建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect vocabulary (e.g., "skykeeper").

範例: Not really. There aren’t many tall buildings near my home. However, in nearby Guangzhou, there are lots of modern high-rise towers and skyscrapers, so I sometimes visit the city to see them.

建議: Open with a direct topic sentence and use smoother linking words. Replace vague phrases with specific examples and correct prepositions (e.g., "photos of buildings"). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Not usually. I only take photos of buildings when they look unusual or show local architectural features, such as historic temples or colorful old houses.

建議: Be direct and reduce repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., "also" for the Great Wall). Use correct names ("the Palace Museum" or "Forbidden City," not redundant articles) and avoid literal translations like "Chang Cheng."

範例: Yes. I would love to visit Beijing to see the Palace Museum (the Forbidden City). I also hope to visit the Great Wall in the near future because I’m fascinated by its history and scale.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence, then two specific reasons with correct vocabulary and sentence structure. Correct awkward phrases (e.g., "I don't want to live in a tall building," "I'm afraid of heights"). Remove unclear comment about floors and breathing; if you mean ventilation or low ceilings, say so precisely.

範例: No, I wouldn’t. I’m afraid of heights, and I also don’t like apartments with low ceilings or poor ventilation, which can feel claustrophobic.

× Not many. Well, in my home there's not many high rise building here.

✓ Not many. Well, in my home there aren't many high-rise buildings here.

The original uses singular 'building' after 'many' which requires a plural noun. Also 'there's' (there is) is singular and does not agree with the plural noun; change to 'there aren't' and pluralize 'building' to 'buildings'. Use a hyphen in 'high-rise'. Suggestion: when using 'many', ensure the noun is plural and check subject-verb agreement with 'there is/there are'.

× But in the Guangdong, in the Guangdong province, I mean Guangzhou, the city of Guangzhou, the got lots of high rise skykeeper in.

✓ But in Guangdong province, I mean Guangzhou, the city of Guangzhou, they have lots of high-rise skyscrapers.

Remove the unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'Guangdong province' and correct word order. 'the got lots of' is ungrammatical; use 'they have lots of'. 'Skykeeper' is incorrect; the correct word is 'skyscrapers' (plural). Also plural is needed after 'lots of'. Use hyphen in 'high-rise'. Suggestion: use 'they have' or 'there are' for existence and choose correct noun 'skyscrapers'.

× And well, As for my own habits, I don't really take many photos about the buildings.

✓ And well, as for my own habits, I don't really take many photos of buildings.

The preposition 'about' is incorrect with 'take photos'; the correct preposition is 'of'. Also 'As' should not be capitalized mid-sentence. Suggestion: use 'photos of' when referring to photographing something.

× If a building is real strange or quite typical with local specialities, I may take some photos of it, but in most of the time I won't do it.

✓ If a building is really strange or quite typical of local specialties, I may take some photos of it, but most of the time I won't.

Use adverb 'really' not adjective 'real' to modify 'strange'. Use 'typical of' not 'typical with'. 'Specialities' spelling is British; 'specialties' is American—either is acceptable but be consistent. 'In most of the time' is incorrect; use 'most of the time'. Also drop 'do it' which is redundant. Suggestion: use adverbs to modify adjectives and correct preposition 'typical of'.

× Of course, yes, I have been to many places, but I have never been to Beijing.

✓ Of course, yes, I have been to many places, but I have never been to Beijing.

No change needed for grammar; sentence is correct. It contains plural 'places' with appropriate verb forms. Included here to indicate no error of the listed types.

× I know there is a renowned a palace museum in Beijing.

✓ I know there is a renowned palace museum in Beijing.

The article 'a' is repeated twice ('a renowned a palace museum'). Remove the extra 'a'. This is an article error but fits under adjective/adverb misuse in combination; correct to 'a renowned palace museum'. Suggestion: avoid duplicating articles before adjectives and nouns.

× I really want to visit it. I think in the near future, I will definitely pay a visit, as well as the Chang Cheng, the Great Wall.

✓ I really want to visit it. I think in the near future I will definitely pay a visit, as well as visit the Chang Cheng, the Great Wall.

Sentence is mostly correct but 'as well as the Chang Cheng, the Great Wall' is fragmentary; make parallel structure by adding 'visit'. Suggestion: keep verbs parallel when listing actions in future tense.

× No, not really. I I don't really into living the tall building because I'm a little bit afraid of the height and due to the the floor, the the distance between one floor and another floor is too close. I I can breathe in that.

✓ No, not really. I'm not really into living in tall buildings because I'm a little bit afraid of heights and because the distance between floors is too small. I can't breathe in that situation.

Multiple issues: 'I I' is repetition, remove duplicate. Use 'I'm not really into' rather than 'I don't really into' (missing verb 'be'). Use plural 'tall buildings' after 'into'. 'afraid of the height' should be 'afraid of heights' (idiomatic). 'due to the the floor, the the distance between one floor and another floor is too close' is ungrammatical; simplify to 'because the distance between floors is too small'. 'I I can breathe in that' likely means 'I can't breathe in that situation' — negation needed. Suggestion: use correct predicate 'be into', idiomatic expressions 'afraid of heights', and clear negation for ability/comfort.