旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more fluent and concise: remove filler words (um, uh), correct grammar and clarify the last phrase about expense. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Aim for 2–3 sentences and correct collocations (e.g., “at little cost” or “without much expense”).

範例: Yes, I usually look out the window when I travel by car because it’s an easy way to get a quick impression of a new city. For example, I often notice local architecture and street life without spending extra time or money.

建議: Improve coherence and grammar: avoid repeating words, use linking words to connect ideas, and combine short fragments into full sentences. Be more specific about what makes buildings ‘artistic’ (colors, shapes, decoration) and give one brief example. Keep answers within 2–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I often take photos of interesting scenes I spot through the window. In urban areas I’m drawn to buildings with unusual shapes or colorful facades, because their design and layout create strong aesthetic impressions, such as an old theatre with ornate decorations.

建議: Clarify vocabulary and phrasing: remove fillers and fix unclear phrases (e.g., “small window blowing” likely means “sea breeze”). Use linking words to explain reasons and give a concrete effect (relaxation, reduced stress). Keep sentences short and precise and correct collocations (e.g., “blow off stress”, “release tension”).

範例: I prefer the sea because the cool sea breeze helps me relax and forget my worries. For instance, walking along the beach after work always reduces my stress and makes me feel refreshed.

× Yes, I look out the window when traveling by car.

✓ Yes, I look out of the window when travelling by car.

Use present simple for habitual action (appropriate). Correction: include preposition 'out of' and use consistent British spelling 'travelling' if chosen. 'Look out the window' is commonly 'look out of the window' or 'look out the window' — 'out of' is clearer for movement from inside to outside; ensure consistent spelling.

× Umm, it is a quick way for me to uh, get a glimpse of a city, especially a new one.

✓ Umm, it is a quick way for me to get a glimpse of a city, especially a new one.

Remove filler sounds and extra commas to make the sentence fluent and grammatically correct. The structure 'it is a quick way for me to get a glimpse of a city' correctly uses infinitive to express purpose.

× Umm, uh, without much effort and uh, uh, our expense.

✓ Umm, without much effort and at little expense.

Incorrect preposition phrase 'our expense' should be 'at little expense' or 'at no great expense'. 'At' is the correct preposition before 'expense' in this idiom; 'our' is incorrect in this context.

× Yes, I will take photos when I see something special through the window.

✓ Yes, I take photos when I see something special through the window.

For habitual actions use present simple rather than 'will'. 'Will' implies future one-off actions. Use present simple 'I take' to express regular behaviour.

× Most of the buildings in the in urban areas are full of artistic and give me a strong sense of.

✓ Most of the buildings in urban areas are very artistic and give me a strong sense of beauty.

Original has redundancy 'the in' and incomplete phrase 'full of artistic' which needs a noun. Change to 'are very artistic' and complete the object 'a strong sense of beauty' to finish the idea.

× Aesthetic feelings.

✓ Aesthetic pleasure.

'Aesthetic feelings' is awkward and fragments the thought. Use a noun phrase like 'aesthetic pleasure' or integrate into previous sentence: '...give me a strong sense of aesthetic pleasure.'

× I like this most.

✓ I like that the most.

Clarify the referent: 'this' is vague; 'that the most' refers back to the layout or architecture. Also place it after what is liked for clarity.

× I like the their layout or or architecture.

✓ I like their layout and architecture.

Remove extra article 'the' before 'their' and duplicate 'or'. Use 'and' to join 'layout and architecture' as both are qualities the speaker likes.

× I prefer the sea because I like the the small window blowing from the sea and it make me feel nothing is the problem at all and can release my strength.

✓ I prefer the sea because I like the breeze coming from the sea; it makes me feel that nothing is a problem and helps me relax.

Multiple problems: duplicate 'the', incorrect phrase 'small window blowing' (use 'breeze'), incorrect verb form 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular subject 'it', and awkward phrasing 'release my strength' changed to 'helps me relax'. Also split into two clauses with appropriate punctuation.

× I, I think it's a good, it's, it's a nice way for me to to relax and, umm, throw the bur burden the every day as a a life burden, the burden of work.

✓ I think it's a nice way for me to relax and to relieve the everyday burden of life and work.

Corrected verb forms and removed duplicates. Use infinitive 'to relax' and 'to relieve' for parallel structure. 'Throw the burden' is incorrect idiom; use 'relieve the burden' or 'ease the burden'. Removed repeated words and clarified 'everyday burden of life and work.'