建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Start with a concise topic sentence directly answering the question, then add one clear supporting detail. Avoid repetition ("near my home" and "near my house") and unnecessary filler. Use a linking word to connect the two ideas and be slightly more specific about the view to enrich content.

範例: Yes, there are both tall and short buildings near my home. For example, I live in a high-rise which gives me a lovely view of the nearby seaside, especially at sunset, so I can often see fishing boats and the horizon from my balcony.

建議: Give a direct answer first, then briefly explain your preference with a specific reason and an example. Reduce repetition of the word "photographable" and use a linking word (e.g., "because" or "so") to show cause and effect.

範例: No, I rarely photograph buildings because I find them visually uninteresting. Instead, I prefer photographing nature, for example sunsets and birds, because the colors and movement feel more peaceful and expressive in my photos.

建議: Answer directly and remove hesitations like "uh". Use one or two specific details about why you want to visit (e.g., unique shape, materials, or a famous architect) and link them clearly to your desire to visit.

範例: Yes. There's a new landmark near my house called the Fish Building, and I would love to visit because its curved, fish-like shape and glass façade are widely praised. I want to see the interior design and photograph the structure up close.

建議: Provide a confident topic sentence without fillers, then give one or two concrete reasons for your preference (privacy, garden, quieter environment). Use linking words (e.g., "because", "so") and correct small grammar issues ("in the countryside", "preferable to").

範例: No, I wouldn't. I prefer living in the countryside in a wooden house because it offers more privacy and a garden where I can grow plants. For instance, I imagine having a small vegetable patch and listening to birds in the morning, which feels much more relaxing than city high-rises.

× Near my home there are both tall and short buildings, but the one I stay in is tall so that gives me a really good view of the seaside that is near my house.

✓ Near my home there are both tall and short buildings, but the one I live in is tall, so it gives me a really good view of the seaside near my house.

The phrase 'I stay in' is an unnatural use of the verb 'stay' for permanent residence; 'live in' is the correct verb + preposition combination for where someone resides. Also 'that is near my house' is wordy and redundant after 'seaside'; 'the seaside near my house' is clearer. Added a comma before 'so' to join clauses correctly.

× I do not take pictures of tall buildings. I don't find them very photographable. Rather I would prefer taking pictures of nature like sunset or birds.

✓ I do not take pictures of tall buildings. I don't find them very photogenic. Rather, I prefer taking pictures of nature, such as sunsets or birds.

'Photographable' is nonstandard; 'photogenic' is the appropriate adjective. 'Would prefer taking' is acceptable but 'prefer taking' is more natural and matches the general preference. Added comma after 'Rather' and changed 'sunset' to plural 'sunsets' and used 'such as' for clearer examples.

× Many people have started going there and visiting and I've heard a lot about the architecture and infrastructure, so I would love to visit that someday.

✓ Many people have started going there and visiting, and I've heard a lot about the architecture and infrastructure, so I would love to visit it someday.

The clause is mostly correct but 'that' referring to the building is better replaced by the pronoun 'it' for naturalness. No tense change required; insertion of a comma before 'and' improves readability.

× Uh, no, not really. I've not really admired living in a tall building, but I would love to stay at countryside in a house made of wood.

✓ Uh, no, not really. I haven't really liked living in a tall building, but I would love to stay in the countryside in a wooden house.

'Admired' is incorrect when describing personal preference for living; 'liked' or 'been fond of' is correct. 'Stay at countryside' is ungrammatical: use the definite article 'the countryside' and the preposition 'in'. 'House made of wood' is wordy; 'wooden house' is the standard adjective form.

× So this is more preferable for me rather than tall buildings.

✓ So this is preferable for me to living in tall buildings.

'More preferable' is redundant (preferable already expresses comparison). The construction 'rather than' is used incorrectly here; use 'preferable to' or 'I prefer this to living in tall buildings.' The corrected sentence uses 'preferable to' and adds 'living in' to make the objects comparable.