建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 문장 구조와 단어 선택이 어색하고 의미 전달이 불명확합니다. 'tour buildings' 같은 표현은 틀렸고 관사 사용(예: a, the)과 복수형도 잘못되었습니다. 주제 문장으로 질문에 직접 답한 뒤, 이유를 하나 또는 두 개의 구체적인 세부사항으로 연결사(so, because 등)와 함께 자연스럽게 덧붙이세요. 예문 길이는 3문장 이내로 간결하게 유지하세요.

範例: There aren't any tall buildings near my home because there is a military airfield nearby. I would like to have some tall buildings close by, because I enjoy going up high to get wide views of the area.

建議: 의미 전달이 모호하고 단어 사용이 부정확합니다('lotopolis' 같은 단어는 존재하지 않습니다). 먼저 질문에 직접 답한 뒤, 이유를 명확히 설명하세요. 연결사(for example, because, so 등)을 사용해 문장을 자연스럽게 이어주고 구체적인 예시(어떤 장면을 찍는지)를 포함하세요.

範例: Not really. I usually photograph trees and the sky because I prefer open, natural scenes. Buildings often feel cramped to me, so I avoid taking many photos of them.

建議: 생각은 전달되지만 문장이 길고 반복이 있습니다('I would like to' 반복). 'When I was tired'는 불필요해 보이며 이유를 더 구체적으로 설명하면 좋습니다. 주제문→이유→구체적 계획(예: activity) 순으로 말하고 연결어(so, because, therefore)를 사용해 논리적 흐름을 만드세요.

範例: Yes, I would like to visit the Macau Tower. I saw it on TV and it looks exciting, especially because you can do a sky jump there. I think jumping from the tower would be thrilling and help me relax.

建議: 의도는 명확하나 어휘 선택과 문장 연결이 부자연스럽습니다('landscape of world' 대신 'the view' 등). 이유를 두 가지로 나누어 명확히 제시하고 연결어(and, because)로 자연스럽게 이어주세요. 2~3문장으로 간결하게 유지하세요.

範例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it would offer great views of the city. Also, high floors usually get more sunshine, which is good for my mood and health.

× Near my home there is a military airfield, so we don't have a tour buildings.

✓ Near my home there is a military airfield, so we don't have tall buildings.

The phrase 'a tour buildings' is incorrect. It seems the intended meaning is 'tall buildings.' The error relates to the use of 'there be' plus incorrect noun phrase. Replace 'a tour buildings' with the plural noun 'tall buildings' because 'we don't have' requires a plural noun to follow. Also keep the 'there is' construction for the singular 'a military airfield.' Suggestion: use 'tall' instead of 'tour' and match plurality: 'we don't have tall buildings.'

× I want to have a tour buildings near my home because I want to go up there and see the world.

✓ I want to have tall buildings near my home because I want to go up there and see the world.

'a tour buildings' is ungrammatical; 'tour' is not an adjective modifying 'buildings.' The intended adjective is likely 'tall.' This error is about incorrect word choice and noun phrase formation involving participles/adjectives. Replace with 'tall buildings.' Also drop 'a' before plural noun. Suggestion: use 'I want tall buildings near my home.'

× I take lotopolis of trees or sky but I don't take lot of photos of buildings because the image of buildings gives me a stuffiness and closeness.

✓ I take lots of photos of trees or the sky, but I don't take many photos of buildings because images of buildings make me feel stuffy and closed in.

Multiple article and quantifier errors: 'take lotopolis' is not an English phrase. Use 'take lots of photos' or 'take a lot of photos.' 'Trees or sky' needs 'the sky.' 'Don't take lot of photos' should be 'don't take many photos' for countable 'photos.' 'The image of buildings gives me a stuffiness and closeness' is unnatural: use plural 'images of buildings' and 'make me feel stuffy and closed in.' Suggestions: use correct quantifiers ('lots of'/'a lot of' vs 'many'), include articles where needed ('the sky'), and use natural adjective phrases ('feel stuffy').

× When I was tired, I saw a Macau tower on TV.

✓ When I was tired, I saw the Macau Tower on TV.

This sentence mostly correct but needs the definite article before a specific proper noun 'Macau Tower' and capitalization for name. Use 'the Macau Tower' when referring to the specific tower. Suggestion: capitalize and include 'the' for named landmarks.

× I would like to visit there because I want to sky jump there and I would like to see the world top of the world and I think it will make me feel comfortable.

✓ I would like to visit it because I want to do a skydive there, and I would like to see the top of the world; I think it would make me feel comfortable.

Several issues: 'visit there' should be 'visit it' or 'visit there' can be 'visit it' when referencing the tower. 'want to sky jump' is nonstandard; use 'do a skydive' or 'skyjumping' as activity. 'see the world top of the world' is ungrammatical; use 'see the top of the world' or 'see the world from the top.' Tense/modal alignment: use 'would like' and 'I think it would make me feel' for hypothetical desire. Suggestions: replace with idiomatic verbs ('do a skydive', 'see the view from the top') and adjust modals consistently.

× I want to live in a tall building because I want to see the landscape of world.

✓ I want to live in a tall building because I want to see the landscape of the world.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'world.' Use 'the world' or better 'the landscape of the area' depending on intent. Suggestion: include 'the' when referring to a specific noun like 'world.'

× And lots of sunshine or beneficial for me.

✓ Also, lots of sunshine would be beneficial for me.

Phrase 'or beneficial for me' is incorrect conjunction and missing verb. Use 'would be' to link subject and complement ('lots of sunshine would be beneficial'). Replace 'or' with a conjunction like 'and' or 'would be' to form a complete sentence. Suggestion: use full clause 'would be beneficial.'