建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (e.g., "umm"), correct collocations ("residential area", "out in the suburbs") and use one or two supporting details. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

範例: No, there aren't any tall buildings near my home because I live in a residential area out in the suburbs. Mostly there are low houses and small apartment blocks, so the skyline is quite low.

建議: Answer directly and use correct verb forms and vocabulary. Replace vague phrases with clear reasons and give a brief example if possible. Use linking words such as "however" or "but" for contrast.

範例: Not really — I don't usually photograph buildings because they don't interest me much. However, I can see why others do, because some buildings have beautiful or unique designs that are worth photographing.

建議: Provide a clear topic sentence and support it with a specific reason. Fix grammar and word choice (e.g., "places in New York", "since I was a child"). Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like "because" or "since" for explanation.

範例: I would like to visit Times Square in New York because I've been fascinated by images of the city since I was a child. The bright lights and busy atmosphere look exciting, and I'd love to experience it in person.

建議: Start with a clear direct answer and give one or two specific reasons. Correct grammar ("I live" not "lives", "a tall building" singular) and remove filler words. Use linking words such as "because" and conclude briefly.

範例: It depends. If I lived in a city, I might like a tall building because it would offer great views and a relaxing space to enjoy a coffee. However, in a quieter area I would prefer a low-rise house for more privacy.

× Umm there's not any tall buildings around my place because I live in residence area be out of suburb so I never really see any tall building, just only a lot of house around my place.

✓ There aren't any tall buildings around my place because I live in a residential area on the outskirts of the suburb, so I never really see any tall buildings; there are only a lot of houses around my place.

Multiple issues: 'there's not any tall buildings' is incorrect because 'there' + plural noun requires 'there are' (There be issue and subject-verb agreement). 'residence area' is the wrong noun form; use 'residential area' (word choice). 'be out of suburb' is ungrammatical; express location as 'on the outskirts of the suburb' (preposition and phrase structure). 'any tall building' should be plural to match context. 'just only a lot of house' should be 'only a lot of houses' (plural noun). Suggestion: use 'There aren't any tall buildings around my place because I live in a residential area on the outskirts of the suburb, so I only see lots of houses.'

× I never really take any thoughts of buildings because I never get impressed by that, but I can understand why people likes to take picture of buildings because some people think it's really beautiful and unique to the buildings.

✓ I never really take photos of buildings because I am never impressed by them, but I can understand why people like to take pictures of buildings because some people think they are really beautiful and unique.

Errors addressed: 'take any thoughts of' is incorrect collocation; use 'take photos of' or 'think about' (verb phrase choice). 'I never get impressed by that' should be 'I am never impressed by them' (use passive/adjective and correct pronoun). 'people likes' is wrong third person singular; use 'people like' (Third person singular issue). 'take picture' should be plural 'take pictures' (singular/plural). 'it's really beautiful and unique to the buildings' is wrong pronoun and preposition; use 'they are really beautiful and unique' (pronoun and adjective agreement). Suggestion: simplify: 'I never take photos of buildings because I'm not impressed by them, but I understand why people like to photograph buildings.'

× Uh, for now, nothing really comes up in my mind to be honest. But actually if I had a chance, I would like to visit Times Square in New York because I've been looking at a lot of New York started seeing place since I was a child.

✓ Right now, nothing really comes to mind, to be honest. But actually, if I had the chance, I would like to visit Times Square in New York because I have been interested in New York and have seen many places there since I was a child.

Problems: 'comes up in my mind' is a non-idiomatic phrasing; use 'comes to mind' (idiom/verb pattern). 'if I had a chance' should be 'if I had the chance' (article). The clause 'I've been looking at a lot of New York started seeing place' is ungrammatical and mixes tenses; clarified to 'I have been interested in New York and have seen many places there since I was a child' (present perfect continuous/ perfect to indicate ongoing interest from past to present). Suggestion: use standard idioms and consistent tense: 'I have been interested in New York since I was a child.'

× Yeah, it depends on the situation, because if I live in a city and lives in a tall buildings, it would be great views and really relaxed to have a coffee or tea with, uh, the view but on.

✓ Yeah, it depends on the situation, because if I live in a city and live in a tall building, it would have great views and it would be really relaxing to have a coffee or tea while enjoying the view.

Errors: 'if I live ... and lives' mixes subjects and verbs; use 'live' for first person (subject-verb agreement). 'in a tall buildings' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'in a tall building' or 'in tall buildings' (article and singular/plural). 'it would be great views' is ungrammatical; use 'it would have great views' or 'I would have great views' (sentence structure). 'really relaxed' should be 'really relaxing' (incorrect use of adjective/adverb). 'have a coffee ... with the view' is awkward; use 'while enjoying the view'. Suggestion: keep subject consistent, match singular/plural, and use appropriate adjective forms.