打字— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and organize your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by two specific supporting points using linking words. Avoid repetition and grammar mistakes (e.g., subject-verb agreement, article use) and use more precise vocabulary (e.g., "edit", "save drafts", "formatting"). Aim for 2–3 sentences with coherent linking words such as "because" and "for example."

範例: I prefer typing because it makes editing and formatting much easier. For example, I can quickly delete or save drafts and choose different fonts, which helps me produce more professional-looking documents.

建議: Start with a direct topic sentence saying which device you use most, then give specific routine details. Correct tense and article errors and remove fillers. Use linking words like "because" and "so" to make reasons clear. Be concise and avoid vague phrases.

範例: I mainly use a laptop because my employer provided one for remote work. During the day I use my personal laptop in the morning and the company laptop or tablet in the evening, spending about eight hours typing emails and messages for patients.

建議: Give a clear time reference and two concise supporting details. Correct grammar (past tense consistency, articles) and use specific examples (e.g., "floppy disks", "computer class"). Link ideas with "when" or "because" and avoid hesitations.

範例: I learned to type in high school when we took a computer class that taught basic typing and troubleshooting. I still remember saving files on floppy disks and practicing on the school's desktop computers.

建議: Provide a direct topic sentence about your improvement method and include a specific example of practice (e.g., touch-typing exercises, online tests) with linking words like "because" or "for example." Reduce repetition and use correct phrasing (e.g., "master the keyboard", "becomes").

範例: I improve my typing mainly through daily practice at work, which helps me build speed and accuracy. For example, I also use online typing tests and practice touch-typing exercises for 15 minutes a day to maintain and increase my speed.

× I prefer typing because it's easier for me to edit when there is a wrong typing.

✓ I prefer typing because it's easier for me to edit when there is a typing mistake.

The pronoun 'there is a wrong typing' is incorrect and awkward. Use 'a typing mistake' to refer to an error in typing; 'there is' + singular noun fits: 'there is a typing mistake.' Also 'wrong' is not idiomatic before 'typing.' Use 'a typing mistake' for clarity.

× I could delete, or even if I'm in a hurry I could just save it in, redo my activities.

✓ I can delete it, or if I'm in a hurry I can just save it and redo my work.

Modal verb tense consistency and verb forms: 'could' suggests past ability but context is present preference; use 'can.' 'Save it in' is incorrect preposition; use 'save it' and 'redo my work' is clearer than 'redo my activities.'

× And it's easier for me to express my writing when I'm typing because it's also could express my grammar and spelling.

✓ And it's easier for me to express my ideas when I'm typing because it also helps show my grammar and spelling.

Pronoun and auxiliary misuse: 'it's also could express' mixes 'it is' and modal 'could.' Use 'it also helps show' to express that typing makes grammar and spelling visible. 'Express my writing' is unnatural; use 'express my ideas.'

× It is. Also more formal than handwriting.

✓ It is also more formal than handwriting.

Fragment: 'It is.' followed by 'Also more formal than handwriting.' Combine into one sentence to supply the missing verb and subject: 'It is also more formal than handwriting.'

× I could save if and with the things when I'm typing my message.

✓ I can save files and attachments when I'm typing a message.

Pronoun and noun choice errors: 'save if and with the things' is incoherent. Use specific nouns: 'files and attachments.' Use 'can' for present ability. 'Typing my message' -> 'typing a message.'

× Also I could choose different fonts.

✓ I can also choose different fonts.

Word order and modal tense: place 'also' before the verb for natural flow and use 'can' instead of 'could' to match present preference.

× Particularly I use both, but I'm more on the, uh, personal computer I think because I'm working at home as a registered nurse.

✓ I use both, but I use my personal computer more because I work at home as a registered nurse.

Awkward phrasing and tense: 'I'm more on the personal computer' is incorrect. Use 'I use my personal computer more.' Keep present simple 'I work' for habitual action.

× So our employer provide us a laptop that we could use from.

✓ So our employer provides us with a laptop that we can use.

Subject-verb agreement and preposition: 'employer provide' should be 'employer provides.' Use 'provides us with a laptop' and 'can' for present ability. Remove incorrect preposition 'from.'

× So in the morning I used my my personal laptop to do things, but in the evening where I have to spend most.

✓ In the morning I use my personal laptop to do things, but in the evening I spend most of my time on my tablet.

Tense inconsistency and sentence fragment: 'used' implies past but context is habitual; use present 'use.' 'Where I have to spend most' is incomplete; clarify as 'I spend most of my time on my tablet.'

× That I'm on front of my tablet.

✓ I am in front of my tablet then.

Preposition and sentence structure: use 'in front of' not 'on front of.' Also attach to previous idea; 'then' clarifies sequence.

× I spent 8 hours of typing, uh, mostly sending messages, emails to our client.

✓ I spend about eight hours typing, mostly sending messages and emails to our clients.

Tense and quantifier: use present 'spend' for habitual action. Use 'about eight hours' and plural 'clients' or 'a client' as appropriate. Remove unnecessary article 'of' after hours and add 'and' between messages and emails.

× When we were in high school, we started to learn how to type uh, We had a computer subject that taught us how to do basic troubleshooting and typing, uh, on a computer.

✓ When we were in high school, we learned how to type. We had a computer class that taught us basic troubleshooting and typing on a computer.

Verb choice redundancy: 'started to learn' can be simplified to 'learned' for past completed action. 'Computer subject' is nonstandard; use 'computer class.' Remove extra commas and hesitations.

× I remembered that we still using, uh, disk in saving our files and our computer.

✓ I remember that we were still using disks to save our files and computers.

Tense and verb form: 'I remembered' should be 'I remember' for ongoing recollection, or 'I remember that we were' fits past continuous. Use 'were using' and plural 'disks.' Use 'to save' rather than 'in saving.' The end 'and our computer' is unclear; likely 'and on our computers.'

× The usual personal computer is using our here, so mostly our teachers.

✓ Personal computers were common here, and mostly our teachers used them.

Sentence structure and pronoun errors: original is garbled. Clarify who used computers: 'Personal computers were common here, and mostly our teachers used them.' Maintain past tense.

× By practicing almost every day in my work, uh, I usually typed.

✓ By practicing almost every day at work, I usually type.

Tense mismatch: 'usually typed' is past; context is habitual present, so use 'usually type.' Use 'at work' not 'in my work.'

× So when you master the places of the keyboard, you already know how to type uh, faster than the usual.

✓ So when you learn the keyboard layout, you already know how to type faster than usual.

Word choice: 'places of the keyboard' -> 'keyboard layout.' 'Faster than the usual' is incorrect; use 'faster than usual.'

× Uh, mastery comes from a lot of practice, and eventually when you, uh, master it, it's just become a basic routine for you.

✓ Mastery comes from a lot of practice, and eventually when you master it, it just becomes a basic routine for you.

Verb form and subject-verb agreement: 'it's just become' should be 'it just becomes.' Remove unnecessary commas and hesitations.

× Your body adjusts to the learnings and skills that you're always doing.

✓ Your body adjusts to the learning and skills that you practice regularly.

Noun choice: 'learnings' is nonstandard; use 'learning.' 'You're always doing' is informal and awkward; use 'you practice regularly.'

× And in fact, most of the people now.

✓ And in fact, most people do now.

Fragment: 'most of the people now' is incomplete. Add a verb to complete the sentence: 'most people do now' (do what was previously mentioned: type regularly). Specify action if necessary: 'most people do now' implies they type frequently.