建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答は直接的で情報はあるが、文法や語彙、流暢さに改善の余地があります。例えば「a lot of buildings」は漠然としているため具体性を高め、名詞の単数・複数や冠詞の使い方（a patient → patients）を正すとよいです。また、Supporting detailをつなぐ際に接続詞を使い、文を短く簡潔にまとめると自然に聞こえます。改善ポイント：1) 建物の種類や数を具体的に述べる（e.g. several tall apartment blocks）2) 冠詞と複数形の誤りを直す3) 接続詞（for example, because, so）で文をつなぐ

範例: Yes. There are several tall buildings near my home, including a hospital and a couple of apartment blocks. For example, the hospital is quite large and serves many patients, so it is always busy.

建議: 答えは明確だが、理由や具体例が弱いので内容を充実させると高得点になります。また、「which is very fun」は不自然なので適切な表現（which I find interesting / which is enjoyable）に変えるべきです。さらに、リンク語（instead, because, so）を適切に使い、写真撮影の頻度や好きな被写体の特徴を述べると説得力が増します。改善ポイント：1) 好きな被写体の具体例と理由を加える（e.g. size, color, behavior）2) “fun”の代わりに自然な形容詞を使う3) 文を2〜3文にまとめる

範例: No, I don't usually photograph buildings. Instead, I prefer taking pictures of insects because they have interesting colors and tiny details. For example, I enjoy close-up shots of butterflies and beetles.

建議: 回答は要点を伝えているが、文法と語彙の誤り（watch the Mona Lisa → see the Mona Lisa）や表現の自然さに改善が必要です。また「rural museums」の理由やどの国の美術館かを具体的に述べるとよいです。Supporting detailを追加し、接続詞でつなげることを意識してください。改善ポイント：1) “watch”を“see”に修正 2) なぜ田舎の博物館が好きか理由を述べる 3) どの作品や館を訪れたいか具体的にする

範例: I don't usually focus on buildings; I'm more interested in museums, especially small rural ones because they often display local history. However, I would like to see the Mona Lisa someday when I visit the Louvre in Paris.

建議: 意図は明確だが、語彙と文法（scaring → scary; If the earthquake occurs → If an earthquake happens）を修正すると自然になります。また、なぜ怖いのかをもう一文で具体的に説明すると説得力が増します。さらに‘run’よりも避難や安全性に触れると現実的な理由になります。改善ポイント：1) 形容詞の修正（scary）2) 具体的な理由を追加（evacuation difficulty, height, wind）3) 接続詞で文をつなぐ

範例: No, I wouldn't like to live in a tall building because it's quite scary for me. If an earthquake happened, it would be difficult to evacuate quickly, so I prefer a low-rise house where escape routes are easier.

× That hospital has a lot of patient and doctors.

✓ That hospital has a lot of patients and doctors.

The noun 'patient' should be plural to match 'a lot of' which requires a plural noun; use 'patients'. Ensure nouns count match quantifiers.

× Many people visit there.

✓ Many people visit it.

Use of the preposition 'there' is unnecessary after 'visit' when referring to a place already mentioned; use the object pronoun 'it' or rephrase as 'visit the hospital'.

× There are several types of insects, which is very fun.

✓ There are several types of insects, which are very interesting.

The relative clause refers to 'several types of insects' (plural), so the verb should be plural 'are'. Also 'fun' describes people finding something enjoyable; use 'interesting' to describe insects.

× I'm not interested in building.

✓ I'm not interested in buildings.

When speaking generally about the category, use the plural 'buildings' without an article. Using singular 'building' without an article is incorrect.

× It's very scaring for me.

✓ It's very scary for me.

The adjective should be 'scary' not 'scaring'. 'Scaring' is a present participle used to form continuous verbs or as a participial adjective in different contexts; 'scary' correctly describes something that causes fear.

× If the earthquake occurs, it's difficult to run.

✓ If an earthquake occurs, it is difficult to escape quickly.

Use the indefinite article 'an' before 'earthquake' and 'escape' or 'run to safety' is a clearer collocation than 'run'. The present simple 'occurs' is acceptable in conditional, but wording improved for naturalness.