建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and grammatically correct. Start with a direct topic sentence (e.g., "No, there aren't any tall buildings near my home."), then add one or two clear supporting details using linking words (e.g., "because" or "so"). Avoid repetition and incorrect word forms (e.g., "houses" vs "a house").

範例: No, there aren't any tall buildings near my home because I live in a neighborhood of detached houses. For example, most homes here are one or two storeys, which I find more comfortable and peaceful than high-rise apartments.

建議: Give a clear statement and explain reasons with coherent linking. Use past vs present tense accurately and avoid filler words and repetition. Provide a brief example to support your reason (e.g., when you used to photograph buildings and why you stopped).

範例: No, I don't take photos of buildings anymore. I used to photograph attractive facades when I travelled because I appreciated their design, but now I prefer taking pictures of people and places, so I rarely photograph buildings.

建議: Answer directly, name the building correctly and give specific reasons with clearer vocabulary. Use linking words like "because" or "because of" and avoid hesitation and repeated fragments. Mention what exactly interests you (style, history, architect) to make the detail more specific.

範例: Yes, I'd like to visit the Black Cathedral in Germany because I admire its Gothic architecture and intricate stonework. I am especially interested in its towering spires and the historical atmosphere it creates, which I think would be impressive to see in person.

建議: State your preference clearly, then give concise supporting reasons and a contrast if needed. Use correct adjectives (e.g., "spacious" instead of "decadent") and proper sentence structure. Limit to two or three sentences and provide a short example or future plan.

範例: No, I wouldn't want to live in a tall building because I grew up in a large house and prefer more spacious private rooms. In the future I hope to buy a detached house with a garden rather than move into a high-rise apartment.

× Actually no because I live in a house and my neighborhood is also living in a houses with a that has a really one or even 2 floors and I I think it's really comfortable then the tall buildings.

✓ Actually no, because I live in a house and my neighborhood mostly has houses that have one or two floors, and I think they are more comfortable than tall buildings.

Original sentence has unclear structure, extra words, plural/singular errors, and comparison issues. Break into clear clauses, correct plural forms (houses), use 'has' for neighborhood, use 'one or two floors' (not 'a really one'), and use 'more comfortable than' for comparison. Suggestion: keep subject-verb pairs simple and avoid repeated words.

× Actually no, but in the past I used to do it because I like the I like the whole buildings are good looking.

✓ Actually no, but in the past I used to take photos because I liked the whole building; I thought they looked good.

Problems: tense and verb form inconsistency and awkward phrasing. Use 'used to take' for habitual past and 'liked' to match past context. Replace 'the whole buildings are good looking' with 'I thought they looked good' for natural English. Suggestion: match past habits with past tense and use simple clauses.

× But now I see I find it useless because because I don't care if the tall buildings or even just the buildings are good or not.

✓ But now I find it pointless because I don't care whether tall buildings or other buildings are attractive.

Redundant verbs ('see I find') and repeated 'because'. Use present simple 'find' for current opinion. Replace 'if... are good or not' with 'whether... are attractive' for clarity. Suggestion: avoid repetition and choose concise vocabulary.

× Actually, yes, I would like to visit the black cathedral in the Germany.

✓ Actually, yes, I would like to visit the Black Cathedral in Germany.

Incorrect use of the definite article before country names and capitalization: 'the Germany' is wrong; 'Germany' is correct. Proper nouns and official names (Black Cathedral) should be capitalized. Suggestion: do not use 'the' before most country names and capitalize landmark names.

× I find this building very attractive because it's it has a really some some unusual vibes that that it gives and I like to I like to the it's architecture.

✓ I find this building very attractive because it gives off unusual vibes, and I like its architecture.

Multiple repetitions ('it's it has', 'some some', 'that that', 'I like to I like to the it's'), incorrect possessive ('the it's architecture'). Simplify: use 'gives off unusual vibes' and 'its architecture'. Suggestion: remove repetitions and use correct possessive pronoun 'its'.

× Actually I wouldn't want to live in tall buildings, I grew up in the large houses and prefer more spacious private rooms.

✓ Actually, I wouldn't want to live in tall buildings. I grew up in large houses and prefer more spacious, private rooms.

Comma splice; sentence should be split or connected properly. 'the large houses' unnecessary article; use 'large houses'. Add comma between adjectives 'spacious, private'. Suggestion: avoid comma splices and use correct articles.

× So in the future I would rather buy a decadent house and more than move into a high rise apartment.

✓ So in the future I would rather buy a spacious house than move into a high-rise apartment.

'Decadent' is incorrect word choice (means morally decaying) and 'more than move' is ungrammatical. Use 'rather... than' structure: 'would rather buy X than move into Y'. 'High-rise' should be hyphenated. Suggestion: choose appropriate adjectives ('spacious') and use correct comparative construction.