旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and avoid repetition and filler sounds. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct small grammar issues (e.g., “a window seat,” “farms”) and avoid repeating words like “while travelling.”

範例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel, because I enjoy watching the landscape. For example, when I go to my hometown I sit by a window seat to see the mountains and the farming fields, which I find relaxing and interesting.

建議: Reduce hesitation and simplify the response. Provide a clear reason and one specific condition when you would take photos. Replace vague phrases with precise ones (e.g., “if a scene is special or memorable”).

範例: No, I usually don't take photos out of a car window. I only take pictures when something is special or worth remembering, for example, an unusual sunset or an impressive landscape that I want to show my family.

建議: Clarify and expand slightly with natural vocabulary and a linking word. Avoid unclear expressions like “CQ say.” Give one specific reason and a brief example of what you enjoy about the seaside.

範例: I prefer the sea to the mountains because the ocean offers an endless view and a relaxing atmosphere. For instance, spending a summer afternoon on the beach, listening to the waves and feeling the breeze, makes me feel calm and refreshed.

× I enjoy seeing sceneries uh while travelling because while travelling I prefer to sit at window seat to see the sceneries.

✓ I enjoy seeing scenery while travelling because I prefer to sit in the window seat to see the scenery.

'Scenery' is an uncountable noun, so use singular 'scenery' not 'sceneries'. Also 'window seat' requires the article 'the' and the preposition is 'in' for sitting in a seat. Suggestion: learn common uncountable nouns and article+preposition combinations for seats.

× One of the example is while I am travelling to my hometown, the sceneries of mountains and and the farming farms where.

✓ For example, when I am travelling to my hometown, I see the mountains and the farmland.

The original is fragmented and contains redundancy ('and and', 'farming farms') and incorrect word order. 'One of the example is' should be 'For example' or 'One example is'. 'Farmland' is the correct noun and does not need 'farming' plus 'farms'. Also complete the clause with a clear verb 'I see'. Suggestion: simplify the structure and avoid redundant words.

× Honestly, uh, I won't take pictures, pictures of the scenery outside the car window because, uh, I will take only pictures when it is important and if it, if it, if, if it does not capture in our eyes.

✓ Honestly, I don't take pictures of the scenery outside the car window because I only take pictures when it is important or when it cannot be captured by the eye.

Using 'won't' implies future refusal; the context is a habitual action, so use present simple 'don't'. Also remove repeated words and restructure the conditional: 'when it cannot be captured by the eye' is clearer than 'if it does not capture in our eyes'. Suggestion: use present simple for habits and avoid filler repetitions.

× So I will take, uh, pictures at that time only.

✓ So I will take pictures only at that time.

Placement of 'only' is better before the phrase it modifies: 'only at that time' is clearer. The sentence is future-oriented following the condition, so 'will take' is acceptable. Suggestion: place modifiers like 'only' next to the words they modify for clarity.

× I prefer sea to mountains because CQ say endless view, endless view and chilling out.

✓ I prefer the sea to the mountains because, I would say, the view seems endless and it's relaxing.

We usually use definite articles with 'sea' and 'mountains' when speaking generally: 'the sea' and 'the mountains'. The abbreviation 'CQ' is unclear and unnecessary; use 'I would say' or omit. Also 'endless view, endless view' is repetitive; rephrase to 'the view seems endless'. Suggestion: use definite articles for general references to landscapes and avoid unexplained abbreviations.

× Chilling at a beach in summer season will make me more comfortable and peaceful.

✓ Relaxing on a beach in the summer makes me feel more comfortable and peaceful.

'Chilling' is informal; 'relaxing' is more appropriate. Use 'on a beach' rather than 'at a beach' for lying on the sand. Use 'in the summer' or 'in summer' rather than 'in summer season'. Also use present simple 'makes' for general preference. Suggestion: prefer standard vocabulary in test situations and use correct prepositions for locations.