建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve clarity, grammar, and conciseness. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, correct prepositions and articles, and avoid repetition. Use one or two supporting details and a linking word for coherence.

範例: Yes. I live in the outskirts of the city, and there are many tall buildings around my neighborhood. For example, there are several high-rise residential towers and a few corporate office blocks, which are very visible from my apartment.

建議: Make your answer more fluent and structured. Begin with a direct response, then give a brief reason and a specific example. Remove contradicting phrases and small hesitations, and use linking words like 'however' or 'sometimes'.

範例: No, I don't usually take photos of buildings because I'm not very interested in photography. However, I sometimes take pictures with my phone when there is a beautiful sunset or an atmospheric rainy scene.

建議: Clarify and organize your response. Provide a clear topic sentence naming the building, give specific reasons why you want to visit, and mention who you would go with. Fix grammar (e.g. 'a museum', 'on my bucket list') and avoid vague phrases.

範例: Yes. There is a local museum on my bucket list that I would like to visit. I have read many articles about its art and cultural exhibits, so I plan to go there with my daughter to see the paintings and historical displays in person.

建議: Be concise and natural: state your current situation first, then explain reasons with linking words. Correct small errors (e.g. 'on the sixth floor', 'midway up', 'I like living there'). Use precise vocabulary and avoid redundant sentences.

範例: Yes, I currently live in a 12-storey building on the sixth floor. I like it because it's high enough to give me privacy but not so high that it makes me nervous about heights, so living there suits me well.

× Yes, as a matter of fact I just stay in outer skirts.

✓ Yes, as a matter of fact I live in the outskirts.

The original uses 'stay' and 'outer skirts', which is unnatural for permanent residence. 'Live' is correct for where someone resides (verb choice), and 'outskirts' is the common noun. This fixes word choice and sentence structure. Suggestion: use 'live' for habitual residence and 'outskirts' for the suburban area.

× There are many high rise buildings surrounding my area where I live in and they are quite visible from my.

✓ There are many high-rise buildings surrounding the area where I live, and they are quite visible from my home.

Problems: unnecessary preposition 'in' after 'live', incorrect placement of 'my' without noun, and 'high rise' should be hyphenated as 'high-rise' when used as a compound adjective. Correct prepositions: 'where I live' (no 'in'), and 'from my home' completes the phrase. Suggestion: ensure prepositions and nouns complete expressions (e.g., 'from my home').

× In fact the building I'm living in that is also high rise, there many type of buildings, corporate buildings, S + 6 still parking buildings.

✓ In fact, the building I'm living in is also a high-rise. There are many types of buildings nearby, such as corporate buildings and mixed-use buildings with parking.

Multiple issues: awkward clause order and missing verb ('there many' lacks 'are'), incorrect noun phrase 'type' should be plural 'types', and unclear expression 'S + 6 still parking buildings'. I replaced with 'mixed-use buildings with parking' to convey likely meaning. Suggestion: keep one main clause per sentence, ensure verbs like 'are' are present, and use plural forms when referring to multiple kinds.

× So there are many kind of high rise buildings available around my area.

✓ So there are many kinds of high-rise buildings in my area.

Use plural 'kinds' after 'many' and hyphenate 'high-rise' as a compound adjective. 'Available around my area' is wordy; 'in my area' is concise and natural. Suggestion: use 'many kinds of' and correct adjective form.

× No, I don't take photos of buildings as I'm not very fond of taking photographs.

✓ No, I don't take photos of buildings because I'm not very fond of taking photographs.

Grammatically acceptable but 'as' can be ambiguous; replacing with 'because' clarifies cause. This is stylistic rather than strict grammar error; kept tense and subject-verb form. Suggestion: use 'because' for clearer causal connection.

× I don't even have a camera for such.

✓ I don't even have a camera for that.

'For such' is unnatural in this context; 'for that' or 'for taking photos' is correct. Suggestion: use natural demonstrative pronouns or explicitly state purpose ('for taking photos').

× Yes, I can definitely use my mobile, but once in a while when the sunset is very beautiful or maybe it's a rainy day, I don't mind taking a photograph but it it is not a part of my routine.

✓ Yes, I can definitely use my mobile, but only once in a while, when the sunset is beautiful or on rainy days; I don't mind taking a photograph, but it is not part of my routine.

Issues: repetition 'it it', awkward connectors and punctuation. I added 'only' and rephrased for natural adverb placement and removed duplicated word. Suggestion: break long clauses with commas or semicolons and avoid repetition.

× Yes, I have in my bucket list to museum which I would like to visit in my area for no specific reason.

✓ Yes, I have a museum on my bucket list that I would like to visit in my area for no specific reason.

Problems: missing article 'a' before 'museum', wrong preposition 'in my bucket list' should be 'on my bucket list', and relative clause order corrected: 'that I would like to visit'. Suggestion: use 'on my bucket list' and include appropriate articles.

× As such I would. I've never been able to visit there but I definitely plan to visit there in future with my daughter as I have been always reading about it.

✓ I've never been able to visit it, but I definitely plan to visit in the future with my daughter because I have always been reading about it.

Original has fragment 'As such I would.' and awkward 'visit there' (use 'visit it' or 'visit there' with place name). 'In future' should be 'in the future' in this context. Also 'have been always reading' should be 'have always been reading' for natural adverb placement. Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments and place adverbs like 'always' before the main verb in perfect tenses.

× It has a lot of art and culture pictures over.

✓ It has a lot of artworks and cultural exhibits.

'Art and culture pictures over' is ungrammatical and unclear. Use nouns that express museum contents: 'artworks' and 'cultural exhibits'. If intending 'on display', use 'on display' instead of 'over'. Suggestion: choose clear nouns and idiomatic phrases like 'on display'.

× I am right now living in a tall building.

✓ I am currently living in a tall building.

'Right now' is acceptable but 'currently' is more formal and natural. Tense present continuous is fine for current temporary actions. Suggestion: prefer 'currently' in formal speech.

× It is a 12 story building and I'm loving to live in it.

✓ It is a 12-story building, and I love living in it.

Hyphenate '12-story' and use simple present 'I love' instead of 'I'm loving to live' because 'love' is a stative verb not usually used in progressive form. Also 'to live in it' is awkward; 'living in it' is natural. Suggestion: use stative verbs in simple present and hyphenate compound adjectives.

× I stay in the 6th floor which is in the midway.

✓ I live on the 6th floor, which is midway up the building.

Use 'on' with floors (not 'in'), and 'midway up the building' is the natural idiom. Also change 'stay' to 'live' for residence. Suggestion: use 'live' for residence and 'on the nth floor'.

× It is neither too high because I'm scared of heights and it is neither too low because I wanted my privacy.

✓ It is neither too high, because I'm scared of heights, nor too low, because I want my privacy.

Use the correlative pair 'neither... nor' rather than repeating 'neither' twice. Also maintain consistent tense: 'want' not 'wanted' since it's a current preference. Suggestion: use 'neither... nor' and keep verb tense consistent with the present context.

× Also, it's lovely living on that building.

✓ Also, it's lovely living in that building.

Use 'in' with buildings generally (not 'on that building'). 'Living in that building' is idiomatic. Suggestion: use 'in' for being inside a building.