建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cần rút gọn và chỉnh ngữ pháp để tự nhiên hơn, tránh lặp từ và sửa lỗi (ví dụ: “metropolis channel the capital” không chính xác). Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó thêm 1–2 chi tiết hỗ trợ với các từ nối (for example, especially). Hạn chế tiếng lấp (um) và sửa lỗi mạo từ (a tall buildings → tall buildings).

範例: Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home. I live in the capital city, which has numerous skyscrapers, so I often visit them to enjoy the city views, especially in the evening when the lights are on. For example, I sometimes try different rooftop restaurants to relax and take photos.

建議: Trả lời tốt nhưng cần tự nhiên hơn và tránh lặp ý (favorite hobby / definitely / always). Nên dùng một câu chủ đề ngắn rồi thêm 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể (where, when, how). Thêm liên từ như because hoặc so để mạch lạc. Sửa lỗi nhỏ như “our inspiring views” → “the inspiring views.”

範例: Yes, I often take photos of buildings because photography is my favourite hobby. When I visit skyscrapers, I usually photograph the skyline at sunset to capture the light and atmosphere, and I keep the best shots in an online album.

建議: Cần sửa cấu trúc câu để rõ ràng (hiện tại có lỗi ngữ pháp và lặp từ). Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề: tên tòa nhà và lý do. Thêm chi tiết cụ thể về điều bạn muốn làm ở đó (what exhibitions, what view). Giữ trong tối đa 3 câu.

範例: Yes, I'd love to visit Landmark 81 in Ho Chi Minh City. I want to see its high‑tech exhibitions and experience the observation deck because it offers panoramic city views. For instance, I’m especially interested in the interactive displays about smart buildings.

建議: Rất rõ ràng và có lý do hợp lý; chỉ cần rút gọn và tránh lặp từ (the the). Có thể thêm một chi tiết bổ sung ngắn về lợi ích cụ thể của nhà tầng trệt để thuyết phục hơn. Dùng từ nối như because và so để mạch lạc.

範例: No, I wouldn’t want to live in a tall building because elevators can be crowded and slow during peak hours. I prefer a ground‑floor house because it makes moving in and out and daily commuting much easier and more practical.

× Oh, definitely. Actually I live in a metropolis channel the capital of Vietnam, and in this city there are quite a few skyscrapers, so it is easier for me to find a tall buildings to visit.

✓ Oh, definitely. Actually I live in a metropolis, the capital of Vietnam, and in this city there are quite a few skyscrapers, so it is easy for me to find tall buildings to visit.

Original has multiple issues: 'metropolis channel the capital' is incorrect word choice and structure; it should be 'a metropolis, the capital of Vietnam' using apposition to explain the metropolis. 'so it is easier for me to find a tall buildings' mixes comparative 'easier' without a reference and mismatches singular/plural 'a tall buildings'. Change to 'so it is easy for me to find tall buildings' to match meaning and plural noun. Suggestion: break long ideas into clear clauses and use apposition for explanations, ensure noun number matches determiner.

× Umm. I often go to some of these towers to enjoy the city views, especially in the evening when the lights are on, and I also like exploring the different restaurants.

✓ Umm. I often go to some of these towers to enjoy the city views, especially in the evening when the lights are on, and I also like to explore the different restaurants.

Using 'like exploring' is not ungrammatical, but to match parallel structure with 'like' + infinitive and to be clearer use 'like to explore'. Keep verb forms consistent when listing preferences. Suggestion: choose either gerund or infinitive consistently for parallel items.

× Oh absolutely. My favorite hobby is definitely taking photos. I try to take pictures whenever I can, especially when I am surrounded by tall buildings.

✓ Oh, absolutely. My favorite hobby is definitely taking photos. I try to take pictures whenever I can, especially when I am surrounded by tall buildings.

This sentence is already grammatically correct. No change needed. Explanation: sentence structure and verb forms are appropriate; keep present simple for habitual actions.

× When I see our inspiring views from skyscrapers or similar structures, I always take photos to keep those things in my memory.

✓ When I see inspiring views from skyscrapers or similar structures, I always take photos to keep those moments in my memory.

'Our inspiring views' is odd because 'our' is unnecessary and creates ambiguity; use 'inspiring views'. 'Those things' is vague; 'those moments' is more natural for memories. Suggestion: use precise nouns and avoid unnecessary possessive pronouns unless referring to a clear group.

× Absolutely. There is one I'd like to visit that is Landmark 81 in Ho Chi Minh City is equipped with cutting edge technology and I've always wanted to see the high tech exhibitions and enjoy the pyramid views from the observation desk.

✓ Absolutely. There is one I'd like to visit: Landmark 81 in Ho Chi Minh City, which is equipped with cutting-edge technology, and I've always wanted to see the high-tech exhibitions and enjoy the panoramic views from the observation deck.

Original has a run-on and incorrect relative clause: 'There is one I'd like to visit that is Landmark 81 ... is equipped' duplicates verbs. Use a colon or rephrase with 'which is equipped'. 'cutting edge' and 'high tech' should be hyphenated when used as compound adjectives before a noun. 'pyramid views' is likely incorrect; 'panoramic views' and 'observation deck' are the standard terms. Suggestion: break into clearer clauses and use correct compound adjective hyphenation.

× I wouldn't want to live in a tall building because high rise blocks often get very crowded during peak hours, so waiting for the the elevator can be slow and inconvenient.

✓ I wouldn't want to live in a tall building because high-rise blocks often get very crowded during peak hours, so waiting for the elevator can be slow and inconvenient.

Main issues: 'high rise' as compound adjective should be hyphenated 'high-rise'. There's a repeated 'the the'. Verb forms 'get' and 'can be' are fine for general statements. Remove duplicate word and hyphenate compound adjective. Suggestion: proofread for repeated words and hyphenate compound modifiers before nouns.

× I prefer a ground floor house where commuting and moving in and out is much easier and more practical.

✓ I prefer a ground-floor house where commuting and moving in and out are much easier and more practical.

'ground floor house' should be hyphenated as 'ground-floor' when used as an adjective. Subject 'commuting and moving in and out' is a compound subject, so the plural verb 'are' should be used instead of 'is'. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement with compound subjects and hyphenate adjectival phrases.