建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the response more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add one specific detail. Use linking words (e.g., "because" or "so") correctly and limit to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home because I live in the downtown area. For example, I live in a high-rise apartment which gives me a great view of the city skyline every morning.

建議: Answer directly and fix verb forms and word choice. Use one topic sentence and one supporting sentence with a specific example. Use linking words like "but" or "so" correctly and avoid awkward phrases.

範例: Not usually, but if I see an interesting building I often take a photo. For instance, last month I photographed an old cathedral and later used the pictures as inspiration for my sketches.

建議: Be specific about which building and why, correct word choice ("tall" not "long") and avoid repeating ideas. Use one clear topic sentence and one supporting reason with detail.

範例: Yes, I would like to visit the tallest skyscraper in my city because it has an observation deck. From there I could take panoramic photos of the city and study the building's modern architecture.

建議: Give a clear, grammatical response and explain why with one or two specific details. Fix tense and sentence fragments; avoid irrelevant or unintelligible words.

範例: Yes, I already live in a tall building and I am glad I do because the views are lovely. For example, I enjoy watching the sunrise over the skyline from my balcony every morning.

× There are a lot of tall buildings nearby my home because I live almost in the downtown of my city, so I also live in a tall building in a skyscraper.

✓ There are a lot of tall buildings near my home because I live almost in the downtown area of my city, and I also live in a tall skyscraper.

Use 'near' or 'nearby' correctly: 'near my home' is more natural than 'nearby my home'. 'Downtown' should be 'downtown area' or simply 'downtown'. 'In a tall building in a skyscraper' is redundant; use 'in a tall skyscraper'. Also replace 'so' with 'and' for clarity and correct sentence flow.

× It's very beautiful to wake up in the morning and see this beautiful.

✓ It's very beautiful to wake up in the morning and see this view.

The sentence ends with 'this beautiful' which is incomplete; 'beautiful' is an adjective and needs a noun. Replace with 'this view' for a complete noun phrase. Also maintain present tense and simple structure.

× Actually not all, but if I see a really beautiful building, I can take photo and when I will be at home I will revise them and I will inspire this landscapes.

✓ Actually not all, but if I see a really beautiful building, I can take photos, and when I am at home I review them and these landscapes inspire me.

Use plural 'photos' (quantifier issue too) and correct future reference: English ordinarily uses present tense for near-future habitual actions ('when I am at home I review them'). 'Will' is unnecessary in the subordinate time clause. 'Revise' is incorrect in this context; use 'review'. 'I will inspire this landscapes' is ungrammatical: change to 'these landscapes inspire me' (correct pronoun and verb usage).

× Definitely, I would like to visit some skyscrapers nearby my area and they are so long and I want to take photos of them and I want to take Photo by myself.

✓ Definitely, I would like to visit some skyscrapers near my area; they are so tall and I want to take photos of them myself.

Use 'near my area' rather than 'nearby my area'. 'So long' is incorrect when describing buildings; use 'so tall'. Avoid repeating 'I want to take' twice; 'take photos of them myself' is concise and grammatically correct. Capitalization: 'Photo' should be lowercase.

× I already live in a tall building and I think it's the best decision are which I. Jeet and I always love to wake up and see a skyscrapers outside.

✓ I already live in a tall building and I think it is the best decision I have made, and I always love to wake up and see the skyscrapers outside.

Original sentence has multiple issues: word order and extraneous words ('are which I. Jeet') likely errors or typos. Use present perfect 'I have made' to refer to a past decision with present relevance. 'A skyscrapers' mixes article and plural; use 'the skyscrapers' or 'skyscrapers'. Remove stray name 'Jeet' unless intended; if intended, it must be integrated properly. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct article usage.