旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and grammatically accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Reduce repetition and correct verb forms (e.g., 'I enjoy looking', 'I can absorb'). Use linking words like 'and' or 'so' sparingly and correctly.

範例: Yes. I enjoy looking out of the window when I travel by bus because it lets me observe changing landscapes. For example, I often notice small village scenes and fields, which make the journey relaxing and interesting.

建議: Clarify the idea and fix tense/structure problems. Give a direct answer, explain briefly why, and provide one specific example. Avoid confusing contradictions (inside vs outside window) and filler words.

範例: Yes, I often take photos from a car window when the light is good because many scenes pass by quickly. For instance, last month I photographed a riverside sunset from a moving car, and the warm colours looked beautiful in the pictures.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then support it with specific reasons and an example. Use correct verb forms and avoid fillers like 'umm' and repeated words. Use one linking phrase such as 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas.

範例: I prefer the mountains because they offer more varied scenery and quieter places to explore. For example, from a hilltop I can see forests, valleys and distant villages, and I enjoy taking detailed landscape photos there.

× Yes, of course, it's actually one of the the most interesting activities that I do when I'm traveling by bus, by looking out the window, I could absorbing the beauty of nature and also by the sceneries and I and this makes the trip more.

✓ Yes, of course. It's actually one of the most interesting activities that I do when I'm traveling by bus. By looking out the window, I can absorb the beauty of nature and the scenery, and this makes the trip more enjoyable.

Errors: duplicated article 'the the' and wrong article/word choice 'by the sceneries'; incorrect verb form 'could absorbing' and awkward sentence structure. Suggestions: remove duplicate 'the', use 'one of the most', change 'could absorbing' to 'can absorb' (modal + base verb) to match present habitual action, use singular 'scenery' as an uncountable noun, and split into shorter sentences for clarity. Use 'more enjoyable' to complete the comparative idea. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× Yeah, of course, because when I when I'm inside the car window, it's not possible to capturing sceneries in photos of scenery's nature.

✓ Yeah, of course, because when I'm inside the car, it's not possible to capture scenery in photos.

Errors: incorrect gerund 'to capturing' after 'to' and awkward noun phrase 'scenery's nature' and redundant 'inside the car window'. Suggestions: after 'possible' use the bare infinitive 'to capture' or restructure without 'to' (e.g., 'you can't capture'); use 'scenery' (uncountable) and omit needless possessive. Grammar problem type ID: 8

× But when I'm I am outside the window, it's it's very lucky that I can take a lot of pictures of the sceneries.

✓ But when I'm outside the car, I'm lucky because I can take a lot of pictures of the scenery.

Errors: repeated words 'I'm I am' and 'it's it's', awkward phrase 'outside the window' and plural 'sceneries'. Suggestions: remove repetitions, use 'outside the car' or 'by the window' for clarity, use 'scenery' as uncountable, and prefer 'lucky' without 'very' in formal speech or keep if speaking informally. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× I prefer the mountains more because I could, umm, captures, details, shots of uh, when I'm in the hilltop and I would have a breathtaking views of it.

✓ I prefer the mountains because I can capture detailed shots when I'm on a hilltop, and I have a breathtaking view.

Errors: modal/tense inconsistency 'could' vs present preference, incorrect verb form 'captures' (should be 'capture'), unnecessary commas and filler words, wrong preposition 'in the hilltop' (use 'on a hilltop'), and subject-verb agreement 'views' with 'a'. Suggestions: use 'can' to express ability in present, use base verb 'capture', 'detailed shots' for adjective-noun order, 'on a hilltop', and match singular 'a breathtaking view'. Grammar problem type ID: 2

× So that's why I prefer mountains more than the sea.

✓ So that's why I prefer the mountains to the sea.

Errors: redundancy 'prefer ... more than' and missing article 'the' before 'mountains' depending on context. Suggestions: use 'prefer X to Y' or 'prefer X over Y'; include 'the' if referring to a general category ('the mountains' and 'the sea') for natural phrasing. Grammar problem type ID: 25