视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct minor grammatical issues (remove duplicate 'where', use plural or articles correctly) and vary vocabulary (e.g., 'landscapes', 'scenic').

範例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. For example, when I visit rural areas I often capture landscapes of mountains and forests because their peaceful atmosphere helps me relax.

建議: Give a direct topic sentence then support it with a clear reason and a brief example. Avoid repeating the phrase 'rural areas' and use linking words (e.g., 'because', 'for example').

範例: I prefer rural views to urban ones because they are quieter and more natural. For example, I like looking at rolling hills and small villages, which feel more peaceful than busy city streets.

建議: Lead with a direct answer, then explain briefly using linking words. Correct grammar (use 'have' with plural 'places', and include articles). Be specific about what kinds of views in your country you mean.

範例: I prefer views in my own country because I haven't traveled much abroad. For instance, the Philippines offers beautiful coastal scenery and lush mountain landscapes that I find very attractive.

× Yes, I like to take pictures of different views, especially if I am in the rural area where where the scenery you can see is like mountains and trees, which feels so relaxing.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views, especially when I am in rural areas where the scenery includes mountains and trees, which feels very relaxing.

The verb 'like' is commonly followed by the gerund (verb + -ing) when describing hobbies or preferences, so 'like to take' is acceptable but 'like taking' is more natural. 'If I am in the rural area' has problems: the repeated 'where' is redundant and 'the rural area' incorrectly uses the definite article for a general statement; use 'rural areas' or 'the countryside'. 'Where the scenery you can see is like mountains and trees' is awkward; replace with 'where the scenery includes mountains and trees'. 'Which feels so relaxing' is acceptable but 'very relaxing' is more natural here. Suggestions: use gerund after 'like' for habits, remove duplicate words, use plural or 'the countryside' for general places, and simplify relative clauses.

× As someone who lives in urban areas, I find rural areas or the views in rural areas more appealing and so I prefer it over urban.

✓ As someone who lives in an urban area, I find rural areas or the views in rural areas more appealing, so I prefer them over urban ones.

Mixed singular and plural forms create agreement problems. 'Someone who lives in urban areas' is odd because 'someone' typically lives in 'an urban area' or 'a city'. 'I prefer it over urban' uses singular 'it' to refer to plural 'rural areas' and 'urban' as an adjective without a noun. Correct by matching singular/plural: 'an urban area' and refer to rural areas as 'them' and urban areas as 'urban ones'. Suggestions: keep number agreement between subjects and pronouns and use nouns after adjectives when needed (e.g., 'urban ones').

× I haven't personally traveled in different countries, but I can say that the Philippines has a lot of tourist spots and different places to visit that has very nice views.

✓ I haven't personally traveled to different countries, but I can say that the Philippines has a lot of tourist spots and different places to visit that have very nice views.

'Traveled in different countries' is less idiomatic than 'traveled to different countries' when referring to visiting foreign countries. The relative clause 'places to visit that has very nice views' contains a subject-verb agreement error: 'places' is plural, so the verb should be 'have' not 'has'. Suggestions: use 'traveled to' for visiting countries and ensure verb agrees in number with its subject in relative clauses.

× I haven't personally traveled in different countries, but I can say that the Philippines has a lot of tourist spots and different places to visit that has very nice views. So I would say Philippines has it.

✓ I haven't personally traveled to different countries, but I can say that the Philippines has a lot of tourist spots and different places to visit that have very nice views. So I would say the Philippines does.

Preposition 'in' is not the best choice when talking about traveling to other countries; use 'to'. The final sentence 'So I would say Philippines has it' lacks the definite article and sounds informal; use 'the Philippines' and a suitable verb phrase like 'does' to avoid repeating 'has it'. Suggestions: use correct prepositions for movement ('to') and include the definite article with country names that require it ('the Philippines'); replace vague pronoun phrases with concise verbs.