旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clearer and more natural. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct grammar (use present simple), avoid extraneous words, and give one or two specific supporting details linked with a connector. Also keep the answer within 3–4 sentences. For example, replace unclear phrases like “Yes to Bruno's” and fix verb forms (e.g., “what they are doing”).

範例: Yes, I always look out the window when I travel by bus or car. I enjoy watching people and the changing scenery because it helps me relax. For example, I often notice street markets or parks, which give me a sense of the local life.

建議: Use grammatically correct, concise sentences and avoid informal slang like “wanna.” Give a clear reason with one specific example and connect ideas with linking words (because, so, for example). Correct verb forms and pronouns (e.g., “my photo library has many landscape pictures” and “remember these moments”).

範例: Yes, I often take photos of landscapes from the car because I want to remember special moments. For example, last summer I photographed a mountain range at sunset, and I keep those pictures in my photo album to remind me of the trip.

建議: Answer directly (state preference), then give clear reasons with specific details and logical linking words (because, when, for example). Avoid vague or confusing phrases and keep sentences concise (max 4–5). Correct grammar and vocabulary (e.g., “I prefer the sea/mountains because…”).

範例: I prefer the sea because it changes beautifully with the seasons. For example, in summer the water is bright blue and warm, while in spring the coastline is full of flowers, which makes walks along the shore very pleasant.

× Yes to Bruno's.

✓ Yes, to Bruno.

The original phrase 'Yes to Bruno's.' incorrectly uses the possessive form 'Bruno's' which implies ownership. The speaker likely meant the name 'Bruno' as a destination; use 'Bruno' without apostrophe. Also add a comma for clarity.

× I always do that by travelling by bus, our car.

✓ I always do that when travelling by bus or in our car.

The original sentence has awkward structure and incorrect preposition use ('by travelling by bus, our car'). Replace 'by' with 'when' to indicate time and use 'in our car' for correct preposition. Use 'or' to join the two modes of transport.

× I enjoy to look out the window and observe the people, what they doing and the views.

✓ I enjoy looking out the window and observing the people, what they are doing, and the views.

After 'enjoy' the gerund form is required, not the infinitive. Also 'observe' should be in gerund form to match parallel structure. The clause 'what they doing' lacks the auxiliary verb 'are'. Add commas for clarity.

× Absolutely yes, in my photo library is having many landscape picture because I wanna remember this moment, beautiful moment.

✓ Absolutely yes, my photo library has many landscape pictures because I want to remember these beautiful moments.

Use simple present 'has' rather than 'is having'. 'Picture' should be plural 'pictures' to match 'many'. Informal 'wanna' should be replaced with 'want to'. Use 'these' to refer to multiple moments and plural 'moments' for consistency.

× It's incredible, breathtaking landscape.

✓ It's an incredible, breathtaking landscape.

A singular countable noun 'landscape' requires an article; add 'an'. Also keep the adjective order and commas as given.

× I really like take photo to remember all of you with ourselves.

✓ I really like to take photos to remember being with all of you.

The verb 'like' followed by an infinitive is acceptable ('like to take'), and 'photos' should be plural. The phrase 'all of you with ourselves' is ungrammatical and unclear; replace with 'being with all of you' to express remembering time spent together.

× I prefer to see umm, every season has a different view, you know like winter, you will see it's dark morally summer and in spring it's well like the diamonds blue, very beautiful.

✓ I prefer the mountains. Every season has a different view: in winter it looks dark, in summer it's bright, and in spring it's like blue diamonds, very beautiful.

The original is run-on and unclear. Break into sentences, supply subject and verbs ('it looks'), and replace unclear words ('morally' -> 'in summer it's bright') and awkward phrasing ('well like the diamonds blue' -> 'like blue diamonds'). Ensure tense and descriptions are in simple present for habitual facts.

× So I prefer to see because it's more.

✓ So I prefer to see the mountains because they offer more variety.

The original sentence is incomplete and vague ('because it's more'). Specify what 'more' refers to; use plural pronoun 'they' for 'mountains' and complete the idea ('offer more variety').