建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 答えは直接的で内容は分かるが、文法ミス（"located near from"、"they can live"など）や不自然な表現がある。より自然で簡潔な主文を最初に置き、必要なら接続詞（because/so）で理由を付け加えると良い。単語の選択も改善（"residents"や"shops"など）し、文は3文以内に収めることを意識する。

範例: Yes. There are many tall buildings near my home, mainly shopping malls and apartment blocks. They are close to the station, so people find it convenient for shopping and commuting.

建議: 答えは正直で内容が伝わるが、話し方が断片的で繰り返しが多い（"to be honest, unfortunately"、断続的なフレーズ）。文法的には"take photos of"の後の名詞形や冠詞に注意し、接続詞（so/and）で流れを作る。理由は簡潔に述べ、語彙を整理する。

範例: To be honest, I don't usually take photos of buildings. Instead, I prefer photographing animals and natural scenery because I'm not very interested in architecture.

建議: 回答は話のポイントを含むが、多くの文法ミスと不自然な表現（"which names"、"surprised with that height"、不要な言葉"and they produce"）がある。建物名は正しく紹介し、その理由を具体的に述べる。接続詞で文をつなげ、情報は2〜3文でまとめる。

範例: Yes, I would like to visit the Burj Khalifa in the UAE. A friend who went there told me she was amazed by how tall it is, so I would like to see the view from the top myself.

建議: 理由は明確で適切だが、言葉の繰り返しや冗長（"earthquake earthquakes"、"measures of measures"）が見られる。主文を短くし、理由を1文で具体的に説明する（例：earthquake safety、structural measures）。不要な躊躇語（umm）は減らす。

範例: No, I wouldn't want to live in a very tall skyscraper. Japan experiences frequent earthquakes, so I worry whether such buildings would be safe despite their earthquake-resistant designs.

× They are located near from the station so that we can visit for shopping there and also they can live.

✓ They are located near the station, so we can go shopping there and people can live in them.

The preposition 'near' should not be followed by 'from'; use 'near the station'. 'Visit for shopping' is unnatural: use 'go shopping'. 'They can live' is vague for buildings: use 'people can live in them'. Also add commas and correct noun references to improve clarity.

× Instead of that, I usually take a photo of animals or nature. Oh. Of or the local sceneries.

✓ Instead, I usually take photos of animals or nature, or of local scenery.

Use 'instead' rather than 'instead of that' in this context. 'Take a photo' should be plural 'take photos' for habitual action. 'The local sceneries' is incorrect: 'scenery' is uncountable, so use 'local scenery' or 'local scenes'. Combine fragments into one sentence for fluency.

× Because I am not familiar with architectures or construction.

✓ Because I am not familiar with architecture or construction.

Use 'architecture' as an uncountable noun; 'architectures' is not used to mean the field. 'Construction' is correct as a field. Keep parallel nouns.

× I have heard that the tallest building is located in the UAE which names Burj Khalifa.

✓ I have heard that the tallest building in the UAE is called the Burj Khalifa.

'Which names Burj Khalifa' is ungrammatical. Use passive or active naming: 'is called' or 'is named'. Also place 'in the UAE' adjacent to 'tallest building' and include the definite article with 'Burj Khalifa'.

× Uh, one of my friends visited there and she said that she was surprised with that height of that building and they produce.

✓ One of my friends visited it and said that she was surprised by the height of the building.

Use 'visited it' rather than 'visited there'. 'Surprised with' should be 'surprised by'. 'That height of that building' is awkward; use 'the height of the building'. The fragment 'and they produce' is unclear and removed because it has no clear meaning.

× Unfortunately, I don't want to live in a tall building like a skyscraper apartment because we have a lot of earthquake earthquakes in Japan and I'm just wondering the measures of measures to withstand earthquakes umm.

✓ Unfortunately, I don't want to live in a tall building like a skyscraper because we have many earthquakes in Japan, and I'm worried about the measures to withstand them.

Avoid repeating words ('earthquake earthquakes', 'measures of measures'). Use 'many earthquakes' rather than 'a lot of earthquake earthquakes'. 'Skyscraper apartment' is redundant; 'skyscraper' suffices. 'I'm just wondering the measures' is incorrect; use 'I'm worried about the measures' or 'I'm concerned about the measures to withstand them'.