视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., verb forms, articles) and avoid repetition. Mention purpose clearly (e.g., memories, sharing).

範例: I don't often take photos, but sometimes I do. For example, when I visit a famous restaurant or a tourist attraction, I take pictures to save memories and share them on Instagram.

建議: Give a clear preference sentence and support it with specific reasons using linking words (e.g., because, however). Use correct nouns and adjectives (urban areas, rural areas) and avoid unclear phrases. Limit to 2–3 supporting sentences.

範例: I prefer urban areas because they are more developed and offer better facilities, such as restaurants and sightseeing spots. However, some people prefer rural areas because they are quieter and more natural.

建議: Start with a direct answer (own country or other countries), then give clear, specific reasons and compare both places using linking words (e.g., although, while). Fix grammar (have -> has, rural -> rural country) and avoid vague phrases.

範例: I prefer views in other countries, especially the UAE, because it is urban and offers more attractions and photo opportunities. Although Afghanistan has beautiful natural landscapes, it is less developed, so I enjoy taking photos more when I travel abroad.

× No, I'm not interested in photographing but some of the time I will take a picture of so many places.

✓ No, I'm not interested in photographing, but sometimes I take pictures of many places.

The original mixes future 'will' with a habitual idea; use simple present 'take' for habitual actions. 'some of the time' is awkward here; 'sometimes' is more natural. 'a picture of so many places' is incorrect quantifier and count usage; use plural 'pictures of many places'. Also add a comma before 'but' to separate clauses.

× For example when I go to a famous restaurant or when I go to a famous places and tourist area, I will take the picture and just it's for my keeping it safe and drafted memory in Instagram.

✓ For example, when I go to a famous restaurant or a famous place and tourist area, I take pictures to keep them as memories on Instagram.

Use 'a famous place' (singular) not 'a famous places'. 'Take the picture' suggests a specific picture; use plural 'take pictures' for general habit. 'for my keeping it safe and drafted memory' is ungrammatical; use 'to keep them as memories'. Preposition 'in Instagram' should be 'on Instagram'. Present simple 'take' fits habitual action better than 'will take'. Added commas for clarity.

× I prefer urban area because in my point of view it will be more luxury and more developed.

✓ I prefer urban areas because, in my point of view, they are more luxurious and more developed.

Use plural 'urban areas' for general preference. Insert commas around 'in my point of view'. 'It will be' is incorrect for a general statement; use 'they are'. 'Luxury' is a noun; the adjective 'luxurious' is required. Subject 'areas' needs plural verb agreement 'they are'.

× So most of the time I would like to go and take each of the urban area.

✓ So most of the time I would like to visit and take photos in urban areas.

'Take each of the urban area' is awkward and ungrammatical. Use verbs 'visit' and 'take photos in' to express the idea. Maintain plural 'urban areas' for generality. The corrected sentence preserves the speaker's preference.

× But in other hand or in other side some of the people they like rural area because it's a natural, natural meat of cold and it's a.

✓ On the other hand, some people like rural areas because they are natural, peaceful, and colder.

Use the fixed phrase 'on the other hand'. Remove redundant 'some of the people they' to 'some people'. Use plural 'rural areas'. 'Natural meat of cold' is meaningless; likely intended 'natural, peaceful, and colder'. Use plural pronoun agreement 'they are'. End the sentence clearly.

× I am from Afghanistan so my country have a nature and it's mostly a weekend.

✓ I am from Afghanistan, so my country has a lot of natural areas and is mostly rural.

Subject-verb agreement: 'country have' should be 'country has'. 'have a nature' is unidiomatic; use 'has a lot of natural areas' or 'is natural'. 'mostly a weekend' is incorrect—likely meant 'mostly rural' or 'underdeveloped'. The corrected version clarifies meaning and fixes verb agreement.

× Call it it's an rural country because it's not more developed.

✓ You could say it's a rural country because it is not very developed.

Use 'a rural country' not 'an rural country' (since 'r' is a consonant sound). 'Not more developed' is awkward; use 'not very developed'. 'Call it' is informal phrasing; 'You could say' is clearer.

× But I'm living in UAE so it's a you know, it's a urban area.

✓ But I live in the UAE, so it's an urban area.

Use simple present 'I live' for current residence. Include the article 'the' before 'UAE'. 'a you know, it's a urban area' is disfluent; remove filler and use 'an urban area' (use 'an' before vowel sound). Also 'a urban' is wrong; should be 'an urban'.

× So I prefer the UAE has better and I can take more.

✓ So I prefer the UAE because it is better and I can take more pictures there.

Original mixes structures incorrectly. Use 'I prefer the UAE because it is better' to explain preference. Add 'pictures' to clarify 'take more'. Add 'there' for location. Use present simple for general preference 'I prefer' and 'it is'.