建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and provide one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct articles and word order (e.g., "a tall shopping mall").

範例: Yes. There are several tall buildings near my home, so the area looks like a modern city. For example, I can see a tall shopping mall and some office towers from my window, which makes me feel proud of my neighborhood.

建議: Avoid filler words and repetition. Give a direct answer then one clear reason with a specific example. Use linking words like "but," "because," or "for example." Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

範例: Not often, but I sometimes photograph buildings because I admire their design. For example, I took pictures of a modern library last month because its glass facade and geometric shapes looked impressive.

建議: Answer directly and correct grammar ("there are several buildings"). Be specific about what attracts you—use precise vocabulary (e.g., "architecture," "lighting," "observation deck") and avoid vague adjectives like "too good."

範例: Yes. I would like to visit the Burj Khalifa because of its remarkable architecture and impressive height. For instance, I want to see the observation deck and admire the building's lighting at night, which I have seen in many photos.

建議: Be concise and avoid repetition. State your main reason clearly and support it with a specific detail or example. Use linking words like "because" and "for example" to connect ideas and correct duplicates like "from from."

範例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because being high up gives me a sense of calm and energy. For example, looking out over the city from a high-rise balcony would help me relax after work and enjoy the view.

× Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home and whenever I open my window, I see many tall buildings in my near and it it looks like a modern city.

✓ Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home and whenever I open my window, I see many tall buildings near me and it looks like a modern city.

The phrase 'in my near' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'near me' or 'in my neighborhood'. Also there is a duplicated 'it it'. Use 'near me' for natural English and remove the repeated word. Suggestion: replace 'in my near' with 'near me' or 'in my neighborhood' and delete duplicated words.

× And there are also a tall shopping mall near my home.

✓ There is also a tall shopping mall near my home.

Subject-verb agreement and article use: 'a tall shopping mall' is singular, so use 'There is' not 'There are'. The original used 'are' which is for plural. Suggestion: use 'There is' with singular nouns.

× Not really, but, uh, whenever I see a good and well structured building, I take photos because I like the structure and whenever I see a tall and well structured and beautiful building, I take some photos of that because, uh, I like the design and I.

✓ Not really, but whenever I see a good, well-structured building, I take photos because I like the structure and design.

Run-on and unfinished sentence. 'Well structured' should be hyphenated as a compound adjective 'well-structured' before a noun. The sentence repeats ideas; condense and finish the thought. Remove filler 'uh' and incomplete ending. Suggestion: combine clauses and finish with a clear object.

× Yeah, yeah, there is a building. There is several building that I would like to visit, but I want to visit the Burj Khalifa building because it is so much well structured and I like the architecture and it is so beautiful because the lighting, the nourishing and the overall beauty is too good.

✓ Yes, there are several buildings that I would like to visit, but I want to visit the Burj Khalifa because it is very well-structured; I like the architecture and it is beautiful because of the lighting, the surroundings, and its overall appearance.

Multiple problems: 'There is several building' should be plural 'There are several buildings' (singular/plural and subject-verb agreement). 'So much well structured' is ungrammatical; use 'very well-structured'. 'Burj Khalifa building' is redundant; 'Burj Khalifa' is sufficient. 'Nourishing' is incorrect in context; likely meant 'surroundings' or 'lighting and surroundings'. Suggestion: correct plurality, use 'very well-structured', replace incorrect word with 'surroundings', and avoid redundancy.

× So I want to visit.

✓ So I want to visit it.

Sentence is short and slightly incomplete; adding 'it' clarifies the object (the Burj Khalifa). Tense is present desire, which is fine; include the pronoun to complete the sentence.

× Yes, I want to live in a tall building because from from the top of the building it gives me a good vibe and makes me feel energetic and I want I love to see the world from the top and a tall building from the top of the building gives me that vibe and I I would love to live in a tall building in future.

✓ Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because being at the top gives me a good vibe and makes me feel energetic. I love seeing the world from above, and a tall building would give me that feeling. I would love to live in a tall building in the future.

Multiple issues: repeated words ('from from', 'I want I', 'I I') and awkward phrasing. Use conditional 'would like' for preference. 'From the top of the building it gives me' is ungrammatical; instead 'being at the top gives me' or 'the top gives me a good feeling'. Add 'in the future' with the definite article 'the'. Suggestion: remove repetitions, use clearer subjects, and correct article use ('in the future').