建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clear and concise: start with a direct topic sentence, correct grammar mistakes, avoid redundancy, and add one specific detail. Use linking words if adding details.

範例: Yes. There is a tall office building near my home that I can see clearly from my street. It’s been there since I was a child, and I often notice its glass façade reflecting sunlight in the afternoon.

建議: Improve vocabulary and clarity: use correct adjectives (e.g., ‘interesting’ or ‘unusual’), fix grammar and plural forms, and add a brief reason with a linking word.

範例: Sometimes I take photos of interesting or unusual buildings, especially if the architecture stands out. I often post these photos on social media because I like to share inspiration with my friends.

建議: Organize response and remove hesitations: begin with a clear statement of the building you want to visit, give two specific reasons using linking words, and avoid filler words like “uh.” Correct grammar (e.g., ‘it offers a rooftop buffet’).

範例: Yes. I would like to visit Baiyoke Tower in Bangkok because it is one of the tallest buildings in Thailand and it has a rooftop buffet with great city views. If I have the chance, I would go to enjoy the panorama and try the food.

建議: Be concise and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence, give one or two specific reasons linked logically, correct awkward phrases (e.g., ‘I prefer living in my own house’), and remove fillers.

範例: No, I wouldn’t. I lived in a dormitory at university and felt lonely and uncomfortable, so I prefer living in my own house where I have privacy and more space. Also, I like being in a neighborhood rather than a high-rise building.

× Yes, there is a tall building near my home and I can hear see it clearly.

✓ Yes, there is a tall building near my home and I can see it clearly.

Type IDs 26 and 27 apply: sentence structure and subject-verb issues due to an extra verb 'hear' before 'see'. Remove the incorrect verb 'hear' to make a clear, grammatical clause: 'I can see it clearly'. Ensure only one modal + verb combination is used (can + see).

× It's an off office building.

✓ It's an office building.

The phrase contains an unnecessary or incorrect article/word 'off'. Remove 'off' to use the correct noun phrase 'an office building'. Also keep the indefinite article 'an' before the vowel sound in 'office'.

× I'm not sure what is what build but I've been seeing is for as long as I can remember.

✓ I'm not sure what it is used for, but I've seen it for as long as I can remember.

Original has scrambled word order and incorrect verb forms. Use the cleft structure 'what it is used for' or simply 'what it is used for' to ask purpose. Use present perfect 'I've seen' (not 'been seeing' in this context) to express continuous observation up to now. Add a comma before 'but'.

× Sometimes I take photos of buildings when I see interacting or unusual architecture.

✓ Sometimes I take photos of buildings when I see interesting or unusual architecture.

The word 'interacting' is incorrect here; 'interesting' is the correct adjective to describe architecture that attracts attention. Maintain simple present 'I see' for habitual actions. This fixes incorrect word choice (adjective) and preserves tense.

× I usually put them on social media to share it to other person other people.

✓ I usually put them on social media to share them with other people.

Use plural pronoun 'them' to agree with 'photos'. Use the preposition 'with' after 'share' (share something with someone). Replace 'other person other people' with 'other people' for correct plurality and clarity.

× Yes, one do you think that I would like to visit is the Bayok tower located in the heart of Bangkok is one of the tallest buildings in Thailand.

✓ Yes, one building I would like to visit is the Baiyoke Tower located in the heart of Bangkok; it is one of the tallest buildings in Thailand.

Original has redundant and misplaced words ('do you think' is unnecessary) and run-on structure. Reorder to 'one building I would like to visit' and correct name spelling to 'Baiyoke Tower'. Separate clauses with a semicolon or period and use 'it is' for the second independent clause.

× It's offers uh uh buffet in the lo in the lop top and uh with a reasonable price.

✓ It offers a buffet on the rooftop at a reasonable price.

Grammar errors: remove filler 'uh', use correct article 'a buffet', use preposition 'on' for 'rooftop', and 'at a reasonable price' is the correct idiom. Also correct word order: 'on the rooftop' not 'in the lo in the lop top'.

× If I have ability, I would like to go.

✓ If I have the chance/ability, I would like to go.

Missing article before 'ability' and unnatural phrasing. Add the definite article 'the' or use 'the chance' to sound natural in conditional sentences. Ensure verb form 'would like to go' remains for a hypothetical.

× No, not really. I used to live in a dorm when I was at university and it made me feel uncomfortable and lonely.

✓ No, not really. I used to live in a dorm when I was at university, and it made me feel uncomfortable and lonely.

This sentence is largely correct; add a comma before 'and' joining two independent clauses for proper punctuation. Tenses 'used to' and 'made' correctly describe past habitual and result.

× I prefer living in my own house where I feel more comfortable.

✓ I prefer living in my own house, where I feel more comfortable.

Add a comma before the nonrestrictive relative clause 'where I feel more comfortable' for correct sentence structure and readability.

× And uh, I think I prefer to love live in the hobby because there are many people.

✓ I think I prefer to live in a dormitory because there are many people there.

Remove filler 'uh', correct verbs ('prefer to live' not 'prefer to love live'), correct noun 'dormitory' (or 'dorm'), and add 'there' for location. The meaning contrasts with earlier 'No'— advise clarifying speaker intent (possible contradiction).