建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Ответ звучит неестественно и сбивчиво: есть повторения («in the city, in a city»), грамматические ошибки (например, «He have»), нет чёткой структуры. Нужно начать с прямого предложения («Yes») и добавить 1–2 конкретных деталей о высоте или количестве зданий, используя связующие слова. Также следует избежать лишних пауз и звукоподражаний («umm»).

範例: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home in Bishkek. For example, a modern office tower nearby has about 20 floors, and there are also a few residential high-rises along the main avenue.

建議: Ответ слишком размытый и повторяющийся; много ненужных слов («it's basic for me» повторяется) и разговорных выражений («just chilling»). Неясно, почему студент не фотографирует здания. Следует дать короткий прямой ответ, затем объяснить причину с 1–2 конкретными примерами и связкой (because, so).

範例: No, I don’t usually take photos of buildings because I have lived here for 17 years and they feel familiar to me. If I do take pictures, it’s usually of unusual architecture or when I travel to a new city.

建議: Ответ понятен, но содержит грамматические ошибки («a Paris», «have have»), повторы и неясные формулировки. Следует начать с конкретного здания или города, дать причину и один конкретный пример (например, название здания). Используйте связки (because, for example) и корректную грамматику.

範例: Yes, I would like to visit Paris because it has many beautiful buildings. For example, I want to see the Notre-Dame and the Eiffel Tower because of their historic architecture.

建議: Ответ краткий, но неструктурированный и с ошибками («I went to live in», «shy life»). Нужно дать чёткий прямой ответ («No»), затем объяснить причину с конкретными деталями (например, preferring a house, more space, quiet neighbourhood) и использовать связки (because, so).

範例: No, I would prefer to live in a private house because I like a quieter, more private life. For instance, a small house with a garden would be better for relaxing and entertaining friends.

× It's a, it's a really big.

✓ It's really big.

The redundant pronoun 'a' before 'really big' is unnecessary and ungrammatical in English. Remove the extra 'a' to form a correct adjective phrase: 'It's really big.' Also avoid repeating contractions 'it's' twice in a short clause.

× He have a 20, umm, 20 yes, and I.

✓ It has about 20 floors, and I...

The original sentence uses 'He have', which mixes a third-person singular subject with a plural verb form and an incorrect pronoun for a building. Use 'it' for a building and 'has' for third-person singular. Clarify what '20' refers to (e.g., floors) and add a trailing phrase if needed.

× I live in the city, in a city, its name is Bishkek and I, we have a not too much, a lot of buildings, but we have buildings like avant-garde.

✓ I live in the city, in Bishkek, and we don't have too many buildings, but we do have some avant-garde buildings.

Use 'in Bishkek' rather than 'in a city, its name is Bishkek'. 'Not too much' is incorrect for countable nouns; use 'not too many'. 'A lot of buildings' and 'we have buildings like avant-garde' are awkward; rephrase to 'we do have some avant-garde buildings.'

× No, especially no because I live in this country 17 years and for me it's also basic and I think for me it's like a normal things and it's not important things for me.

✓ No, especially not, because I have lived in this country for 17 years, and for me it's ordinary; I think it's a normal thing and not important to me.

Use 'not' instead of 'no' as a negative adverb for the clause. For duration use present perfect 'have lived' with 'for 17 years'. 'Basic' is not idiomatic here; 'ordinary' or 'normal' fits better. Use singular 'thing' for general concept and avoid repeating 'for me' too often.

× I really love to just chilling and take fun out and just chilling, yes.

✓ I really love just chilling and having fun.

After 'love' use either the infinitive ('to chill') or the gerund ('chilling'); 'to just chilling' mixes forms. Also use 'having fun' instead of 'take fun out'. Remove repetition.

× Yes, I would like to visit a Paris and it's umm, I think it's very beautiful.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit Paris; I think it's very beautiful.

Do not use the indefinite article 'a' before names of cities. Use the city name alone: 'visit Paris.' Use a semicolon or conjunction to connect the related clause.

× Uh have have a beautiful buildings and also in other country.

✓ It has beautiful buildings, and other countries do too.

The original repeats 'have' and mixes subject. Use 'it' for the city: 'It has beautiful buildings.' 'Other country' should be pluralized to 'other countries' or specified as 'other countries do too.'

× To be honest, I want to visit all buildings in other country because I haven't I have been never be there there.

✓ To be honest, I want to visit buildings in other countries because I have never been there.

Use present perfect 'have never been' to express experience. Remove extra words: 'I haven't I have been never be there there' is a garbled attempt. Also pluralize 'countries' and avoid 'all buildings' if you mean buildings in general.

× Uh, no. I went to live in, I want to live in private building because I want to uh, shy life.

✓ No. I wouldn't want to live in one; I want to live in a private house because I prefer a quiet life.

'I went to live in' is wrong for expressing preference. Use conditional 'wouldn't want' or simple 'I don't want to live in a tall building.' 'Private building' is unclear—'private house' is better. 'Shy life' is incorrectly used; 'quiet life' or 'peaceful life' conveys the intended meaning.

× I want to uh, umm, calm life yes.

✓ I want a calm life, yes.

'I want to calm life' lacks the article 'a' and misuses verb structure. Use the noun phrase 'a calm life.' Avoid filler words and maintain simple structure.