视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve clarity and accuracy: avoid mispronunciations (e.g. 'divorce' → 'diverse' or 'different'), remove filler words (uh), finish sentences, and keep answers concise (max 3–4 sentences). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Also correct grammar (e.g. 'make people learn' → 'help people learn').

範例: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing different landscapes because each scene has unique colors and textures. For example, I often film short videos explaining composition and lighting so viewers can learn how to describe a view more clearly.

建議: Make sentences grammatically correct and more concise, use linking words properly, and add one specific example. Avoid repeating 'moreover' and fix collocations (e.g. 'feel more therapy' → 'find it therapeutic'). Keep response within 3–4 sentences.

範例: I prefer rural views. I recently moved from a busy city to a semi-rural area surrounded by many trees and flowers, which has greater biodiversity. As a result, I find walking in my garden very therapeutic because the sights and sounds help me relax.

建議: Clarify and organize the answer: begin with a direct statement, then give specific comparisons with linking words. Correct grammar and vocabulary (e.g. 'middle India is not that' → 'central India is less appealing to me'). Avoid repetition and unnecessary hesitation.

範例: I prefer views within my own country because I haven't traveled abroad. For instance, I love the dramatic landscapes in the north and the lush coastlines in the south, whereas central regions feel flatter and less interesting to me.

× Without a doubt, I am really fond of taking pictures of divorce, uh, landscapes.

✓ Without a doubt, I am really fond of taking pictures of diverse landscapes.

The student used the wrong word 'divorce' instead of 'diverse'. This is a word choice error affecting meaning. Replace with 'diverse' to convey photographing various kinds of landscapes. Also remove filler 'uh' for clarity.

× Moreover, I love to, uh, elaborate about this picture and show this on my video so that I make people to learn how to describe a particular scene, uh, verbally, uh, instead just understanding the overview.

✓ Moreover, I like to elaborate on a picture and show it in my videos so that people can learn how to describe a scene verbally rather than just understand the overview.

Multiple issues: incorrect preposition 'elaborate about' (correct: 'elaborate on'), incorrect infinitive construction 'make people to learn' (correct: 'people can learn' or 'help people learn'), awkward placement and unnecessary 'this' and 'uh'. Rephrase for natural structure and correct verb forms.

× I also teach my.

✓ I also teach my viewers.

Sentence is incomplete and lacks an object. Add the intended object such as 'viewers' or 'students' to complete the sentence.

× I always choose rural areas over urban areas.

✓ I always choose rural areas over urban areas.

This sentence is grammatically correct in present tense; no change needed. Included to acknowledge correctness.

× Moreover I shifted from bustling city life to a semi rural area where I can have a surrounding containing lots of tree and endless flower.

✓ Moreover, I moved from bustling city life to a semi-rural area where I have surroundings containing lots of trees and endless flowers.

Use 'moved' or 'shifted' in simple past is acceptable; 'shifted' is less common, 'moved' is more natural. Subject-verb agreement: 'lots of tree' and 'endless flower' should be plural ('trees', 'flowers'). Add hyphen in 'semi-rural' and correct 'can have' to 'have' for natural expression.

× Moreover have huge biodiversity and whenever I come in the garden and see the view I feel more therapy.

✓ It also has huge biodiversity, and whenever I go into the garden and see the view I feel more relaxed.

Grammar and word choice issues: sentence lacks a subject ('It also has...'). 'Come in the garden' should be 'go into the garden'. 'Feel more therapy' is incorrect; intended meaning is 'feel more relaxed' or 'feel therapeutic'. Use appropriate adjective 'relaxed' or phrase 'it feels therapeutic'.

× Unfortunately I have never been to any other country so till today I have memories of many different landscapes and views of my country only.

✓ Unfortunately, I have never been to any other country, so until today I only have memories of the many different landscapes and views of my own country.

Minor word order and article usage: 'till today' is acceptable but 'until today' is more formal. Place 'only' near the phrase it modifies ('only have memories of...'). Add 'my own country' for clarity and natural phrasing.

× But I can compare the view of of 1 state to another.

✓ But I can compare the views of one state to those of another.

Fix repetition 'of of' and numeric '1' should be 'one'. Use plural 'views' and parallel structure 'those of another' for clarity.

× I am very much attracted to southern side of my country as well as northern side whereas a middle India is not that.

✓ I am very much attracted to the southern and northern parts of my country, whereas central India is not as much.

Preposition and article errors: use 'the southern and northern parts' or 'the south and north'. 'A middle India' is incorrect — use 'central India'. 'Is not that' is vague; replace with 'is not as much' to compare degrees of attraction.