视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Reduce repetition, correct minor grammar, and make the answer more concise while keeping relevant details. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details with a linking phrase. Avoid repeating the same idea with similar words (e.g., "spectacular" and "breathtaking") and fix the small mistake "in an in a rural area."

範例: Yes, I love photographing different views, especially natural scenes. Because I live in a rural area, I often capture dramatic hills and forested mountains; for example, last week I photographed a sunrise over a ridge that highlighted the mist in the valley.

建議: Make a clear direct statement about your preference, correct phrasing and geography, and reduce redundancy. Use linking words to explain reasons and give one specific example of what you like about urban views. Avoid listing a city and a state (California) incorrectly as parallel examples.

範例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the skyline and modern architecture. For instance, in New York the dense cluster of skyscrapers creates dramatic silhouettes at sunset, which I find fascinating and symbolic of 21st-century modernization.

建議: Clarify your position: briefly acknowledge your patriotism, then state your preference and give a specific reason and example. Fix repetition and awkward phrasing ("I've never been to, I've never been abroad") and avoid vague phrases like "European countries" without an example.

範例: Although I love my own country, I would prefer to see views in other countries to broaden my experience. For example, I want to visit the Grand Canyon in the USA and theDolomites in Italy because I have never traveled abroad and I hope to discover landscapes different from those at home.

× Absolutely yes. I am passionate about taking pictures of nature because I live in an in a rural area.

✓ Absolutely yes. I am passionate about taking pictures of nature because I live in a rural area.

The sentence contains a duplicated article 'an a' before 'rural area'. Use a single appropriate article. 'Rural area' is a countable singular noun phrase that requires the indefinite article 'a'. Remove the extra 'an' to correct the article usage.

× That's why the views here are very spectacular and breathtaking.

✓ That's why the views here are spectacular and breathtaking.

The adverb 'very' is unnecessary with adjectives that are already strong (spectacular, breathtaking). Removing 'very' makes the sentence more natural and avoids redundancy. This is a stylistic correction rather than a strict grammatical error.

× There are many hills and mountains.

✓ There are many hills and mountains.

This sentence is grammatically correct; subject-verb agreement is fine because the plural subject 'hills and mountains' matches the plural verb 'are'. No change needed. Included to acknowledge correctness.

× I do love taking pictures of them.

✓ I love taking pictures of them.

Using the auxiliary 'do' for emphasis is acceptable in spoken English, but in formal responses it's clearer to use the simple present 'I love'. If emphasis is required, keep 'I do love'. This is a style suggestion rather than a necessary grammatical correction.

× I reckon the views in urban areas because I'm keen on watching the views of skyscrapers and high rising buildings, especially in large cities such as Almaty, New York or California because they describe the modernization of 21st century.

✓ I prefer the views in urban areas because I'm keen to see skyscrapers and high-rise buildings, especially in large cities such as Almaty, New York, or cities in California, because they show the modernization of the 21st century.

Several present-tense and word-choice issues: 'I reckon the views' is ungrammatical—use 'I prefer the views'. 'Watching the views of skyscrapers' is awkward; use 'to see skyscrapers'. 'High rising buildings' is incorrect; use 'high-rise buildings'. List items need correct commas. 'Describe the modernization of 21st century' needs an article and verb choice: use 'show the modernization of the 21st century'. These changes fix tense/word form and improve clarity.

× I prefer views in your own country or in other countries?

✓ Do you prefer views in your own country or in other countries?

This is the examiner's question in the transcript and is correct as a question. No student correction needed. Included to acknowledge the sentence context.

× To be honest, I'm a patriot. However, I would prefer seeing breathtaking views in other countries such as the USA, European countries because I've never been to, I've never been abroad.

✓ To be honest, I'm a patriot. However, I would prefer to see breathtaking views in other countries such as the USA and countries in Europe because I have never been abroad.

Use the infinitive 'to prefer to see' instead of 'would prefer seeing' for clarity; both are possible but infinitive is more natural here. 'European countries' should be 'countries in Europe' or 'European countries' with 'and' before it, and 'such as the USA, European countries' is linked awkwardly—use 'such as the USA and countries in Europe'. Remove the fragmented clause 'because I've never been to, I've never been abroad' and replace with 'because I have never been abroad' for grammatical completeness.

× That's why I'd like to explore new destinations and places.

✓ That's why I'd like to explore new destinations and places.

The sentence is grammatically correct. It is somewhat redundant ('destinations' and 'places' are similar), but structurally acceptable. No grammatical correction required.