建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details. Correct grammar (use 'in the suburbs', 'there are no', 'near my house the only taller buildings are...'). Avoid redundancy and keep it within 3–4 sentences.

範例: No, I live in the suburbs, so there are no tall buildings or skyscrapers near my home. The tallest structures nearby are a few department stores and some low-rise housing estates. It's generally a low-density area with mostly detached houses.

建議: Give a clear direct answer first and then provide a specific example. Fix grammar and linking (use 'usually I take selfies', 'when I travel abroad I photograph buildings, for example...'). Keep sentences smooth and avoid repetition.

範例: Occasionally, but usually I take selfies for Instagram rather than photos of buildings. When I travel abroad, however, I often photograph interesting architecture; for example, in Taiwan I took pictures of several skyscrapers because I found their designs striking.

建議: Answer directly whether there is a specific building you want to visit, then give concise reasons and one concrete example. Improve grammar ('visit churches', 'because they are historic and beautifully decorated') and use linking words ('however', 'for example').

範例: I don't have a particular modern skyscraper in mind, but I would love to visit historic churches when I travel. For example, I want to see Notre-Dame in Paris because I admire its history, stained-glass windows, and sculptures.

建議: Start with a direct preference, then contrast pros and cons with clear linking words. Correct grammar and word choice ('I live in an apartment in a tall building', 'I would prefer a house because it offers more privacy and space'). Be specific about conveniences and drawbacks and limit to 3–4 sentences.

範例: Although I currently live in an apartment in a tall building, I would prefer to live in a house because it offers more privacy and outdoor space. However, high-rise living has advantages too, such as on-site facilities like a gym and swimming pool, which are very convenient.

× I have to admit that my home is in suburb so there is no tall building or skyscrapers near my house.

✓ I have to admit that my home is in the suburbs, so there are no tall buildings or skyscrapers near my house.

Use the plural form 'suburbs' with the definite article omitted; 'suburb' as a general area is usually 'the suburbs'. Also 'there are' matches plural 'tall buildings or skyscrapers'. Use plural nouns for 'tall buildings' and 'skyscrapers' to agree with 'are'. Suggestion: say 'in the suburbs' and use 'there are' for plural subjects.

× Mostly near my house which is a tall building is department store or maybe house estate.

✓ Mostly near my house, the tall buildings are department stores or maybe housing estates.

Original sentence has incorrect word order and singular/plural mismatches. Use 'the tall buildings are' to match plural 'department stores' and 'housing estates'. 'House estate' is not standard; use 'housing estate' or 'residential estate'. Also add commas and correct word order: 'Mostly near my house, the tall buildings are...'.

× Sometimes, but usually I would take a photo of myself and post on the Instagram stories.

✓ Sometimes, but usually I take a photo of myself and post it on Instagram Stories.

Use present simple 'I take' for habitual action instead of 'would take'. Include object 'it' after 'post' and use 'Instagram Stories' (capitalization not required here but noun phrase corrected). 'On the Instagram stories' should be 'on Instagram Stories' or 'on my Instagram story'.

× However, if I go to another country, for example Taiwan, which have many skyscrapers, so I would take the photo of it.

✓ However, if I go to another country, for example Taiwan, which has many skyscrapers, I would take photos of them.

Use 'has' to agree with singular 'Taiwan'. Remove redundant 'so' after the clause. Use 'photos of them' instead of 'the photo of it' to match plural 'skyscrapers'. Keep conditional 'would' only if hypothetical; present simple 'will' or 'would' depends on intended meaning—'I would' is acceptable for hypothetical but simpler: 'I take photos' for habitual.

× Actually, I don't know a lot about architecture and skyscrapers, but when I travel to another country I usually visit to churches or places.

✓ Actually, I don't know a lot about architecture and skyscrapers, but when I travel to another country I usually visit churches or historical places.

Remove the unnecessary preposition 'to' after 'visit' (visit takes a direct object). 'Places' is vague; 'historical places' or 'sites' is more natural. Present simple 'travel' and 'visit' are correct for habitual actions.

× I enjoy them because they are historic and beautiful decorations and also have many statues.

✓ I enjoy them because they are historic and beautifully decorated and also have many statues.

Use 'beautifully decorated' (adverb + past participle) to describe how they are decorated rather than 'beautiful decorations'. 'Historic' is acceptable; ensure adjectives modify nouns correctly. Alternatively: 'they are historic, beautifully decorated, and have many statues.'

× I do have an apartment in tall building but if I could choose I would prefer to live in a house because it's more comfortable and more privacy and spares.

✓ I do have an apartment in a tall building, but if I could choose I would prefer to live in a house because it's more comfortable and offers more privacy and space.

Add article 'a' before 'tall building'. Use 'offers more privacy and space' rather than 'more privacy and spares'. 'Space' is the correct noun. Use comma before 'but'. 'It's more comfortable' is correct; match verbs and noun choices.

× Like we in the house we also have garden but in tall building there have some thing that's more convenient like provide many facility like swimming pool and gym.

✓ For example, in a house we also have a garden, but in a tall building there are some things that are more convenient, like many facilities such as a swimming pool and a gym.

Several issues: add articles ('a garden'), use 'in a tall building' and 'there are' for existence, correct plural 'facilities'. Use 'such as' to introduce examples. Reorder for clarity: 'in a house we also have a garden, but in a tall building there are more convenient facilities, such as a swimming pool and a gym.'