旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise, correct pronunciation/word choice, and use a clear topic sentence followed by one or two supporting details. Avoid irrelevant phrases (e.g. "I cannot hear anything"). Also correct small grammar errors: use "when travelling" or "when I travel" and remove stray words like "TRA." Add a linking word if giving an extra reason.

範例: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy watching changing landscapes. For example, I like seeing farmland and small towns pass by, which helps me relax during long journeys.

建議: Start with a clear direct answer, then give one specific supporting detail and use linking words. Correct grammar and word forms ("blur" → "blurry", "success" → "succeed" is wrong form). Avoid repeating the same idea. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, I sometimes take photos of the scenery outside the window, but they often come out blurry because the vehicle is moving. However, if the view is striking I still try to take several shots so I can choose the best one later.

建議: Give a clear, natural topic sentence naming your preference ("the sea"), then explain briefly with a reason and a specific detail. Avoid unclear phrases like "I prefer C." Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use linking words such as "because" or "since."

範例: I prefer the sea because I grew up in a coastal city and have fond memories of the ocean. For instance, I enjoy the fresh sea air and the sound of waves, which make me feel relaxed and nostalgic.

× I cannot hear anything but I look out the window at the scenery when TRA traveling by bus or car because I enjoy it.

✓ I cannot hear anything, but I look out the window at the scenery when traveling by bus or car because I enjoy it.

The sentence contains an extra fragment 'TRA' and has punctuation issues. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Remove the stray letters 'TRA' and add a comma before 'but' to join the independent clauses. Also use the gerund 'traveling' correctly after 'when'. Suggestion: proofread to remove stray typos and ensure clauses are connected with appropriate punctuation.

× If I can get a good shot, I try, but sometimes it turns out just blur.

✓ If I can get a good shot, I try, but sometimes it turns out just blurry.

The sentence uses the adjective 'blur' where an adverb or adjective describing the result should be used. This is an incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs (ID 13). Use 'blurry' to describe the photo's appearance ('it turns out blurry'). Alternatively, 'it turns out to be blurry' or 'it is just blurred' are acceptable. Keep verb tense consistent and natural.

× So the answer is yes, I try, but sometimes I success.

✓ So the answer is yes, I try, but sometimes I succeed.

The verb 'success' is a noun, not the past tense or present form of the verb. This is a past tense/verb form issue (ID 5). Use the verb 'succeed' in the present simple to match 'I try' and 'sometimes'. If referring to past success, use 'succeeded'. Maintain consistent tense: because the student says 'I try' (present), use 'I succeed' or better 'I succeed sometimes' or 'sometimes I succeed'.

× I succeed, sometimes I don't.

✓ I succeed sometimes; sometimes I don't.

This is a sentence structure/punctuation issue (ID 26). The original has two clauses that need clearer separation. Use a semicolon or separate sentences: 'I succeed sometimes. Sometimes I don't.' Also ensure adverb placement: 'succeed sometimes' or 'sometimes I succeed' are both natural.

× I prefer C, probably because I was raised in a coastal city.

✓ I prefer the sea, probably because I was raised in a coastal city.

Using 'C' is unclear and incorrect in spoken response; this is an incorrect use of pronouns/words (ID 12). Replace 'C' with the intended noun 'the sea' to answer the question clearly. Also include the definite article 'the' with 'sea' when comparing options. Ensure responses use clear referents rather than single letters.

× Although I didn't go there often, I still love the smell of the ocean.

✓ Although I didn't go there often, I still love the smell of the ocean.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable as written; it uses past tense correctly for 'didn't go' and present simple for 'love'. No correction needed. Included here to indicate no error (ID 5).