is not because… but because…”). Add one specific supporting detail with a linking word for coherence. Keep it within 2–3 sentences and use varied vocabulary (e.g. “urban environments,” “amenities,” “vibrant”).

範例: I prefer urban views to rural ones because cities offer more variety and activity. For example, urban environments have diverse architecture, busy streets, and many cultural amenities, which give me more interesting subjects to photograph.

建議: Use correct grammar and clearer phrasing. Begin with a direct statement (e.g. “I prefer views in other countries”), then give a specific reason with linking words (e.g. “because” or “as”). Avoid vague or irrelevant childhood remarks unless they add meaning; instead give a concrete example of cultural differences you enjoy photographing.

範例: I prefer photographing views in other countries because their cultures and architectures are often different from what I see at home. For instance, when I visited a European city I loved capturing narrow cobblestone streets and colorful market scenes that I don’t often find in China.

× Of course I like take pictures of different views.

✓ Of course I like taking pictures of different views.

The verb 'like' when followed by another verb requires the gerund form (verb + -ing) or the infinitive; in this context the gerund 'taking' is natural. Change 'take' to 'taking' to form 'like taking'. Suggestion: use 'like taking' or 'like to take', but 'like taking' is more idiomatic here.

× I never forget to take the wheels off magnificent buildings, Transco parks, the lakes, as well as, uh, nice looking people if they permit me to do so.

✓ I never forget to photograph magnificent buildings, parks, lakes, and attractive people if they permit me to do so.

The original uses 'take the wheels off' which is incorrect and confusing. The intended meaning is to 'take pictures' or 'photograph' subjects. Also 'Transco parks' seems incorrect; 'parks' is sufficient. Use parallel nouns connected by commas and 'and' before the last item. 'Nice looking people' is better as 'attractive people' or 'people who look nice'. Suggestion: use 'photograph' or 'take pictures of' and ensure parallel structure: 'photograph buildings, parks, lakes, and attractive people.'

× I always prefer views in urban areas over rural areas.

✓ I always prefer views in urban areas to those in rural areas.

The verb 'prefer' is commonly followed by 'to' rather than 'over' when comparing two items. Also to avoid repetition, use 'those' to refer back to 'views'. Suggestion: 'prefer A to B' and use pronouns for clarity: 'prefer views in urban areas to those in rural areas.'

× It is not because that rural areas are not interesting, it is because that urban areas are more interesting.

✓ It is not that rural areas are uninteresting; it is that urban areas are more interesting.

The construction 'because that' is incorrect. Use 'that' after 'it is not' or 'it is' to state reasons: 'It is not that...; it is that...'. Also use concise vocabulary: 'uninteresting' instead of 'are not interesting'. Suggestion: use 'It is not that..., it is that...' to contrast reasons.

× For example, urban areas always have more people, more facilities.

✓ For example, urban areas generally have more people and more facilities.

Sentence needs conjunction 'and' to connect the list items. 'Always' is too strong; 'generally' or 'often' is more natural. Suggestion: insert 'and' and consider using 'generally' for a more accurate claim.

× I personally prefer built in other countries over my own country.

✓ I personally prefer buildings in other countries to those in my own country.

The sentence 'prefer built in other countries' is ungrammatical; 'built' is a past participle and must modify a noun like 'buildings'. Also 'prefer A over B' should be 'prefer A to B'. Use 'those' to avoid repetition. Suggestion: 'prefer buildings in other countries to those in my own country.'

× It is not because that China is not a beautiful country, it is because that countries other than China have different cultures.

✓ It is not that China is not a beautiful country; it is that countries other than China have different cultures.

Again, 'because that' is incorrect. Use 'It is not that...; it is that...' to contrast. Also use a semicolon or conjunction to join the clauses. Suggestion: use 'It is not that..., it is that...' and avoid double negatives.

× I also like different cultures while I was a kid.

✓ I have liked different cultures since I was a kid.

The original mixes present 'like' with past-time clause 'while I was a kid'. To express a lasting preference from childhood to now, use present perfect ('have liked') with 'since'. If the intent is to say they liked different cultures when they were a child (past only), use 'I liked different cultures when I was a kid.' Suggestion: choose 'have liked since' for continued preference or 'liked when' for past-only.

× So I enjoy taking pictures of other countries.

✓ So I enjoy taking pictures in other countries.

'Taking pictures of other countries' is understandable but slightly awkward; 'taking pictures in other countries' or 'taking pictures of other countries' are both possible—if the emphasis is photographing scenes within those countries, use 'in'. If the emphasis is photographing the countries themselves (landscapes), the original is acceptable. Suggestion: prefer 'in other countries' to emphasize location and parallel with earlier sentences.