建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add one brief specific detail. Avoid filler (uh) and repetition, correct grammar (use singular/plural and articles), and limit to 2–3 sentences.

範例: No, there aren’t tall buildings near my home. However, there is a tall skyscraper called the Capitol Building in front of my office; it contains many apartments and offices.

建議: Give a direct answer and use clearer reasons with correct grammar and vocabulary. Use linking words (because, so) to connect ideas and avoid awkward phrases like 'prefer choose' and 'slight view'. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

範例: No, I don’t usually photograph buildings because I see skyscrapers every day. Instead, I prefer photographing mountain peaks or natural landscapes because I find their views more beautiful and varied.

建議: Answer directly and give one or two specific reasons. Fix grammar (use relative clause correctly, prepositions) and provide accurate examples. Avoid listing unfamiliar words without context. Keep within 3 sentences.

範例: Yes, I would love to visit the Petronas Twin Towers in Kuala Lumpur. Apart from their impressive architecture, Kuala Lumpur is famous for its street food, so I would enjoy exploring the city’s cuisine after visiting the towers.

建議: Start with a clear opinion and give specific, linked reasons. Correct grammar (article use, verb forms) and avoid unfinished sentences. Use linking words (for example, because, therefore) and keep to 2–3 sentences.

範例: No, I would not want to live in a very tall building because it can be hard to evacuate in emergencies such as fires or earthquakes. For example, escaping from high floors would be slow, so I prefer living in a low-rise house where evacuation is easier.

× No they are not.

✓ No, there are not.

Student used 'they are not' after a yes/no question about existence of tall buildings; 'There are not' or 'No, there are not' is the correct existential negation. Use of 'they' is incorrect because the question asks about existence near home rather than identifying specific plural pronouns. Suggestion: Say 'No, there are not' or 'No, there aren't any.'

× However, there are tall buildings in front of my office called Capitol Building.

✓ However, there are tall buildings in front of my office called the Capitol Building.

The name 'Capitol Building' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific building. Omission of the article makes the noun phrase sound incomplete. Suggestion: Use 'the Capitol Building' for a specific, named building.

× It is a high uh, sky Sky tower which consists of lot of apartment and.

✓ It is a high skyscraper which consists of a lot of apartments.

Redundant filler 'uh, sky Sky' should be removed. 'Skyscraper' is one word; 'consists of' should be followed by 'a lot of' and a plural noun 'apartments.' The original sentence also ends abruptly. Suggestion: Use 'a lot of apartments' and avoid fillers; say 'It is a high skyscraper that consists of a lot of apartments.'

× No, I don't take a photos of buildings because I always see the skyscraper every day, but I prefer choose to take a mountain peak, Mountain View or slight view because it is a beauty of nature.

✓ No, I don't take photos of buildings because I see skyscrapers every day, but I prefer to take photos of mountain peaks, mountain views, or scenic views because they show the beauty of nature.

Multiple issues: 'a photos' is wrong (article + plural); 'the skyscraper' should be plural 'skyscrapers' or no article; 'prefer choose to take' is ungrammatical — use 'prefer to take' or 'choose to take'; 'Mountain View' and 'slight view' are incorrect phrases — use 'mountain views' and 'scenic views'; 'it is a beauty of nature' should be 'they show the beauty of nature' or 'they are the beauty of nature.' Suggestion: Use correct article+noun agreement, correct verbs ('prefer to take'), and plural forms for general statements.

× Absolutely, I would like to visit a twin tower building which located at Kuala Lumpur.

✓ Absolutely, I would like to visit a twin-tower building which is located in Kuala Lumpur.

Missing auxiliary 'is' after 'which' (sentence structure) and preposition 'in' is required for cities. Also 'twin tower' is better hyphenated as 'twin-tower' or 'twin towers.' Suggestion: Say 'which is located in Kuala Lumpur' or 'located in Kuala Lumpur.'

× Beside of having high skyscraper, Kuala Lumpur has a lot of culinary such as Mebala, Nasi, Kandar and so on.

✓ Besides having tall skyscrapers, Kuala Lumpur has a lot of cuisine such as Mebala, Nasi Kandar, and so on.

Use 'Besides' not 'Beside of.' 'High skyscraper' is awkward — use 'tall skyscrapers.' 'A lot of culinary' is incorrect; use 'a lot of cuisine' or 'many culinary options.' Also correct name 'Nasi Kandar.' Suggestion: 'Besides having tall skyscrapers, Kuala Lumpur has a lot of cuisine, such as Mebala and Nasi Kandar.'

× I love to go the twin tower.

✓ I would love to go to the twin towers.

Missing preposition 'to' after 'go' and article/plural: use 'the twin towers' or 'the twin tower' with 'the' and singular must match. Native phrasing is 'go to the twin towers.' Suggestion: Use 'go to' and plural 'twin towers' if referring to both towers.

× Living it in a tall building has several risk.

✓ Living in a tall building has several risks.

Unnecessary pronoun 'it' should be removed; 'risk' should be plural 'risks' to match 'several.' Suggestion: Use 'Living in a tall building has several risks.'

× For example, do when there is a an earthquake or fire, I will find it difficult to evacuate myself, especially from the peak of the tower.

✓ For example, when there is an earthquake or a fire, I would find it difficult to evacuate, especially from the top of the tower.

Remove stray 'do'; add articles 'an earthquake' and 'a fire'; use conditional 'would' to match hypothetical example; 'evacuate myself' is wordy — 'evacuate' is sufficient; 'peak of the tower' should be 'top of the tower.' Suggestion: Use 'when there is an earthquake or a fire, I would find it difficult to evacuate, especially from the top of the tower.'

× So I choose to live at home or.

✓ So I choose to live at home.

Sentence ends abruptly with 'or.' Remove trailing 'or.' 'Choose' is present tense and acceptable; no extra conjunction needed. Suggestion: Finish the sentence properly: 'So I choose to live at home.'