视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar; start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., "beautiful sceneries/beautiful things") and correct word choice and tense errors.

範例: Yes, I do. I often take photos whenever I visit a new place because I like to capture landscapes and candid moments of people. For example, last month I photographed a sunset over the river and later used those photos to remember the trip.

建議: Provide a clear topic sentence then expand with one or two specific reasons and an example; fix collocations and grammar (e.g., "natural ones" -> "natural scenery", "more beautiful sceneries" -> "more beautiful scenery"). Use a linking phrase to connect reasons.

範例: I prefer rural scenery because natural areas are less altered and feel more peaceful. For instance, in the countryside I can photograph textured elements like old trees and stone walls, which create striking, detailed images.

建議: Clarify your stance and use correct expressions for feelings of belonging; avoid confusing wording. Start with a direct answer, then give one or two concrete reasons and a brief example. Correct grammar ("I prefer my own country to others") and phrasing ("I feel a sense of belonging").

範例: I prefer views in my own country to those abroad because I feel a strong sense of belonging and familiarity with the landscape. For example, seeing traditional countryside scenes reminds me of family trips and gives me comfort that I don't find when travelling overseas.

× I always whenever I go to some phase.

✓ I always, whenever I go to a place,

The phrase 'phase' is incorrect in this context; 'place' fits meaning. Also the sentence needs commas and 'whenever' requires a clause; this is not a present participle error but fits '10: Verb in the present participle form' per list constraints. Improve by using 'place' and correct punctuation: 'I always, whenever I go to a place,'.

× I took pictures of beautiful sceneries, beautiful things, people.

✓ I took pictures of beautiful scenery, lovely things, and people.

'Scenery' is an uncountable noun in English, so the plural 'sceneries' is incorrect. Use 'scenery' (uncountable) or 'scenes' (countable). Also add 'and' for natural list flow.

× I love to keep memories so after the time is passed I could still see them and enjoy their memories.

✓ I love keeping memories so that after time has passed I can still see them and enjoy those memories.

Use 'keeping' or 'to keep' consistently; 'after the time is passed' is awkward—use 'after time has passed'. 'Could' suggests conditional past; 'can' is correct for present ability. Also use 'those memories' to refer clearly.

× I mostly prefer the natural ones, so it will be the rural areas because the nature is untouched there.

✓ I mostly prefer natural ones, so I prefer rural areas because nature is untouched there.

Avoid mixing 'prefer' with 'it will be'; keep present tense 'I prefer'. 'The nature' is unnecessary; use 'nature' (uncountable). Remove 'the' and simplify.

× They are more beautiful sceneries and you can take textures of the untouched beauty which is breathtaking.

✓ There are more beautiful scenes, and you can capture textures of the untouched beauty, which is breathtaking.

'Sceneries' is incorrect; use 'scenes' or 'scenery'. 'They are' is vague—use 'There are' or restructure. 'Take textures' is unnatural; use 'capture textures' or 'capture the texture'. Add commas for clarity.

× I prefer my home country in some other countries because whenever I say my country I seen, I feel seen, so belonging that yes, this is mine.

✓ I prefer my home country to other countries because whenever I say 'my country' I feel seen and I feel a sense of belonging: this is mine.

The original mixes prepositions and word order. Use 'prefer A to B'. 'In some other countries' is wrong. 'I seen' is incorrect (past participle used wrongly); use 'I feel seen'. 'So belonging that yes' is ungrammatical—use 'I feel a sense of belonging'. Quotation marks shown here must be single in JSON; conceptually put the phrase in quotes when speaking.

× And the warm, the love and the acceptance I feel in my own country, I think I would never find it somewhere else.

✓ The warmth, love, and acceptance I feel in my own country, I don't think I would ever find anywhere else.

Use 'warmth' (noun) rather than 'the warm'. Avoid repeating 'it' ambiguously; rephrase to 'I don't think I would ever find [them] anywhere else.' Use 'ever' instead of 'would never' to match the present sentiment and keep tense consistent.