建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and directly answer the question first, then add one or two clear supporting details. Reduce fillers (umm, uh) and correct small grammar issues (e.g. "rent a room"). Use linking words to connect ideas: "so" or "therefore."

範例: No, there aren't many tall buildings near my home. I live in a suburb near my university, so the area mostly has low-rise houses and small apartment blocks rather than high-rises.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence and explain reasons briefly. Avoid repetition and hesitations. Use linking words like "but" and "so" correctly, and correct phrasing: "I don't like using my smartphone for taking photos" → "I don't like using my smartphone for photos."

範例: Yes, I take photos, but mainly when I travel. I prefer using a dedicated camera rather than my smartphone, so I bring my camera on trips to capture buildings with better detail.

建議: Answer directly and give a specific reason or memory. Reduce fillers and improve grammar: say "I've wanted to visit Big Ben since I heard about it as a child" and add a brief reason why it appeals to you.

範例: Yes, I would like to visit Big Ben in London. I've wanted to see it since I was a child because I was fascinated by its history and iconic clock tower, and I hope to visit England to see it in person.

建議: Make your timeline and reasoning clear and correct grammar. Avoid contradictions ("I live in an apartment a couple of years ago"). Use a linking word to explain benefits and be specific about advantages.

範例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building. I lived in an apartment a few years ago and enjoyed it because higher floors had fewer insects and were quieter, which made living there more comfortable.

× I think there aren't because I live in a suburb called Principal right now which is near my university.

✓ I don't think there are any because I live in a suburb called Principal right now which is near my university.

The original uses 'there aren't' without an explicit subject and 'any' is needed with plural nouns in negative sentences. Use 'I don't think there are any' to express the speaker's belief about the existence of tall buildings. Also 'there are' matches the plural 'tall buildings.' Suggestion: Use 'I don't think there are any' for negative existence of plural nouns.

× Umm, that's the reason why I rent A room here.

✓ Umm, that's the reason why I rent a room here.

The indefinite article should be lowercase 'a' before a singular, countable noun. 'A' in the middle of a sentence should be lowercase. Suggestion: Use 'a' (lowercase) before singular countable nouns.

× However, I can't see many tall buildings uh in this area.

✓ However, I can't see many tall buildings in this area.

While the sentence is mostly acceptable, filler 'uh' should be removed in written corrections. The structure 'I can't see many tall buildings in this area' correctly expresses negative observation about plural nouns. Suggestion: Remove filler words and keep 'many' with plural noun.

× Yes, I do, but only when I travel. Uh, I because I, I, I don't, I don't like using my smartphone for photographing, but I do have a camera which was, umm, bought for the taking photos.

✓ Yes, I do, but only when I travel. I don't like using my smartphone for taking photographs, but I do have a camera that I bought for taking photos.

Original has disfluent speech (repetitions and fillers) and incorrect phrase 'for photographing' and awkward 'which was bought for the taking photos.' Use 'taking photographs' or 'taking photos.' Also use a relative clause 'that I bought' or 'which I bought' to show who bought the camera. Suggestion: Remove fillers and repetitions, use 'taking photographs' and 'a camera that I bought.' Grammar problem types applied: sentence structure errors and correct verb forms.

× I really want to visit the Big Ben in England.

✓ I really want to visit Big Ben in England.

Landmarks with proper names often omit 'the' when the name already includes a specific identifier; 'Big Ben' is the name of the bell/tower and typically appears without 'the.' Using 'the Big Ben' is nonstandard. Suggestion: Say 'visit Big Ben' or 'visit the Elizabeth Tower' if referring to the tower.

× That is a building, uh, I heard the first time when I was a kid and I really have a good impression and I want to, umm, go to England once.

✓ That is a building I first heard about when I was a kid, and I developed a good impression of it, so I want to visit England someday.

Original mixes tenses and has awkward phrasing 'I heard the first time' and 'I really have a good impression.' Use past tense 'first heard about' for the initial event and 'developed a good impression' for the resulting feeling. 'Once' is ambiguous; 'someday' or 'one day' is more natural for future desire. Suggestion: Use clear past tense for past events and natural future phrasing for desires.

× Yes I do. I live in an apartment a couple of years ago and that that did GI give me a better experience because there are even no mosquitoes or flies in my room.

✓ Yes, I do. I lived in an apartment a couple of years ago, and that gave me a better experience because there were no mosquitoes or flies in my room.

The sentence incorrectly uses present tense 'I live' for a past time reference 'a couple of years ago.' Use past simple 'I lived.' Also remove duplications and typos 'that that did GI.' Use 'gave me' for past effect. In negative existence with plural nouns in past, use 'no' or 'not any' and pair with past tense 'were no mosquitoes.' Suggestion: Match verb tense to time expressions ('a couple of years ago' requires past tense) and remove typos.