旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid fillers and incorrect prepositions. For example, replace “when I traveling” with “when I travel” and use “because” or “so” to connect your reason. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy seeing the greenery and other scenery. For example, watching trees and fields helps me feel relaxed and more connected to nature.

建議: Answer directly and correct grammar mistakes. Use one clear reason and a brief example. Remove vague phrases like “forecast about the greenery.” Use linking words such as “but” or “however” to contrast. Keep sentences short and specific.

範例: Not really. I prefer to simply enjoy the view because taking photos from a moving vehicle is difficult. However, when I travel to places like Chin Hill, I pay attention to the trees and mountains because they look impressive up close.

建議: Give a clear preference statement, then support it with specific reasons using linking words (e.g., “because”, “so”, “however”). Correct grammar (e.g., “I prefer the mountains” not “I before the mountain”) and avoid repetition. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

範例: I prefer the mountains because the air is fresher and hiking in forested areas makes me feel healthy and energetic. However, I also enjoy the sea for its views and relaxing atmosphere.

× I would say yes because when I traveling, I, I'm not only focused about the, uh, weather is I can only see the environment and the greenery, uh, because it's make me, uh, refresh and more in touch with the environment.

✓ I would say yes because when I am traveling, I am not only focused on the weather; I can also see the environment and the greenery, which makes me feel refreshed and more in touch with nature.

The original sentence misuses verb forms and prepositions. 'When I traveling' needs the auxiliary verb 'am' + present participle (Grammar Problem Type ID 8). 'Focused about' is incorrect; correct preposition is 'focused on' (ID 11). 'Weather is I can only see' is ungrammatical and should be split into two clauses. 'It's make me' uses incorrect verb form; 'make' should be third-person singular 'makes' (ID 2) and followed by 'feel' rather than 'refresh' (adjective 'refreshed' required; adjective/adverb issue ID 13). Suggestions: use 'when I am traveling', use 'focused on', change clause structure to 'I can also see...', and use 'which makes me feel refreshed'.

× Not really because I am not that kinds of persons.

✓ Not really, because I am not that kind of person.

The phrase uses incorrect plural forms for 'kind' and 'person'. 'That kinds' should be singular 'that kind' and 'persons' in this context should be singular 'person' (Grammar Problem Type ID 14). Suggestion: use 'that kind of person' for singular self-reference.

× Instead of this, I like to forecast about the greenery and especially the tree when I travel at Chin Hill, uh, when I see the trees around the environments and the here is the mountains is more closer.

✓ Instead, I like to look at the greenery, especially the trees, when I travel to Chin Hill; when I see the trees around the area and the mountains are closer.

Multiple preposition and word choice errors: 'Instead of this' is better as 'Instead' (ID 16 conjunction but mainly phrasing); 'forecast about the greenery' is incorrect verb and preposition — 'look at' or 'think about' is appropriate (ID 11). 'Travel at Chin Hill' should be 'travel to Chin Hill' (ID 11). 'Around the environments' should be 'around the area' (ID 13/11). 'The here is the mountains is more closer' has subject-verb agreement and comparative errors: 'the mountains are closer' (Grammar Problem Type ID 27 and 25). Suggestions: use correct verbs ('look at'), correct prepositions ('to Chin Hill'), and ensure subject-verb agreement ('mountains are closer').

× I before the mountain because it's give me a fresh air and one I traveling about the at the chin here are like a a forest.

✓ I prefer the mountains because they give me fresh air, and when I travel to Chin Hill, it feels like a forest.

Multiple errors: 'I before the mountain' should be 'I prefer the mountains' (verb choice and pluralization; IDs 26 and 1). 'It's give me' uses incorrect verb form; 'give' needs third-person plural 'give' with plural subject 'they' or 'it gives' (IDs 2 and 27). 'a fresh air' article error — 'fresh air' is uncountable and takes no article (ID 22). 'one I traveling about the at the chin here' needs 'when I travel to Chin Hill' (present continuous/perfect tense and preposition errors, IDs 6 and 11). Suggestion: use 'prefer', match subject and verb ('the mountains give me'), omit 'a' before 'fresh air', and use 'when I travel to Chin Hill'.

× I feel more fit and healthy. However I love also the sea.

✓ I feel fitter and healthier. However, I also love the sea.

Comparative forms and adverb placement: 'more fit and healthy' is better as comparative adjectives 'fitter and healthier' (Grammar Problem Type ID 25). 'I love also the sea' places adverb incorrectly; 'also' should come before the verb 'also love' or before the object as 'love the sea too' (ID 20). Suggestion: use comparative forms 'fitter'/'healthier' and place 'also' before the verb: 'I also love the sea'.