旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is clear and relevant, but you can improve naturalness and fluency by using a stronger topic sentence, avoiding minor grammar slips, and adding one specific example with a linking word. Also keep it within 3–4 sentences. For example, say why it relaxes you and give a short specific detail about what you like to see.

範例: Yes — I always look out the window when I travel by bus or car because it gives me a refreshing change from the city. For instance, I enjoy watching passing fields and old houses, which helps me unwind after a busy day. As a result, I often feel calmer by the time I arrive.

建議: Good content and intention, but improve sentence structure and cohesion. Use linking words (for example, therefore) correctly and avoid small errors (e.g., 'photos outside of the car' → 'photos from the car window'). Make one concise topic sentence, then add a specific example and a result sentence linked with a connector.

範例: Yes, I often take photos from the car window to capture memorable views. For example, I usually photograph sunsets and striking mountain ridges because the light changes quickly. Consequently, these photos remind me of the journey when I look at them later.

建議: Your answer communicates your preference but contains grammar mistakes and disfluencies that reduce clarity (e.g., 'of because of the it's never an expanding horizon'). Organize into a clear topic sentence, explain reasons with linking words, and give one specific example. Avoid fillers like 'uh' and split thoughts into complete sentences.

範例: I prefer the sea because its wide, ever-changing horizon relaxes me. For instance, in the late afternoon I enjoy watching the sunset as the sky shifts through pink and orange, which always makes me feel peaceful.

× Yes I do. I enjoy looking at the scenery when I travel by bus or car because it is a different view from the city and it relaxes me.

✓ Yes, I do. I enjoy looking at the scenery when I travel by bus or car because it offers a different view from the city and relaxes me.

The original sentence uses 'it is a different view' which is grammatically acceptable but slightly awkward. Replacing 'it is' with 'offers' makes the sentence clearer and more natural in present tense. Also add a comma after 'Yes' for correct punctuation. Suggestion: use verbs that directly describe what 'scenery' does (e.g., 'offers', 'provides').

× Yes, I often take photos outside of the car.

✓ Yes, I often take photos outside the car.

The phrase 'outside of the car' is not ungrammatical but 'outside the car' is more natural and idiomatic. No present participle change required; keep present simple for habitual action. Suggestion: prefer concise prepositional phrases: 'outside the car'.

× I like to capture special moments, for example, the sunset, the beautiful mountain.

✓ I like to capture special moments, for example, the sunset and the beautiful mountains.

The original uses 'the beautiful mountain' which is incorrect because context suggests mountains in general or a specific mountain; plural 'mountains' fits better with 'sunset' and the idea of scenery. Also replace comma with 'and' to join items. Suggestion: ensure noun number (singular/plural) matches context and use parallel structure in lists.

× So when I go home, it will remind me the beautiful journey that I've taken.

✓ So when I go home, it reminds me of the beautiful journey I took.

Mixing future ('will remind') with past perfect ('I've taken') is awkward. Since the speaker refers to a habitual reaction when returning home, present simple 'reminds' is appropriate. Also English requires 'remind someone of something', so add 'of'. Using simple past 'I took' is clearer than present perfect here. Suggestion: use consistent tense and correct verb-preposition collocation ('remind of').

× I prefer the sea of because of the it's never an expanding horizon and it relaxes me when afternoon comes.

✓ I prefer the sea because it has an ever-expanding horizon and it relaxes me in the afternoon.

The original contains extra words 'of' and an incorrect contraction 'the it's', making the sentence ungrammatical. 'Never an expanding horizon' is wrong; the intended meaning is 'an ever-expanding horizon' or 'a never-ending horizon'. Use 'has' to describe the sea and 'in the afternoon' for time. Suggestion: remove unnecessary words, fix contractions, and choose correct adjectives ('ever-expanding' or 'never-ending').

× Sunset.

✓ The sunset is beautiful.

A single-word fragment 'Sunset.' is a sentence fragment lacking a verb; it should be expanded to a full sentence to convey the idea. Suggestion: combine with the next sentence or write a complete sentence.

× The sunset is a beautiful scene with, uh, changing colors, which I find relaxing and calm.

✓ The sunset is a beautiful scene with changing colors, which I find relaxing and calming.

'Relaxing and calm' pairs an adjective ('calm') with a gerund/adjective ('relaxing'); parallel structure prefers 'relaxing and calming' or 'relaxing and peaceful'. Also remove filler 'uh' in formal responses. Suggestion: maintain parallel adjective forms and omit fillers.