旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise, correct basic grammar, and use a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting details. Avoid redundant phrases (e.g., “visiting outside”). Use correct verb forms and limit to 3–4 sentences. Add a linking word to connect ideas (e.g., “because” or “so”).

範例: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy seeing different landscapes. For example, I like noticing rolling hills and small villages, and I sometimes take photos to remember those scenes.

建議: Answer directly with a clear reason and one specific example. Reduce repetition (avoid repeating “keep” and “with me”). Use linking words like “so” or “for example” appropriately. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and correct collocations (e.g., “keep memories” → “keep memories of a place”).

範例: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside because I like to keep memories of places I visit. For example, if I see an unusual building or a beautiful sunset, I take a quick photo so I can show it to my family later.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give one or two specific reasons with correct grammar and vocabulary. Avoid unclear phrases (“make Maggie”) and correct verb agreement and word choice (“helps me relax,” “calm sea,” “cook Maggie” if you mean instant noodles). Use linking words like “because” and “for example.” Keep to 2–3 sentences.

範例: I prefer the sea because its calm waves help me relax after a stressful day. For example, I enjoy sitting on the beach and listening to the waves, and sometimes I cook instant noodles there and enjoy the view.

× Of course, I look out of the window whenever I am traveling by bus or a car.

✓ Of course, I look out of the window whenever I am traveling by bus or by car.

Issues: incorrect article 'a' before 'car' and awkward preposition. Use 'by bus' and 'by car' as parallel prepositional phrases; do not use 'a' before modes of transport when using 'by'. This keeps parallel structure and correct idiom.

× I like to watching different natural landscapes while I am visiting outside of my city or my country.

✓ I like watching different natural landscapes when I visit places outside my city or country.

Issues: incorrect combination 'like to watching' (mixes infinitive and gerund) and awkward preposition 'visiting outside of'. Use either 'like to watch' or 'like watching'; here 'like watching' is natural. Replace 'while I am visiting outside of my city or my country' with 'when I visit places outside my city or country' for clarity and correct preposition use.

× I love to capture the different moments at that time, so I take photographs while visiting outside.

✓ I love to capture those moments, so I take photographs when I travel outside.

Issues: vague phrase 'at that time' and incorrect 'while visiting outside'. Replace with 'those moments' and 'when I travel outside' to match tense and make the meaning clear. 'Visiting outside' is not idiomatic.

× Yes, I take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I love to keep memories with me.

✓ Yes, I take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I like to keep memories.

Issue: awkward phrasing 'keep memories with me'. Use 'keep memories' or 'keep them with me'. Also 'love to keep memories' can be more naturally 'like to keep memories'.

× So whenever I see unusual things, I suddenly take photographs to keep it with me so that I can show it to my friends or the family members for the next time and memorize that time.

✓ Whenever I see unusual things, I immediately take photographs to keep them so I can show them to my friends or family later and remember the moment.

Issues: pronoun agreement ('things' plural requires 'them' not 'it'), redundant and awkward phrases ('suddenly' and 'for the next time and memorize that time'). Use 'immediately' for sudden action, 'them' for plural, and 'later'/'remember the moment' for clarity.

× I prefer the sea because when it is running very calmly it help me to relax my mind as when I am tired so I go outside.

✓ I prefer the sea because when it is calm it helps me relax, so I go there when I am tired.

Issues: 'running very calmly' is an odd verb choice for the sea; use 'calm'. Subject-verb agreement: 'it help' should be 'it helps'. Remove unnecessary 'to' after 'helps me' and simplify sentence structure for clarity.

× So just I want to relax myself so the coming waves of the sea and the nature of the sea is too good.

✓ I just want to relax, so the incoming waves and the sea's atmosphere are very soothing.

Issues: incorrect word order ('So just I want'), reflexive/inappropriate phrasing 'relax myself', and subject-verb agreement ('nature of the sea is' for plural idea). Use natural noun phrases 'incoming waves' and 'sea's atmosphere' and 'are' to agree with compound subject; 'soothing' is a natural adjective.

× I love to make Maggie over there behind the sea.

✓ I love to make Maggie there by the sea.

Issues: unclear verb 'make Maggie' and likely misspelling 'Maggie' for 'maggie' (instant noodles brand 'Maggi') or could mean 'have Maggi' (cook/eat). Also 'over there behind the sea' is illogical—you cannot be behind the sea; use 'by the sea' or 'at the seaside'. If you mean the instant noodles, say 'I love to make Maggi by the sea.'