旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 答えは明確で自然ですが、構成を少し整理して、接続詞や具体例を追加するとさらに効果的です。例えば、主題文の後に理由を2つ程度に分け、"first"や"also"のような接続語を使って流れを良くしてください。発音や語彙面でも“the scenery changing”は“the scenery change”や“the changing scenery”と表現した方が自然です。

範例: Yes, I do. I enjoy looking out of the window because it makes long journeys less boring. For example, I like watching towns and fields pass by, and I often get excited when I see signs that show we are near our destination.

建議: 理由は述べられていますが、表現に不自然な箇所と論理の繋がりの不足があります。"when I see from the car window"は不自然なので"when I look from the car window"または"when viewing from a moving car"に直し、"without any emotions"は意味があいまいです。代わりに"without blur"や"clear photos"など具体的な困難を示してください。さらに接続語（"because", "so", "therefore"）を整理して一文を簡潔にしてください。

範例: No, I usually don't. Because the car is moving, photos often come out blurred, so it's hard to get clear shots from the window.

建議: 回答は理由と感想が含まれており良いですが、文を短く分け、接続語を整理するとさらに自然になります。例えば"first of all"に続けてもう一つの理由を明確に示し、最後にまとめの文で感想を簡潔に述べてください。また時制の一貫性に気をつけ、"I feel that it was worth doing it"は"I feel it's always worth the effort"などにすると自然です。語彙は"refreshing"や"peaceful"と合っていて良いです。

範例: I prefer the mountains. First, I'm not a confident swimmer, so I avoid the sea. Also, hiking to a summit rewards me with peaceful, refreshing views, so I always feel it's worth the effort.

× Yes, I enjoy looking out the window when traveling by bus or car because watching the scenery changing helps me not to get bored.

✓ Yes, I enjoy looking out the window when traveling by bus or car because watching the scenery change helps me not to get bored.

Using 'changing' here is incorrect because after 'watch' we use the base form of the verb (bare infinitive) when describing seeing an action happen. Use 'watch the scenery change' not 'watching the scenery changing'. Also keep present tense consistent: 'enjoy' and 'watch' describe habitual actions. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× And when I found a traffic sign indicating that the destination was almost there, I feel excited.

✓ And when I find a traffic sign indicating that the destination is almost there, I feel excited.

The original mixes past ('found', 'was') with present ('feel'). For habitual or general reactions use present tense: 'when I find' and 'is almost there' with 'I feel excited'. Change both verbs to present to maintain tense consistency. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× No, I don't because the scenery is always moving when I see from the car window so it's very difficult to take photos without any emotions.

✓ No, I don't because the scenery is always moving when I see it from the car window, so it's very difficult to take photos without blurring or emotional expression.

Several issues: missing object after 'see' (need 'see it'), awkward phrase 'without any emotions' (unclear meaning; likely 'without blurring' or 'without showing emotion'). Also run-on sentence—add a comma before 'so'. Clarify intended meaning and correct sentence structure. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× I prefer mountains because first of all, I'm not a good swimmer, so I don't like to go to the seas.

✓ I prefer the mountains because, first of all, I'm not a good swimmer, so I don't like to go to the sea.

Use the definite article 'the' before 'mountains' when referring to mountains in general in this comparative preference (optional but more natural: 'the mountains'). 'Seas' is plural and unnatural here; use 'the sea' to refer generally to seaside activities. Also add commas for clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 1

× And when I hike to the top of the mountain and see the beautiful scenery around the mountain, it's very refreshing and peaceful and I feel that it was worth doing it.

✓ And when I hike to the top of the mountain and see the beautiful scenery around it, it's very refreshing and peaceful, and I feel that it is worth doing.

Maintain present tense for habitual actions: 'hike' and 'see' are correct, so 'I feel that it is worth doing' (present) fits better than 'was'. Also avoid repeating 'the mountain'—use 'it'. Remove the unnecessary 'it' at the end of the sentence. Add a comma before 'and'. Grammar problem type ID: 5