建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and fix article/number agreement. Add one specific detail and a linking word. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Not really. I live in a residential area of the city, so there aren’t many tall buildings nearby. For example, most structures around me are two- to four-storey houses rather than high-rises.

建議: Be specific and correct word choice. Begin with a direct answer, then give a clear reason and a concrete example. Use linking words and correct prepositions (e.g., along the boulevard/river). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, I enjoy photographing buildings. For instance, when I walk along the Bund in Shanghai I often take pictures of the historic facades because the contrast between old and modern architecture looks striking in photos.

建議: Correct tense and phrasing, and be concise. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the building, give a reason with a specific detail, and use a linking word. Avoid repeating 'I love'.

範例: Yes, I’d like to visit Taipei 101 because it was once one of the tallest buildings in Asia and offers impressive views from the observatory. Also, I’m attracted to Taiwan’s culture and landscapes, so I would combine the visit with sightseeing.

建議: Clarify meaning and correct phrases. Give a direct answer, state clear reasons with specific details (noise, traffic, lack of green space), and use linking words. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and avoid vague terms like 'high quality and living Toby'.

範例: No, I wouldn’t. I prefer quieter neighbourhoods because living in a tall tower usually means dealing with constant traffic noise and crowded streets, and I value nearby parks and fresh air more than being in the city centre.

× I don't think there are many tall tall buildings around my home because I live in a residence area in the urban city, so there is not so many tall buildings around.

✓ I don't think there are many tall buildings around my home because I live in a residential area in the city, so there are not so many tall buildings nearby.

Errors: 'residence area' should be 'residential area' (wrong word form) and 'in the urban city' is awkward/redundant; 'so there is not so many tall buildings' uses singular 'is' with plural 'many tall buildings'. Also repeated 'tall'. Correction: use plural verb 'are' with plural noun and more natural phrasing. Suggestion: ensure subject and verb agree in number and choose correct adjective forms (residential) and avoid repetition.

× Yes, I love photographing buildings. I live in Shanghai, so sometimes I walk along the bound and shoot photos for the gorgeous view along the bound the.

✓ Yes, I love photographing buildings. I live in Shanghai, so sometimes I walk along the bund and take photos of the gorgeous views along the bund.

Errors: 'bound' is wrong word; correct is 'bund' for Shanghai riverfront. 'Shoot photos' is acceptable but 'take photos' is more natural. 'for the gorgeous view along the bound the' has word order and article problems. Also 'view' should be plural when referring to various scenes. Suggestion: use correct place name 'bund', use natural collocations 'walk along the bund' and 'take photos of the views'.

× I would like to visit the 101 tower in Taipei because I was heard it was once the tallest building of Asia, so I'm really curious about it.

✓ I would like to visit Taipei 101 because I heard it was once the tallest building in Asia, so I'm really curious about it.

Errors: 'I was heard' is incorrect passive; use simple past 'I heard'. '101 tower in Taipei' is better as 'Taipei 101' (common name). 'the tallest building of Asia' should be 'in Asia'. Suggestion: use active voice 'I heard' for reported information and correct preposition 'in' for regions.

× And I also I love Taiwan. I love the natural landscapes and the human culture here.

✓ I also love Taiwan. I love the natural landscapes and the local culture there.

Errors: duplicate 'I' ('And I also I'). 'human culture' is unnatural; use 'local culture'. 'here' conflicts with earlier mention of Taipei as place to visit; if speaking about Taiwan generally, use 'there'. Suggestion: remove duplicate words and choose natural collocations like 'local culture'.

× No, I don't want to live in a tall building because I prefer to live with high quality and living Toby means you need to bear the hustle and bustle of the downtown area of the busy city.

✓ No, I don't want to live in a tall building because I prefer a higher quality of life, and living there would mean you have to bear the hustle and bustle of the downtown area in a busy city.

Errors: 'prefer to live with high quality' is ungrammatical; use 'prefer a higher quality of life'. 'living Toby' appears to be a typo. 'means you need to bear' is acceptable but 'would mean you have to bear' fits conditional tone. Modal verb: change to 'would' to indicate hypothetical and 'have to' for obligation. Suggestion: express preferences with 'prefer' plus noun phrase and use correct modal for hypothetical situations.

× You know the noise and traffic.

✓ You know, the noise and the traffic.

Minor issue: missing comma for natural speech and missing article before 'traffic' may be acceptable but adding 'the' makes it clearer. Suggestion: include small discourse markers and definite article for specific phenomena.

× So I prefer to live in the more quiet and peaceful place.

✓ So I prefer to live in a quieter and more peaceful place.

Errors: 'the more quiet' is incorrect comparative form and article usage. Use comparative 'quieter' and parallel structure 'quieter and more peaceful'. Drop unnecessary 'the'. Suggestion: form comparatives correctly and maintain parallel adjectives.