建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct basic grammar (there is/are, I live) and avoid repetition. For example, say whether tall buildings are nearby, explain why (residential area, distance), and mention one clear observation (city view at night).

範例: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home because I live in a residential area about ten minutes from the city centre. However, if I go up to a high floor in a nearby building I can see an overview of the city, especially at night when the lights are beautiful.

建議: Provide a clear topic sentence and one specific reason with an example. Improve grammar (I take photos of buildings, it reminds me of memories) and use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' to make the answer coherent. Avoid vague phrases such as 'I always hope.'

範例: Yes, I often take photos of buildings because they remind me of places I’ve visited and the memories I made there. For example, when I travel I usually photograph tall buildings and mountains to capture the view from above and remember the trip.

建議: Answer directly and include one specific reason or detail about why you want to visit. Use correct grammar for place names and tenses (I want to visit the Burj Khalifa, because it is famous and offers panoramic views). Keep it concise and avoid hesitation or repetition.

範例: Yes, I would like to visit the Burj Khalifa in Dubai because it is one of the tallest and most famous buildings in the world. I want to see the panoramic views from the observation deck and experience the architecture in person.

建議: Give a clear yes/no and one or two specific reasons. Fix grammar (If I had the chance, I would live in a tall building). Explain what appeals to you (views, calm atmosphere) and use linking words like 'because' or 'for example.' Avoid irrelevant or unclear words (‘Italian’ seems incorrect).

範例: Yes, if I had the chance I would like to live in a tall building because the views from above are peaceful and impressive. For example, at night I would enjoy seeing the city lights from my window and feeling a sense of calm.

× No, there is a not all building near my home because I actually living in a residential area so it's far from my home like 10 minutes.

✓ No, there are not any tall buildings near my home because I actually live in a residential area and the city center is about 10 minutes away.

The sentence uses singular 'there is' with 'building' when 'buildings' (plural) is intended; also 'a not all' is incorrect. Use 'there are not any' for plural negation (Grammar problem type 1). 'Living' requires auxiliary 'I actually live' for present simple habitual fact (also present tense issue, but primary fix is plural). Clarify time phrase as 'about 10 minutes away.'

× So it is such a rain downtown.

✓ So it is quite close to downtown.

The phrase 'such a rain downtown' is ungrammatical. Likely intended meaning is proximity to downtown; use 'quite close to downtown' in present simple to describe location (Grammar problem type 6).

× Sorry, tall building and I can see tall building cause view from top of view from top of top of the building.

✓ Sorry, I cannot see any tall buildings from my home; you can see tall buildings from the top of a building.

The original mixes singular/plural and repeats phrases. Use 'any tall buildings' (plural negation) and correct verb 'cannot see'. Also restructure sentence to clarify that tall buildings can be seen from the top of other buildings (Grammar problem type 1).

× Uh we can see the overview of the city and in the night time.

✓ We can see an overview of the city at night.

Fragment and awkward phrasing. 'In the night time' should be 'at night' and 'overview of the city' needs article 'an'. Combine into a complete sentence (Grammar problem type 26).

× Yes, I take photos of building because it reminds me the IT reminds me the memory in myself.

✓ Yes, I take photos of buildings because they remind me of my memories.

Use plural 'buildings' for general habit (plural issue) and 'remind' to agree with plural subject 'they'. Also use 'remind me of my memories' or 'bring back memories' for natural phrasing (primary fix categorized as present tense and subject-verb agreement) (Grammar problem type 6).

× And I will usually take photos when I go outside and I take pictures of mountains and tall buildings because when we can see from town to up, I always hope.

✓ I usually take photos when I go out; I take pictures of mountains and tall buildings because when you look from the town up, I always hope to capture the view.

'Go outside' is acceptable but 'go out' is more natural; fix plural and verb forms. The clause 'when we can see from town to up' is ungrammatical—use 'when you look from the town up' or 'when you look up from the town' and complete the sentence with 'hope to capture the view.' This addresses sentence structure and tense consistency (Grammar problem type 26).

× Yes, I want to, yes, I want to go Burj Khalifa in Dubai because many tourists go there and see the attraction of beauty and I can in future I will also like I will, I will see that building 'cause it was very famous building in the world and the view from the.

✓ Yes, I want to visit the Burj Khalifa in Dubai because many tourists go there to see its beauty; in the future I would also like to see that building because it is a very famous building in the world and the view from the top is impressive.

Multiple issues: missing preposition 'visit the Burj Khalifa', awkward repetitions, incorrect tense 'was' versus 'is' for a still-famous building, and incomplete ending. Use 'would like to' for polite future desire and 'from the top' to finish the thought. This corrects sentence structure and tense (Grammar problem type 26).

× Yes, if I had a chance, I will definitely go to live in Italian because you.

✓ Yes, if I had the chance, I would definitely live in Italy.

This is a second conditional mixing past and 'will'. Use 'If I had the chance, I would...' for hypothetical situations (Grammar problem type 7). Also correct 'Italian' (adjective) to 'Italy' (country name).

× From the top, the view was very calm and interesting to me and it was a very wonderful experience for me because in the night time we can see the we can see lightning in the city from the above and through the window I.

✓ From the top, the view is very calm and interesting to me; it would be a wonderful experience because at night we can see the city lights from above through the window.

Replace 'in the night time' with 'at night' and 'lightning' with 'city lights' (likely intended meaning). 'From the above' should be 'from above'. Maintain present tense or conditional as appropriate. This addresses incorrect prepositions and word choice (Grammar problem type 11).