食物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Begin with a clear topic sentence stating your favourite food, then give 2–3 specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammatical errors (e.g. 'Greece food' → 'Greek food'; remove repeated words) and avoid contradictions. Keep it concise — no more than 4–5 sentences.

範例: My favourite type of food is savoury dishes, especially cheeseburgers and Italian cuisine. For example, I enjoy McDonald's cheeseburgers for their convenience and flavour, and I like Italian food such as pizza and pasta because of the fresh ingredients. I also enjoy some Russian home-cooked meals, but I prefer international flavours overall.

建議: Start with a clear past-tense topic sentence (e.g. 'When I was young, I had a sweet tooth'). Use correct vocabulary (remove 'Kansas' if irrelevant) and give concrete examples with linking words (e.g. 'for example', 'so'). Fix tense consistency and avoid vague phrases like 'typical moods.'

範例: When I was young, I had a sweet tooth and loved sugary treats. For example, I often ate ice cream and chocolate after school, and my family sometimes bought cakes for special occasions. Because of that, desserts were my favourite part of meals as a child.

建議: Good structure and relevant details. Improve by removing filler sounds (uh), using slightly richer vocabulary and adding a linking phrase to compare seasons. Keep it natural and concise (2–3 sentences).

範例: Yes, I eat different foods depending on the season. In summer I usually eat fresh salads and strawberries because they are refreshing, whereas in winter I prefer warm dishes like soups and hearty pasta to stay warm.

建議: Provide a clear, coherent answer using past and present contrast with correct sentences. Remove contradictions and repetition (the answer currently says both 'never eat chocolate' and 'really like chocolate'). Use linking words like 'however' or 'now' and give one reason for the change.

範例: Yes, my tastes have changed: when I was a child I loved sweets, but now I prefer savoury foods. For instance, I used to eat a lot of chocolate, however now I rarely eat sweets and choose dishes like burgers or pasta because I prefer stronger flavours.

× So I really like savory food.

✓ I really like savory food.

Beginning a sentence with 'So' is conversational filler and not grammatically wrong but unnecessary in a direct answer. Remove 'So' to make the sentence more direct and formal.

× I like cheeseburgers from McDonald's.

✓ I like cheeseburgers from McDonald's.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. It is retained for clarity.

× Also I really like Italian food and Greece food.

✓ I also really like Italian food and Greek food.

Use 'also' in mid-position for smoother word order. 'Greece' is a noun; the adjective form is 'Greek'. Change 'Greece food' to 'Greek food' to use the correct adjective form.

× I'm not fan of Russian food but I'm from from Russia and I really like.

✓ I'm not a fan of Russian food, but I'm from Russia and I really like it.

Missing article: use 'a fan'. Duplicate 'from' must be reduced to one. Sentence ends without an object; add 'it' to refer back to Russian food. Add a comma before 'but' to join clauses correctly.

× When I was a young, I have a sweet tooth.

✓ When I was young, I had a sweet tooth.

Do not use the article 'a' before 'young' in this context; say 'when I was young'. Tense mismatch: the time frame is past, so use past tense 'had' instead of present 'have'.

× Also, I really like ice cream and Kansas and I ate a lot of chocolate.

✓ Also, I really liked ice cream and candy, and I ate a lot of chocolate.

Tense consistency: describing childhood should use past tense 'liked'. 'Kansas' is a place name and makes no sense here; likely intended 'candy'. Replace with 'candy'. Ensure commas connect clauses correctly.

× So I think it's my typical moods when I was a child.

✓ So I think that was typical for my moods when I was a child.

Mixes present 'it's' with past time reference 'when I was a child'. Make tense consistent by using past 'was'. 'Typical moods' should be rephrased to 'typical for my moods' for natural word order.

× Yeah, in summer I often eat some vegetables and strawberries, but in winter I really like, uh, warm food like soup or, uh, pasta.

✓ In summer I often eat vegetables and strawberries, but in winter I really like warm foods like soup or pasta.

Remove filler 'yeah' for formality. 'Some' is unnecessary before plural common foods. Use 'foods' to match 'warm' as a descriptor for types of food. Remove hesitant 'uh' sounds.

× Has your favourite food changed since you were a child?

✓ Has your favourite food changed since you were a child?

This is the examiner's question and is correct; no change needed.

× Yeah, when I was a child I had a sweet tooth, but now I prefer savory food.

✓ When I was a child I had a sweet tooth, but now I prefer savory food.

Remove conversational 'yeah' at the start for a concise answer. The sentence is otherwise correct: past 'had' contrasts with present 'prefer'.

× Now I never eat chocolate, but I really like chocolate now.

✓ Now I never eat chocolate, but I really like savory food.

Contradictory statements: 'never eat chocolate' conflicts with 'I really like chocolate now'. Likely intended to contrast past sweet preference with current savory preference. Replace second clause with 'I really like savory food' for clarity and to maintain present tense.

× But when I was a child I was a fan of.

✓ When I was a child, I was a fan of sweets.

Sentence fragment: 'a fan of' needs an object. Add 'sweets' (or 'chocolate') to complete the thought and add a comma after the introductory clause for correct punctuation.