建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural: give a clear topic sentence, then one brief reason. Avoid redundancy ("since we live" repeated) and use simpler expressions (e.g., "high-rise buildings" rather than "high infrastructure").

範例: No, there aren't any tall buildings near my home. We live in an exclusive subdivision where high-rise buildings are not allowed, so most houses are low-rise and spread out.

建議: Good direct answer and reason. Improve cohesion by using a linking word and add a specific example to make it more vivid. Avoid repeating "photograph/photographs."

範例: Yes, I often take photos of buildings when I travel. For example, I like photographing skyscrapers because their scale and design are very different from the low-rise buildings in my city.

建議: Start with one clear topic sentence naming the building you most want to visit, then give one or two specific reasons. Avoid pluralizing if you then focus on one building. Add a linking word for flow.

範例: Yes — I would most like to visit the Burj Khalifa in Dubai because it is the world's tallest building and I want to see its observation deck and the city's skyline from that height.

建議: Be clearer and more grammatical: begin with a direct statement, then give one or two concise reasons. Correct phrases like "leave any tall building" to "live in a tall building," and fix grammar ("used to having a neighborhood"). Avoid overly long sentences.

範例: No, I wouldn't want to live in a tall building. I grew up in a village, so I prefer houses with some space and privacy; unlike condominiums, our neighborhood has low-density housing and quieter surroundings.

× Building a high infrastructure is highly prohibited since we live in a neighborhood.

✓ Constructing high-rise infrastructure is strictly prohibited since we live in a neighborhood.

The original uses 'Building a high infrastructure' which is awkward and 'infrastructure' is uncountable; use 'constructing' + 'high-rise infrastructure' or 'high-rise buildings'. Also 'highly prohibited' is incorrect collocation; use 'strictly prohibited'. Use of gerund 'Building' is acceptable but wording needs correction.

× I always capture a photograph of their skyscrapers because it is different from what we have in our city.

✓ I always take photos of the skyscrapers there because they are different from what we have in my city.

The pronoun 'their' ambiguously refers to people; use 'the skyscrapers there'. Also 'it is different' mismatches plural subject; use plural 'they are different'. Replace 'capture a photograph' with more natural 'take photos'.

× Yes, there are buildings that I would like to visit. Number one is the Burj Khalifa in Dubai.

✓ Yes, there are buildings I would like to visit. The first is the Burj Khalifa in Dubai.

'Number one is' is conversational but 'The first is' is more natural. Also remove unnecessary 'that'. This fixes awkward phrasing rather than strict grammar, aligning subject reference correctly.

× It is the world's tallest building.

✓ It is the world's tallest building.

This sentence is correct; the definite article usage is appropriate. No change required.

× No, I don't want to leave any tall building like a condominium.

✓ No, I don't want to live in any tall building like a condominium.

The student used 'leave' instead of 'live', a wrong verb choice. 'Live in' is the correct verb phrase to express residence.

× Since I live in a village, I am used to have a neighborhood and we have our own privacy because the houses are a few meters away from each other unlike those in condominium.

✓ Since I live in a village, I am used to having a neighborhood, and we have our own privacy because the houses are a few meters apart from each other, unlike those in condominiums.

After 'used to' when expressing accustomedness, use the gerund 'having'. 'A few meters away from each other' should be 'a few meters apart from each other'. Also plural 'condominiums' fits comparison and add commas for clarity.

× Yes, I do take photos of buildings whenever I travel.

✓ Yes, I take photos of buildings whenever I travel.

Using 'do' for emphasis is grammatical but unnecessary here; removing 'do' produces a more natural present simple statement. Tense remains present simple.