视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: حاول أن تنظّم إجابتك بشكل أوضح وبجمل أقصر لتفادي التكرار والأخطاء النحوية. ابدأ بجملة موضوع واضحة، ثم أضف سببًا واحدًا أو مثالًا مختصرًا. انتبه لزمن الفعل وترتيب الكلمات (مثلاً: “When I see a beautiful sunset, I take a photo”). أيضًا احرص على عدم التكرار اللفظي مثل "my my" و"is that comes to my mind" واستبداله بتعبير مختصر وواضح.

範例: Yes, I do. When I see a beautiful sunset, I usually take a photo to remember the moment. Later, if I feel sad, I look at the picture to cheer myself up.

建議: استخدم جملة افتتاحية واضحة ثم قدّم سببًا واحدًا أو اثنين مع ربط منطقي باستخدام أدوات وصل. اضبط زمن الأفعال وصياغة الفعل (مثلاً: "they motivate me" بدلاً من "it's motivates me") وقلل التكرار مثل "and and". حاول ألا تتجاوز 3-4 جمل إجابة.

範例: I prefer rural views because I enjoy green, open spaces. They motivate me and help me relax. For example, walking in the countryside clears my mind and boosts my energy.

建議: اجعل إجابتك مباشرة وبسيطة: ابدأ بقولك ما تفضّله ثم اذكر سببًا أو مثالًا واضحًا. تجنّب العموميات الغامضة والتركيبات المعقدة التي تزيد من الأخطاء. صِغ الجمل الصحيحة نحوياً مثل "I prefer views in other countries because..." بدلًا من التعابير المبهمة. كما صحح كلمة "refuse" المستخدمة خطأً هنا.

範例: I prefer views in other countries because they often have different landscapes and climates. For example, I would like to see snowy mountains or tropical beaches that I don't have in my country.

× Yes, when I happened to see a beautiful sunset, the first thing is that comes to my my My mind is taking picture because I like to remember this moment when I am sad, I open my phone and look at it.

✓ Yes, when I happen to see a beautiful sunset, the first thing that comes to my mind is taking a picture because I like to remember this moment; when I am sad, I open my phone and look at it.

The sentence contains several errors: wrong tense ('happened' should be 'happen' to describe a habitual or general action), word order ('that comes to my mind' instead of 'is that comes to my my My mind'), extra duplicated words, and noun form ('taking a picture' rather than 'taking picture'). Also the sentence was a run-on; add a semicolon or split into two clauses. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual actions, correct word order, remove duplicates, and use the countable noun with an article ('a picture').

× I prefer views in rural areas. I like to look at green and open areas. It's motivates me and usually when I look and and walked in open areas, it's make me relax and motivated.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas. I like to look at green, open spaces. It motivates me, and usually when I walk in open areas, it makes me feel relaxed and motivated.

Errors include incorrect contraction and subject-verb agreement ('It's motivates me' should be 'It motivates me'), mixed tenses ('look and and walked' should be parallel present tense 'walk'), incorrect noun choice ('spaces' is more natural than 'areas' repeatedly), and wrong verb form ('it's make me' should be 'it makes me' and 'feel relaxed' rather than 'relax and motivated'). Suggestion: keep verbs consistent in present simple for habitual actions and ensure subject-verb agreement; use parallel structures and appropriate collocations ('feel relaxed'). Remove duplicate word 'and'.

× I believe that any human being, when they live in a certain way or in certain country or a center certain whether they always look up to other country that have another weather and another views.

✓ I believe that people who live in a certain way or in a certain country often look to other countries that have different climates and different scenery.

Problems: incorrect or awkward pronoun and agreement ('any human being, when they live' is better as 'people who live'); word order errors ('a center certain whether' is garbled); incorrect pluralization and article use ('other country' should be 'other countries'); wrong collocations ('weather' -> 'climate', 'views' -> 'scenery'). Suggestion: use plural nouns for general statements ('people', 'countries'), use consistent relative clauses ('who live'), and choose correct collocations ('different climates', 'different scenery').

× So of course I would like to see other countries refuse.

✓ So of course I would like to visit other countries.

The verb 'refuse' is incorrect and makes the sentence meaningless here. The intended meaning is likely 'visit' or 'see' other countries. Suggestion: replace the wrong verb with the appropriate verb ('visit' or 'see') and keep the sentence concise. Also keep tense consistent with the modal 'would like' followed by the base verb 'to visit'.